Anything im missing?
Is my bio professional and informative? Is it lacking, or too much?
Are my shots well chosen and organized?
How can i IMPROVE as a model?
Oct 17 12 03:36 pm Link
For starters, get your email address and phone# out of your profile. Give that info out by request only.
Flower? You kidding? Refer to it as genitalia and leave it at that. "Flower" - totally unprofessional. This whole section is unprofessional. It suggests a nervous little hobby-model.
Oct 17 12 05:48 pm Link
Houston, Texas, US
Sugar Sharai wrote:
You have some very nice images in there but they are lost in the noise of the rest of them. You should prune this book back to about 8-10 killer images (you some).
Oct 17 12 06:16 pm Link
New York, New York, US
Edit your profile n get rid of your phone number and/or your e-mail address unless it is set up just for this.
Oct 17 12 07:04 pm Link
Ok guys took out lots more photos, edite my bio, got rid of my number, kept llamaling email, What can i improve on NOW?
Oct 18 12 07:09 am Link
Orlando, Florida, US
Hmmmmmm. what can you do to improve your port . . . howabout comin' ta Florida, and shootin' with "SOS" . . . Just keep adding variety, and quality, you're headed in the right direction . . .
Oct 18 12 07:49 am Link
Thank you!!! keep in touch! Im considering colaborations worldwide in a year or two!
Oct 18 12 07:59 am Link
Orlando, Florida, US
Sugar Sharai wrote:
You've got an open invite to shoot . . . just lemme know when you're headed this way . . .
Oct 18 12 08:00 am Link
Your the first on my list !! Youll be the first to know!
Oct 18 12 08:06 am Link
Ithaca, New York, US
My opinion (for whatever it's worth), I would move this line further down in your bio, or remove it all together. It comes off as hostile or argumentative from the beginning:
******** NOT INTERESTED IN EROTIC, PROVOCATIVE, FETISH, BONDAGE ART.****
I would soften this line a bit:
I will not be showing my genitalia in Any of my shoots, it must be concealed by editing, shadows, angle, pose etc.
Perhaps, "I'm not comfortable showing..."
This line is a huge turn off for me:
***i will only be doing nude shoots for my rates. I will however do TF nudes on rare occasions that benefit my portfolio! Msg me for details. ***
partially because of the implications of "stripper rates" but also because the whole phrase is contradictory. Also, my feeling is that it should go without saying that you wouldn't be willing to trade for something you don't feel would benefit your port (nude or not). Perhaps you could say something like you're really selective about who you will trade for nude work.
Finally, go through your bio and clean up some small English details/typos.
It looks like you're off to a good start, and best of luck!
Oct 18 12 08:09 am Link
Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada
I agree with the advice above regarding your profile. I like a concise, inviting profile.
As for your pics. You have some good ones! There were only two that really stuck out in a negative way.
This lacks a professional finish, and the lighting is harsh and uneven.
And then the pic of the high heel in pulling on the thong. It's a cliche boudoir pose, and I don't like how your face is out of focus.
I would start by ditching those, and try to keep only the best as you move forward.
And I hope you give me a shout next time you are in Calgary because I would love to work with you
Oct 18 12 08:28 am Link
Tampa, Florida, US
I am interested in creative/artistic concepts, studio fashion, glamour and select artistic nude. I am adept at fluid posing.
Residing in Edmonton, Alberta but available for travel throughout BC.
I will accept alternate compensation - gas/gift cards, tear sheets, clothing, makeup in lieu of payment. Just ask.
LOCATIONS I TRAVEL OFTEN
Message me for email
*Tattoo - Small Playboy Bunny on hip
I am not interested in erotic or fetish work nor am I comfortable with full exposure of genitalia during nude shoots. I do require compensation for nude shoots.
(There's no reason to say you have a worldwide tour planned for 2015. I'm guessing it's something you want to do but haven't really planned. And not only does nobody care about something ANYBODY is doing 3 years down the road, it gives a negative impression).
That entire line about charging for nude then the fact that you'll do TF IF should be removed. You're saying you charge for nude but won't charge if the photographer is any good (implying if you quote a photographer your rates, you think the photographer sucks). Either say you charge for nude shoots or say "Select TF* only."
Remove your phone number and email (even if it only used for modeling. Especially if it's only used for modeling...to prevent scams.
There's no reason to list every location within BC you travel. Just list "BC" and let the photographer contact you about specific locations.
Remove the exclamation points - It's a modeling networking community, not an 8th grade yearbook quote.
As for your portfolio - remove all the old snapshots. They are all over the place and really bring down your recent work. They also look nothing like you in your recent images so I have to wonder how long ago they were taken. You look a lot younger in several of them. You also have 4 images of you in the jeans outfit...pick the best and use only one.
Oct 18 12 08:44 am Link
I've suggested in prior feedback thread[s] that you remove this image. It's totally worthless for a model's portfolio. In the glare of the low sun, you barely register in this image.
This isn't doing you any favors, either. Shots that do a better job of obscuring you than of showing you off are doing you a disservice. This might be suitable for a photographer's portfolio, but it's definitely not for a model's port.
Your port would gain by removal of this image, too, IMO. Big cheesy grin just doesn't look professional.
Heel hooked into the panties: cliche and poorly shot at that. Delete.
Love, love, LOVE this pose and expression. Too bad one foot's partially cut off, but the rest of you in this image I adore.
I wished this were a 4x6 landscape with all of you in the image, but what's there I like. IMO, your strongest nude work.
Oct 18 12 11:47 am Link
Oct 19 12 08:44 am Link
Orca Bay Images wrote:
Thanks for that! Yes some photos are 2 years old. I didnt realize it was that important to have EVERY photo less then a year old... If thats the case, i wont have many photos!!! Ive only done 3 shoots this year, all of which all photos are up.
Oyster Bay, New York, US
Sugar Sharai wrote:
Not with this beginning, which tends to deplete readers' patience and consequently make them give up on you:
Oct 19 12 08:55 am Link
Los Angeles, California, US
As others have written, take out that banner of "not interested . . . erotic. . ." etc.
The profile is fine. Substitute world tour planned, rather than 2015. As someone else pointed out that is too far away a date to make an impact or stir interest.
The profile is fine, as it now reads, except for that banner.
Your portfolio: I saw only one shot that made me curious, a profile of you, done by some unknown and unsung Canadian. I have yet to look at your nudes but you and the photographers you have been working with may just not have had good luck: technical issues ruining the best angles and poses. It happens.
I wish you luck.
Oct 19 12 09:11 am Link
Michael Pandolfo wrote:
Awesome advice!! Used it all!!! What photos do i get rid of now?!! I cant decide of the bodyscape figure nudes, and the headshots, and my jeans shots... But i limited it!! I feel like its lacking now though!! Is that just me?
Oct 19 12 10:49 am Link
Sugar Sharai wrote:
Personally, I'd far rather see a portfolio contain a big laugh than a grin. That grin might have been spontaneous to you, but it doesn't look that way to me.
One random question, can you ASK to have certain shots ONLY? I mean i know it doesnt mean i will get them, but lately i havent been recieving the more useful portfolio shots, from these photographers that actually DO take decent useful shots!! Its rather frustrating when trying to improve and having lack of availability to continue shooting more and more.
If you're shooting TF, you have an inherent right to get shots that benefit your portfolio. That doesn't mean that you'll shoot *only* shots for your benefit. It just means that you'll likely be shooting some stuff for the photographer's benefit and some other stuff for yours.
Oct 19 12 01:50 pm Link
WHAT?? you got rid of that pic in the ruffled white skirt? I really like that photographer and he makes you look quite damn good in nude pics 2,3 especially 3 with the vest on.
More nudes- your body is your money maker.
No the pics are well selected.- that black hat-last pic?? You arent doing anything in it, that huge over whelming dress that makes you look fat in the woods, etc
Oct 20 12 12:45 am Link
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada
Your profile/bio is concise and to the point. Lots of info without any extra fluff - I like that.
You list your hair colour as blonde and have images which show you with both light and dark hair. You might think about adding something to your profile to indicate which is the case at the moment - a quick snapshot on the profile page (or reference to a portfolio photo) which has your current hairstyle, colour and length would be good.
I know that lots of people include Facebook links. I never use them. If there is some pertinent information on your facebook page that I ought to know if I want to work with you then place it on your bio page.
You say you are interested in creative/artistic concepts, studio fashion etc. It would be helpful to have a list of photos labelled similarly as these descriptions can be very broad. I have no idea what you consider as creative or artistic. The lists you have currently don't really help especially one of them has over 400 photos. A short list of "stuff I'm looking to shoot" with 10-20 photos would be a great help for photographers.
In terms of photos, you seem to have a real mixed bag in terms of both style and quality. There is also some repetition which you could eliminate.
The three silhouette-like nudes are different, but similar. I recommend including just one or two of them.
I think this is one of your better photos (very eye catching) and it is near the end of your portfolio. I would move it up to the top.
I would get rid of this one. It is similar to the one beside it, but inferior.
In fact, I would recommend you cut your portfolio down to the following:
I hope that's helpful.
Oct 20 12 07:07 am Link
Indianapolis, Indiana, US
This image should go.
The post-production on the skin is bad (splotchy), and the eyebrow and lashes that were sharpened almost look as if they were pasted on afterward. Overall, it's not horrible and is eye-catching, as all the comments will attest to, but when you get down to the details, it falls short.
Oct 20 12 07:44 am Link
Tampa, Florida, US
Sugar Sharai wrote:
Edited bio looks great and I think your revised portfolio is much stronger. I know you're impatient to have better images and that's good but your portfolio has already improved from when you first started by leaps and bounds.
Oct 20 12 07:57 am Link
Bath, England, United Kingdom
Oct 20 12 08:01 am Link
yeah that protruding tooth look isnt flattering
Oct 20 12 07:57 pm Link
Ok guys!! Thanks for your honesty!! I got rid of well over 30 shots!! Holy that was a lot of effort!
Im debating on how strong my portfolio is looking now! Im working on fixing my lists, that will take quite some time!! However, as for lack of shots, ive got lots more shoots coming up, so i have lots of room for improvement/better work!
Thanks sooo much!! I needed that!
Hope there isnt any more fine details i missed?! One more look over from some people would still be nice!
Oct 22 12 06:38 am Link
Houston, Texas, US
For a better portfolio, you need to make a trip to Houston, Texas USA
Luv to do a shoot with you down here.
I LIKE what you got in your port so far, PLEASE let me know if you ever down here.
Oct 22 12 06:49 am Link
Nacogdoches, Texas, US
I didn't see your profile and port before you started this thread, but what I see now is good. It refreshing to see an 18 year old model actually take advice given to them by (in most, if not all cases) older more experienced players in the modeling game. So many times I've seen 18-22 year olds (young, in general) get all huffy when they ask for advice and then, when given said advice, respond as if they know FAR more than any of the responders. That, to me, is a good sign that you will actually take your time to learn how the modeling industry works, instead of assuming that you know it all, only to realize that you know nothing. Bravo!
I wish you all the best and hope your experience with MM is a good one. There is a LOT to learn and a LOT of hard work in your future as a model. Don't give up, stay safe and keep that positive attitude. It will take you far in this business.
Oct 22 12 08:42 am Link
L Bass wrote:
Thanks for that !!! I am ALWAYS learning and researching! Brainstorming and networking! And im always willing to take advice from anyone who offers!!
Oct 22 12 09:39 am Link
Your profile and portfolio are much improved... except that this image...
is still there. The heel hooked in the panty string is cliche' and the image is poorly executed. But it's gotten a lot of attention which is probably one reason you want to hang onto it, but I'd suggest that should be the next image to be replaced when you get better shots for your port.
Your attitude in this thread has been admirable. You've dealt well with some hard feedback and given up on some bad images you liked. It's refreshing to give advice to someone who actually wants to hear the advice and isn't just looking for fluffy egoboost.
If you're ever in central California, let me know.
Oct 22 12 11:41 am Link
thanks for all of the wonderful comments and help guys!! keep em coming if you notice i missed anything! ( i recently put up a makeup shot, please disregaurd that, its for a forum post!)
always looking to improve my portfolio!
Oct 25 12 04:21 pm Link
that avatar just misses the mark- your true strength are nudes- so your avatar needs to have much more skin showing not some country gal sitting on the porch waiting for her farm boy to show up
Oct 25 12 06:47 pm Link