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Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Molly MT wrote:
Critique away!!

Well first...your bio is down-right confusing. . .And at parts a little rude. Italics are your sentences, bolds are my revisions, normal is just commentary.

I have been modeling not a long time, for about 6 months...
I have not been modeling for long, only for about 6 months. (Honestly, I would not include this in your bio, as it is constantly changing. I have been modeling for five months, and you shouldnt be able to tell.)
...when I got a mate who does photography to do a shoot and it was something I thoroughly enjoyed, and want to be successful at.
Okay...this thoroughly confused me...First, you made a run on sentence, which is bad. But then it just doesnt make sense. Not in the US anyway. I will try to take a stab at it...
I found that after I had finished my first shoot with my photographer friend, I had fallen in love with modeling.

I'm very enthusiastic and up for anything when it comes to modeling...
Good, except you contradict yourself right after by saying you wont do nudes if they arent tasteful...so you could revise:
I'm very enthusiastic and up for almost anything when it comes to modeling...
I will shoot nude as long as it is tastefully done, but as long as it is tasteful I will show anything.
Okay. This is also confusing. You made a run on sentence redundant as well. You already said you would shoot nudes if it tasteful, leave it as that.
The body is beautiful after all!
This is fine.

It's not about money for me it's just something that I enjoy and would like to be recognized for and if I could have half of the success that the most successful models got I would be delighted.
This is fine.

If you are interested please e-mail me and I will reply as soon as I can, and if I will give you my time.
Get rid of the last part. This makes you seem rude.

Thank for reading this hope to read comments and get approval from all you lovely people!



Now to your pics....

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100119/09/4b55f2330d86c_m.jpg
Ditch. This is not good. Just because your phone does a sepia tone, does not make it a good pic.

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100119/09/4b55f20076034_m.jpg
The diagnol on this is horrible,among other things. Leave this in the family vacation album.

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100119/09/4b55f1d524077_m.jpg
You look cute here, but it does not belong in your port. You need quality over quantity. This is horrible exposure, and makes you look sqaure.

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100119/09/4b55f18989f3f_m.jpg
Hands cut off, background is horrible, and not flattering for your stomach or face.

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100107/09/4b461b8e3461d_m.jpg
This is a bit overblown, and not a good faceshot of you.

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100107/09/4b461b7551918_m.jpg
This is gorgeous despite the crop. Keep.

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100107/09/4b461b4fe4db4_m.jpg
The person that edited this needs to leave your eyes with color in them.

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100107/09/4b4619cdd108a_m.jpg
Keep this.

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100120/19/4b57c3e6ae7d0_m.jpg
GET RID OF THIS.

Now.

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100120/19/4b57c3c4dbfda_m.jpg
This is soooo aweful for your port, girl. Please delete immediately.

Jan 22 10 03:59 pm Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Hannah Beech wrote:
Do your worst!!

Keep only your bottom row and this one.
http://modelmayhm-3.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100111/16/4b4bc78c54ac2_m.jpg

They are your best. The rest suck.

http://modelmayhm-3.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100120/18/4b57bdf3ed812_m.jpg
I dont understand what made you post this.
Horrible pose, post work and face.

http://modelmayhm-3.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100120/18/4b57bb198c58f_m.jpg
Delete this. What does this do for your port? Nothing. Ask yourself this before adding every picture.

http://modelmayhm-3.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100111/16/4b4bc78c54ac2_m.jpg
Us models have something we call the "hand bra"
Dont do it. There are more creative ways to do implied. And if your hand must be on your breast, then do not grab.
Watch your legs. You lost them here. And with them, your feet. There needed to be another light as well.

http://modelmayhm-3.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100111/16/4b4bc68a0f6e0_m.jpg
Myspace photos do not belong on MM

http://modelmayhm-3.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100111/16/4b4bc65fcb479_m.jpg
Keep. Meh. Work on awesome poses.

http://modelmayhm-3.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100111/16/4b4bc64679a59_m.jpg
Very senior picture, and he cut off your hands, but keep til you get better stuff.

http://modelmayhm-3.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100111/16/4b4bc51b99243_m.jpg
Keep til better stuff comes

http://modelmayhm-3.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100111/16/4b4bc485b5b5c_m.jpg
Skin color is very grey here.

Jan 22 10 04:05 pm Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Natalia Drulle wrote:
sure

Haha really?!

Get out of here. You know youre good tongue

I dont like #4. Its just so blech compared to your other photos. And Im not a fan of plastic skin, but its a very good commercial/fashion port.

Now leave you perfect woman wink

Jan 22 10 04:08 pm Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Kelsey Scheuer wrote:
ill play

Well I expected a plus size model from your avi dear.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/091019/19/4add216965cc6_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/091025/20/4ae5144659d85_m.jpg
This is n00b and does nothing to better your port.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/091125/10/4b0d7a06d81c5_m.jpg
Do this expression in a better photo.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/091125/10/4b0d799d7bfb2_m.jpg
No good for your tummy.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/090923/17/4abac2ad0c7cd_m.jpg
This looks like you smelled something nasty. You look like youve blamed it on the photog...

A lot of your pictures have what you think is your model face...and it either looks like youve smelled a fart or are pissed and snarling.

Id work on that most.

Jan 22 10 04:14 pm Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

_Ivy_ wrote:
If your still going I'm in

....
http://modelmayhm-2.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/090410/18/49dff507db995_m.jpg
Girl.

Please, Im begging you get rid of this.
If youre going to do the incredibly overdone cliche that is the railroad tracks picture, then do it well. This is baaaaad.
I dont know why its unedited, but it neeeeds to be edited if theres any chance of using it. The lighting, pose, and face are just so bleck.

Ugh. Im tired of looking at it.

http://modelmayhm-2.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100112/10/4b4cbc8c73e70_m.jpg
Noobs use selective color.

http://modelmayhm-2.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/090504/18/49ff92b98a222_m.jpg
I wish you had more neck here, and the color values were better.

Jan 22 10 04:20 pm Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Jennifer Susan wrote:
me please smile

I dont like the crop or expression here
http://modelmayhm-8.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100112/10/4b4cc5bfa6142_m.jpg

http://modelmayhm-8.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/091210/05/4b20f9c44d35e_m.jpg
I wish the crop didnt end on your back. Baaaad.

http://modelmayhm-8.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/091222/15/4b315165d8746_m.jpg
Your face here sucks hmm

Jan 22 10 04:23 pm Link

Model

Teresa Lavena

Posts: 2124

Portland, Oregon, US

If you come back to this thread, I would love to know your thoughts on my portfolio. Thanks.

Jan 31 10 01:30 pm Link

Photographer

Blue Moon Photos

Posts: 784

San Ramon, California, US

Hit me with your best shot!

Jan 31 10 01:33 pm Link

Model

JessieDee

Posts: 398

Orlando, Florida, US

Por favor.

Jan 31 10 04:45 pm Link

Model

Vee Kaye

Posts: 96

Canberra, Australian Capital Territory, Australia

do i dare try? ok smile

Feb 02 10 12:24 am Link

Photographer

Jag Images

Posts: 129

Baltimore, Maryland, US

Me? If you have the time please!

Feb 02 10 12:45 am Link

Photographer

ganeshphotography

Posts: 66

Davis, California, US

hit me with your best shot!!

Feb 02 10 01:31 am Link

Model

L I L I T H

Posts: 1217

New York, New York, US

I'll play.

Feb 02 10 05:31 am Link

Model

-Veronica

Posts: 272

Orlando, Florida, US

I'd love to know

Feb 02 10 05:37 am Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Keith Panton wrote:
Do your worst girls.

I generally enjoy your photos.

Your black and whites are not interesting. There should be a good reason to put a pic in black and white.

http://modelmayhm-8.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100112/10/4b4cb90575ba5_m.jpg
There is a harsh shadow across her face from her nose. This is never flattering. I can see the start of her right arm, and a little tighter crop would have gotten rid of this. Weird blurry hand.

Your avi has a weird blur at the bottom

http://modelmayhm-8.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100112/09/4b4caaacb20ce_m.jpg
What is this doing for your port?

http://modelmayhm-8.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100112/08/4b4ca1a2a44dc_m.jpg
You need another light to cancel out the shadows on her face.

Feb 06 10 12:47 pm Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

KatiexMarie wrote:
I changed 2 of my pics..would love to know if you think they are better as an image overall..chins n all haha x

http://modelmayhm-1.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100123/12/4b5b5bf4c2c39_m.jpg
I dont see what this is doing for your port

http://modelmayhm-1.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100119/16/4b5649b4831e5_m.jpg
Your eyes are weird but I love the pose

Feb 06 10 12:50 pm Link

Model

h a n n a h MARiE

Posts: 84

New Orleans, Louisiana, US

IM GAME. LETS PLAY.  i love critiques.

Feb 06 10 12:54 pm Link

Model

TarynEmilia

Posts: 266

Coquitlam, British Columbia, Canada

I'm kind of scared..But definitely interested..
Lets hear it smile
Thanks!

Feb 07 10 02:13 pm Link

Model

Caryna

Posts: 24

Lake Havasu City, Arizona, US

Hi! Please critique my pics? smile Im new to this so I don't have that many...

Feb 07 10 04:27 pm Link

Model

Courtney Seymour

Posts: 6

Indianapolis, Indiana, US

Wow...um sure why not....I'm a little scared lol
Thanks smile

Feb 07 10 10:31 pm Link

Model

britta britta

Posts: 1

Chicago, Illinois, US

k. don't see many "minorities" who asked to be critiqued so I'll take one for the team smile

Feb 07 10 11:38 pm Link

Model

Roxie Red

Posts: 1574

Minneapolis, Minnesota, US

I am so fucking happy someone started this, because I want to do it A LOT. so...please take a look and let me know what you HONESTLY think. Thanks guys!

Feb 07 10 11:55 pm Link

Model

Klarrissa

Posts: 2322

Los Angeles, California, US

I'll play

Feb 08 10 12:19 am Link

Model

Miss Bravo

Posts: 852

Mesa, Arizona, US

I'll play too smile

Feb 08 10 12:36 am Link

Model

Sloane Victoria

Posts: 201

Virginia Beach, Virginia, US

how about me?

Feb 08 10 03:24 pm Link

Photographer

usb photography

Posts: 276

Memphis, Tennessee, US

shoot for it

Feb 08 10 05:29 pm Link

Model

V e S n A

Posts: 54

Chicago, Illinois, US

go ahead

Feb 08 10 05:37 pm Link

Model

JessieDee

Posts: 398

Orlando, Florida, US

let me know when you get to me if possible smile

Feb 08 10 06:57 pm Link

Model

Marceline Sanguine

Posts: 17

Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada

Haha yes! Please make fun of me! big_smile

Feb 08 10 11:56 pm Link

Model

Senator Awesomepants

Posts: 5800

Greenville, Indiana, US

Mmm. Sure thing, I can take it.
http://www.modelmayhem.com/1168468
^that's my other profile. Crush my mildmannered alterego's ego! tongue

Feb 09 10 12:08 am Link

Model

Anthea Page

Posts: 100

Gold Coast, Queensland, Australia

please be harsh, i need a really good critique

Feb 09 10 12:13 am Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Lauren Vickers wrote:
Such a detailed critique!  When you have time, I'd love to know your thoughts smile

Your avi is a weird crop. You shouldnt be cropped right at joints.

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/091201/06/4b152e48b094c_m.jpg
Absolutely horrible background. I find the messy, dirty, hole-filled wall more interesting than you in this photo

http://modelmayhm-7.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/080817/10/48a8355dc8fd5_m.jpg
Again. Horrible crop. Neverending forehead.

Feb 09 10 07:54 am Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Vega 00 wrote:
I'm really interested in joining this critique

http://modelmayhm-2.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100127/14/4b60b9ffa7f81_m.jpg
This makes my physically ill.
Delete it immediately.
Your arm is horrible, and it just leads to a horribly posed hand. This makes you look overweight, and its out of focus. Not to mention the horrible lighting and location. Appalling.

http://modelmayhm-2.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100125/04/4b5d87cc392ad_m.jpg
It is rare that I find an overexposed photo that I enjoy. This is no exception. Lost all detail, and cropped at your elbow.

http://modelmayhm-2.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100110/09/4b4a120100ace_m.jpg
Orange tan much?
Your skin tone varies so much from body part to body part.

http://modelmayhm-2.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100103/17/4b413e15e2671_m.jpg
Dead hooker pose, your thigh looks fat, and theres a lamp growing out of your head

Feb 09 10 08:06 am Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Serena Cuevas wrote:
I've read every reply you've made here. I'd be very interested in hearing (reading) what you have to say about me! Thanks!

http://modelmayhm-8.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100119/17/4b565e18df7a5_m.jpg
This is bad. This is simply greytone. No deep blacks, no brigh whites. Your pose is okay, but it makes your stomach look less than tight, and your boobs look saggy. Work on posing your hands. This is bad. Also watch your neck.

http://modelmayhm-8.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/091208/17/4b1ef762bdb0a_m.jpg
This diagnol doesnt work. And its cropped at your elbow.

http://modelmayhm-8.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/091110/12/4af9cc138d6d0_m.jpg
This is underexposed and your right arm is dead.

http://modelmayhm-8.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/090915/08/4aafb85705a9d_m.jpg
I dont want to look at your armpit

Feb 09 10 08:10 am Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Jessikitten wrote:
I'm very interested.

I dont see any benefit for your port by the first three photos.

http://modelmayhm-4.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100204/19/4b6b910335c9c_m.jpg
This is badly lit. The photog can use just one light, but harsh shadows on your face is never good.

http://modelmayhm-4.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/090125/09/497c9b5a7bcea_m.jpg
This is a bad pose and a bad crop blended with a vacant expression and bad lighting.
Youve lost your feet in the black, and also lost your arm.

Feb 09 10 08:14 am Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Victoria Shaughnessy wrote:
Yes please smile

http://modelmayhm-9.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100110/18/4b4a8cac453fa_m.jpg
This is underexposed and your skin looks like Barbie's which makes the left eye look lazy.
Boring photo.

http://modelmayhm-9.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/090118/20/4974023f568ca_m.jpg
Completely lost whatever figure you have, its cropped at the elbow and your armpit looks hairy.

http://modelmayhm-9.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/100120/20/4b57d60d027c3_m.jpg
Just no

Feb 09 10 08:19 am Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Nicole M Berg wrote:
Definitely interested in your opinion.

You rock.

I have one thing
http://modelmayhm-4.vo.llnwd.net/d1/photos/091129/08/4b129fedbcccd_m.jpg
This is blurry. And weird crop, your hand is weird.

Feb 09 10 08:26 am Link

Model

Emma Jayne Model

Posts: 153

London, England, United Kingdom

i love this thread!

please feel free to tell me i suck too!

Feb 09 10 08:31 am Link

Model

Shaun Tia

Posts: 1696

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Lanya B wrote:
oh my. I'd love to hear what you think though.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/100114/16/4b4fba0f6afe5_m.jpg
This is cheese. This doesnt catch my eye. The pictures are badly done on the models parts. The layout you chose is unappealing.

You need to learn how to make series look good for the web.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/080427/11/4814992460362_m.jpg
This is out of focus and poorly executed. The bush catches my attention

Feb 09 10 08:34 am Link

Model

Andy Virus

Posts: 2230

Richmond, Virginia, US

I'll play

Feb 09 10 08:36 am Link