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Photographer

Massi

Posts: 19

Los Angeles, California, US

I've been shooting casually for about 2 years--mostly group shootout type events, and friends in public spaces when they finally give in.  Recently decided to get "serious" about this, and put together a port of my best shots with the goal of getting accepted as a test shooter for local agencies.  Core interest is fashion editorial and artistic costume/cosplay.  Would appreciate any detailed critique and suggestions.

Oct 07 12 10:30 pm Link

Photographer

dave phoenix

Posts: 1300

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Massi wrote:
I've been shooting casually for about 2 years--mostly group shootout type events, and friends in public spaces when they finally give in.  Recently decided to get "serious" about this, and put together a port of my best shots with the goal of getting accepted as a test shooter for local agencies.  Core interest is fashion editorial and artistic costume/cosplay.  Would appreciate any detailed critique and suggestions.

fashion editorial and artistic costume/cosplay

those don't seem to go together very well. i would suggest you make two different portfolios. i don't know much about the market for costume/cosplay, but i can speak a bit on fashion.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120815/12/502bfee4100e2_m.jpg

this is actually pretty nice, and i don't think it would look terribly out of place on a model's portfolio on an agency website. i don't think any of the rest of your shots would fit in nearly as well in that context.

Oct 08 12 03:01 am Link

Photographer

Lee_Photography

Posts: 9169

Minneapolis, Minnesota, US

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110829/23/4e5c8708ebecc_m.jpg
You seem to like to center the models in the photos
Show me the models eyes full, wide and open
Models right arm too straight, skin puckering at elbow
Legs lack detail in material [Too dark]

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110829/23/4e5c87d18580a_m.jpg
Like this image
Suggest moving away from wall, an out of focus non distracting wall is a great wall
Suggest staying away from shirts with big pictures and logos [Unless it is for the designer]


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111224/17/4ef68043de516_m.jpg
Great eyes
For more dynamics face head and body in different directions
The necklace  [Not sure what it is] is leading the viewers eyes out of the photo, a short one that does not touch the neckline works best

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120815/12/502bfee4100e2_m.jpg
Like this one a lot
Some suggested changes for another shoot
Lower chin
Center eyes
Lower models right shoulder
Push shoulder behind model

You have some quality work

Wish you continued success!

Oct 08 12 05:49 am Link

Photographer

Massi

Posts: 19

Los Angeles, California, US

Thanks Lee & Dave for the constructive feedback.  Will incorporate it as I further refine my portfolio.

Oct 08 12 08:38 pm Link