I'm 18 yrs old and am a fine artist and plan to begin a fashion series also.

Would love a critique on my work.

I really like your avatar. It's a great 'artistic' pic. The body scapes at the end of your port are good as well.  I think you should get rid of 4,7, and 9, the lighting is off and they aren't that good. The rest look vintage and are cohesive with each other. They're a good start to your port.  Good luck to you!