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Photographer

Joseph William

Posts: 2036

Chicago, Illinois, US

I am curious

Nov 05 12 07:25 pm Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

fgvphoto wrote:
Me Please  thx

Good:

You shoot with some lovely models. I think you are best with portraits and head shots.

Bad:

First I would like to mention to watch out for cropping limbs. I've noticed a lot of your images ruined because of this.

I would definitely cut out a lot of images from your port. You have few good images, and many mediocre.

I will list of the images I think you should keep instead of the ones you should remove:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120807/23/502202a995f8a_m.jpg

Even though I don't like the arm cropped out, I still think it is a great image. I also like the styling.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120430/10/4f9eca7f7a047_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120510/01/4fab805a32356_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120808/01/502220988acc2_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121012/00/5077c12dc2f16_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121012/00/5077c320518fa_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121030/10/50901445e0a7c_m.jpg

You should consider weeding out the rest.

Nov 05 12 09:08 pm Link

Model

Maggie Xia

Posts: 452

Atlanta, Georgia, US

Merry Jane wrote:

Good:
You have a very lovely look, and a beautiful physique!

Bad:
The images in your portfolio are bland, and didn't really catch my attention. Maybe try some more conceptual, or themed work.

Your expressions and posing are weak, and there is not much of variety to be seen. Keep on practicing in front of the mirror, and finding posing/expression inspiration!

Thank you! smile

Nov 05 12 10:48 pm Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

Yin L wrote:
nodnod! yes please!

Good:

You have a lovely look, and you are fantastic at posing. Your port appears well developed, and it seems like you've worked with plenty of photographers, and have a lot of experience.

Bad:
I see some repetition in your portfolio. A lot of head shots with the white background, especially. They all just look to similar, and possibly from the same shoot. I would suggest cutting a few out. These would be my suggestions:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121104/14/5096f1a5a6465_m.jpg

This is to faded out, and under-saturated. It's also weak compared to your other images.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120805/10/501ea95273dc4_m.jpg

I would get rid of the top image, and then choose between keeping the middle or the bottom one.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120930/06/50684dc2b6f8b_m.jpg

The expression is weak, the smile looks fake. The image also looks a bit flat, and could have used a bit of editing for some contrast.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120812/15/50282c95ad097_m.jpg

This is also weak compared to the rest of your images. The eyes look dead. The expression doesn't seem to fit with the bright setting.

Nov 06 12 02:25 am Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

Alluring Exposures wrote:

I'm probably killing the thread by posting like I usually do... but go ahead!

Good:

Your portfolio is well developed, and it is obvious that you have done very many shoot, and have experience working with models.

Bad:

Your portfolio would be a lot stronger if you weeded out some of your weaker images. You should really cut it down to the images from your best and most recent shoots.

Here are some I would suggest getting rid of, though I would ask for more feedback on which others to get rid of:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111217/21/4eed75136ca3e_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110305/22/4d73294fcc4dc_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110117/17/4d34e83a1d44c_m.jpg

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/24501147 18+

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110514/01/4dce3833de92b_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/090617/21/4a39c60a327d2_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/091008/23/4aced2497ba82_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/100120/01/4b56d3c2c9233_m.jpg

I would also like to suggest a more subtle logo. The one you have currently is very distracting, and not a pleasant font to look at.

Also, you should try new editing styles, and tutorials to keep your editing up to date.

Nov 06 12 03:07 am Link

Model

Shauni Mary Jane

Posts: 986

Thief River Falls, Minnesota, US

zoe chanel wrote:
Would love to know smile

Good:

You have an interesting look, and potential.

Bad:

You've been on MM for a year, but it seems as though you started not that long ago. I guess a year isn't that long, but I feel like you should have more experience under your belt, and higher quality images in your port. Of course, I would suggest working with more, and better photographers, and more often as well. Get your portfolio better developed.

You should keep these images, and rid of the rest(they are no where near as strong or quality):

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120823/17/5036cdcd31e8a_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120823/17/5036cd48e66c0_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120804/03/501cf6ed9030d_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120708/04/4ff9699429c7c_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120701/22/4ff13731ca04b_m.jpg

Nov 06 12 03:16 am Link

Photographer

Camerosity

Posts: 5366

Saint Louis, Missouri, US

Please do.

Nov 06 12 03:38 am Link

Model

Yin L

Posts: 264

London, England, United Kingdom

Yes please!!!

Nov 06 12 12:12 pm Link

Photographer

Alluring Exposures

Posts: 11360

Mesa, Arizona, US

Thank you. I know my portfolio is not the strongest it could be but I do tend to make it more about the models than about myself so I post what new shoot I did, then slowly delete and keep only my favorites. I'd be very interested in your opinion strictly on my "Favorites" album smile

EDIT: Oh, and my current logo is my own handwriting.

Merry Jane wrote:
Good:

Your portfolio is well developed, and it is obvious that you have done very many shoot, and have experience working with models.

Bad:

Your portfolio would be a lot stronger if you weeded out some of your weaker images. You should really cut it down to the images from your best and most recent shoots.

Here are some I would suggest getting rid of, though I would ask for more feedback on which others to get rid of:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111217/21/4eed75136ca3e_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110305/22/4d73294fcc4dc_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110117/17/4d34e83a1d44c_m.jpg

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/24501147 18+

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110514/01/4dce3833de92b_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/090617/21/4a39c60a327d2_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/091008/23/4aced2497ba82_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/100120/01/4b56d3c2c9233_m.jpg

I would also like to suggest a more subtle logo. The one you have currently is very distracting, and not a pleasant font to look at.

Also, you should try new editing styles, and tutorials to keep your editing up to date.

Nov 07 12 11:22 pm Link

Photographer

fgvphoto

Posts: 59

Culver City, California, US

I am game,  Please and Thank you

Nov 08 12 12:52 am Link

Model

Jean Pierre Betancur

Posts: 38

Los Angeles, California, US

Do me ! wink

Nov 09 12 10:21 am Link

Model

megan rose

Posts: 23

Montgomery, Alabama, US

please. id really apreciate it.

Nov 09 12 11:18 am Link