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Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

Everyone: I have been overtaken by personal events the last few weeks -  I am returning and will start with Dominique Banner.   Everyone who has so far thrown their hat in the ring will eventually (lol) receive their critique -

Everyone will receive a critique until I announce here that I have ended this thread....

Please be patient and expect it to take as much as a couple of weeks to receive your critique when the line is long. If you subscribe to this thread you will always know when it has been updated.....

Open for business -   

everyone in before I close this will receive a critique.... 

I will not just disappear - whenever I call it quits I will name the last person to receive critique.  However I am busy so I can only do 2 or 3 a day and sometimes will disappear for a day....

Offering critique.  Basically whatever I feel like at the moment in response to your portfolio.

I might give a general portfolio comment

I might pick one aspect of your work

I might pick images to critique to make a broader point

If you don't think I'm good enough to benefit you, skip it.

I will not be rude or impolite or destructive

But if you are really a masochist - check out my feature and interview in ArtsNFashion Magazine Winter 2012.....

To everyone who has posted or written to thank me for the critique -  you are more than welcome.  My goal is to help you get better if I can.  That *should* be the point of critique, after all.....

Dec 01 12 04:09 pm Link

Model

Autumn Rose Brightly

Posts: 1097

Crowley, Texas, US

Fotografica Gregor wrote:
Offering critique.  Basically whatever I feel like at the moment in response to your portfolio.

I might give a general portfolio comment

I might pick one aspect of your work

I might pick one image to critique to make a broader point

If you don't think I'm good enough to benefit you, skip it.

Ask any question you want - but I will probably ignore it in favor of offering ----  whatever i feel like at the moment in response to your portfolio

I will not be rude or impolite or destructive

I will attempt to be constructive - but that does not guarantee that you will like it

First 10.

I may open it to successive groups of 10 at a time. 

I will post here when I am done with the first 10

and if I open this to successive 10s


If I learn something from it or enjoy it,  I'll keep at it a while.....

get ready
get set......

ah, you know what to do....

Me please big_smile

Dec 01 12 05:26 pm Link

Photographer

JIOPIX

Posts: 1183

Toronto, Ontario, Canada

Love to hear your thoughts smile

Dec 01 12 05:32 pm Link

Model

Alixx Rose

Posts: 225

Atlanta, Georgia, US

ooh i'm third!

Dec 01 12 05:35 pm Link

Photographer

Imageography

Posts: 6768

Saskatoon, Saskatchewan, Canada

I would be interested in your opinion, however you choose to give it.

Dec 01 12 05:42 pm Link

Model

P I X I E

Posts: 35327

Toronto, Ontario, Canada

hienvy

Dec 01 12 05:51 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

Autumn Rose Brightly wrote:
Me please big_smile

Hello Autumn Rose Brightly -

Looking at your port has put me in "dutch uncle" mode.....

I can't really speak to your market segment but in my area,  your height and weight seem to be consistent with your goals. However, the DC area is a marginally secondary market with respect to commercial or editorial fashion...  Anyway I am not going to be an old meanie and try to discourage you.

Your goals are laudable - and may even be practical

But it is also a serious business -

I really like the personality and moods I see in your portfolio -  and I see a few attempts at lifestyle work that is consistent with your goal...

I see a few personality shots that are charming and may do you service in terms of attracting photographers to work with you, but in the long run, these need to be outgrown.

I see a couple of different possible paths -

1 See your local agencies (sticking with those affiliated with the big international mother agencies) - might want to familiarize yourself with www.newmodels.com especially sections on agencies first...

and / or / both

2 get with the best possible photographers you can find - even if you have to compensate them.  You need to start adding more professional quality images to your portfolio - fully produced images - ie  hair / makeup / wardrobe / professionally photographed and edited.

In the midst of all of this, keep up with the important things in life that keep you real, grounded and growing as a person.

I like your goals -  but they won't come to you without a significant amount of effort and sacrifice -  Today I am inclined to root for you....

Dec 01 12 06:20 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

JIOPIX wrote:
Love to hear your thoughts smile

Okay  - a few points that I hope will be helpful -

I see some shots that need to be re-worked in terms of colour balance

I see some plastic skin

the light and falloff ratios are wrong on your images on muslin backgrounds -  I 'm not seeing enough separation from model to background -  you really need to slice and dice that light or if you are relying on falloff for separation,  get your light source a lot closer or your model a lot farther from the background.

or use some cast shadows to define separation..... (just an idea)

I'm seeing wrinkles in the muslin (some people don't mind this - it's a judgment call)  and in once case a bit of cottage cheese on a thigh. I see hot spots on a few faces from not well controlled fill or rim light.   - These are the fine details that make a difference.  I have been enamored of quite a few of my own images artistically, only to have someone point out these basic flaws that drag them down. 

Aesthetically,  I would prefer a bit more care in the contrast ratios in many of your shots (but that is a matter of my personal preference and style), and a bit more care with exposure values and better control of some of your secondary lights.  You've got the idea -  it's the basics, the fundamentals, that are always worth revisiting.

I like your outdoor work, the shots on a darker background, and your dance oriented work. 

My sense is that perhaps taking a bit of your work just a tad more seriously, working at perfecting some of what you are doing with lights,  trimming your portfolio of too many shots from the same shoot,  and learning to use some more dramatic lighting techniques may be in order, and will produce marked improvement.

Dec 01 12 06:37 pm Link

Photographer

DAN CRUIKSHANK

Posts: 1786

Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada

OK!

Dec 01 12 06:43 pm Link

Dec 01 12 06:43 pm Link

Photographer

JIOPIX

Posts: 1183

Toronto, Ontario, Canada

Fotografica Gregor wrote:

Okay  - a few points that I hope will be helpful -

I see some shots that need to be re-worked in terms of colour balance

I see some plastic skin

the light and falloff ratios are wrong on your images on muslin backgrounds -  I 'm not seeing enough separation from model to background -  you really need to slice and dice that light or if you are relying on falloff for separation,  get your light source a lot closer or your model a lot farther from the background.

or use some cast shadows to define separation..... (just an idea)

I'm seeing wrinkles in the muslin (some people don't mind this - it's a judgment call)  and in once case a bit of cottage cheese on a thigh. I see hot spots on a few faces from not well controlled fill or rim light.   - These are the fine details that make a difference.  I have been enamored of quite a few of my own images artistically, only to have someone point out these basic flaws that drag them down. 

Aesthetically,  I would prefer a bit more care in the contrast ratios in many of your shots (but that is a matter of my personal preference and style), and a bit more care with exposure values and better control of some of your secondary lights.  You've got the idea -  it's the basics, the fundamentals, that are always worth revisiting.

I like your outdoor work, the shots on a darker background, and your dance oriented work. 

My sense is that perhaps taking a bit of your work just a tad more seriously, working at perfecting some of what you are doing with lights,  trimming your portfolio of too many shots from the same shoot,  and learning to use some more dramatic lighting techniques may be in order, and will produce marked improvement.

Thank you for taking the time to look and express some really fine points.  Much appreciated.

Dec 01 12 06:48 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

Alixx Rose wrote:
ooh i'm third!

You also have put me in a good mood - I'm inclined to like you, Alixx Rose... 

"My name is Alixx Rose and I am a delight" - you say. Yes, I can see that....

I like that your goals are fun and reasonable.  I like that you sound like you take the important things seriously (like reliability and communication) and are not hung up on the other bs (like escorts, CDs full of "Raw" images etc). 

You have not been a member here for too long so I will keep that in mind....

My "prescription" for you would be to work with the best photographers you can find. You mention being poor, so I won't bother to suggest paying photographers (which *might* improve your port enough to get you a better variety of opportunities...)

I think that if you are fairly picky about whom you trade with,  try to get better quality images, a lot will take care of itself.   Work on that and check back with me (literally if you like) in six months for a "check-up". 

It's not that you don't have a long way to go, it's just that all in all, you are on schedule, and I don't see a need to rain on your parade.

Dec 01 12 06:50 pm Link

Photographer

ByteStudio

Posts: 921

Bainbridge Island, Washington, US

I'd like to hear what you have to say...

Dec 01 12 06:50 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

JIOPIX wrote:
Thank you for taking the time to look and express some really fine points.  Much appreciated.

You are more than welcome - I hope that you find some of it valuable in the long run.....   Cheers smile

Dec 01 12 06:52 pm Link

Model

Autumn Rose Brightly

Posts: 1097

Crowley, Texas, US

Fotografica Gregor wrote:

Hello Autumn Rose Brightly -

Looking at your port has put me in "dutch uncle" mode.....

I like your goals -  but they won't come to you without a significant amount of effort and sacrifice -  Today I am inclined to root for you....

Thank you smile I must ask though, what is "dutch uncle"?

Dec 01 12 06:52 pm Link

Model

MickCetera

Posts: 276

Chicago, Illinois, US

Aw hey are we still under 10 :-) I'd love to hear whatever you think of!

Dec 01 12 06:53 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

Imageography wrote:
I would be interested in your opinion, however you choose to give it.

Right then -  first off, I really enjoyed having a flick through your portfolio - I really like the perspective, the humour, the variety.  It was a pleasure.

I see a few things that from my personal perspective might use a bit of adjustment - so I'll share those thoughts for your consideration -

Your outdoor shots like this one

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 0efe7b.jpg

the contrast ratio between subject and background seems too steep -  the balance in tone between subject and foreground is a bit dissonant.  This applies whether it is a matter of light quality and exposure balance for fill,  or whether you are compositing.  A small adjustment would accomplish a lot I think....

This one
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30684107

looks a lot better in this respect

In some shots I see some skin editing that for my taste is just too much, it's going a bit plasticky -

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 80b849.jpg

and in another, just over-worked

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30684460
(this may be completely intentional in terms of creating your view of the pinup look, which was often a bit posterized)

and yet here
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30683930

also a pinup vibe - the skin looks a lot better

I'm not a huge fan of the crop here
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30684379

I want to see every square inch of Mosh smile   (and her skin looks just a tad overworked to me as well but it is not objectionable)

I really love your conceptual work.  All of these points should be taken as fairly advanced level nit-picks and evaluated as such.

Dec 01 12 07:08 pm Link

Photographer

RachelReilly

Posts: 1730

Washington, District of Columbia, US

have at it!

Dec 01 12 07:34 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

P I X I E wrote:
hienvy

Hi Pixie smile -  como ca va  ? 

I noted that you posted with some trepidation on my facebook page that you had stuck your neck out here -   you know I'm way too mellow to be afraid of lol

I love these

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29757490
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28106290
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27762415
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27143115
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/12398387

this one really bugs me

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/25638388

I think that even very conceptual art nudes should be flattering.  This one I find a bit jarring.  But perhaps that is as intended....

This on the other hand, is rather delicious
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/16595020


the other nudes range generally from nice to somewhat elegant at least in the figure / posing aspect.

Aesthetically I would prefer more slicing and dicing of light, more shadowing and dramatic light in your portfolio especially with the figure work  - but perhaps this is not to your taste?   And it is there to a degree in the film noir bits....

All in all, for what you are trying to do and given the market you work in, you're doing fine. 

I very much like that you describe your body features very frankly - this is very respectful of the photographer's needs and is very much appreciated. 

I personally would like to see more of the elegant and less emphasis on some of the conceptual, but I speak as a consumer, as it were, with a particular viewpoint and taste.  Just because I may not "get" some of your work ( a small bit really ) does not mean that it is not worthwhile or may not be very much appreciated by others....

Après tout, les gouts et les colours ne se discutent pas, n'est ces pas?

Dec 01 12 07:42 pm Link

Model

Stephanie Newman

Posts: 69

Toms River, New Jersey, US

I just started so I could use your feedback

Dec 01 12 07:43 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

Autumn Rose Brightly wrote:

Thank you smile I must ask though, what is "dutch uncle"?

Google is your friend smile   though I was not terribly, was I?   smile

Dec 01 12 08:02 pm Link

Model

Autumn Rose Brightly

Posts: 1097

Crowley, Texas, US

Fotografica Gregor wrote:

Google is your friend smile   though I was not terribly, was I?   smile

Googled it smile And I knew what I was getting into, I am in the Critique section afterall big_smile

Dec 01 12 11:55 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

DAN CRUIKSHANK wrote:
OK!

Hello Dan Cruikshank -

I always enjoy checking in with your portfolio -  I appreciate your artistic vision.

I think that there are a few things to consider that might bring it up a notch for you -

let's start with using this image as an example

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30699668

This is a lovely juxtaposition in texture and form.

I understand that you are trying to create depth in this shot,  but the perspective foreshortens your model

I think a shift of perspective to a somewhat lower point of view will correct that issue while still achieving the depth you are looking for.

model direction -  there are so many poses that would have been stronger in this environment.  The scene is so lovely, the pose, not so much. 

While you are shifting to a lower point of view, think laterally as well - having the model in the middle of your foreground is a lost opportunity to create some dynamic tension - 

re-imagine this shot, with the model closer (laterally) to the foreground tree on the right, and the line of trees on the left un-stacked a bit, for even more of a sense of depth.....

Look also at the white balance -  I think that if you tweaked that a bit it might be a  stronger image.

Let's look at this one

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29081381

it's a brilliant idea and well lit and toned - however if the perspective were shifted to the right a fair bit it would be a much more dynamic image

Other than this shot
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30699664

I would have tried to keep your model out of the middle of the frame, match her posing a little better to the environment on the shots with trees,  watch perspective so that there is not a dissonance between the effect on the model vis a vis the background or foreground....

These are fine points -   

I like what you are doing very much. I'm just trying to give you some ideas that might take it up just a notch....

Dec 02 12 07:30 am Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

Tianxiao Zhang wrote:
Please do...

A few newer ones as well
http://farm9.staticflickr.com/8327/8139 … ee2b_c.jpg
http://farm9.staticflickr.com/8349/8189 … 7ef0_b.jpg
http://farm9.staticflickr.com/8481/8212 … e03e_c.jpg

Hello Tianxiao Zhang -

The first thing I note, is that though you have had a model mayhem profile for a couple of years, your profile does not give me very much.  I don't know what it is that you are interested in, what your policies are with respect to trade, compensation,  images etc.  I don't know what your preferences are and I get no sense of your working personality. 

Let us know more about yourself, your work, your interests in working with models.

In terms of practical critique - it is mostly the little things

http://farm9.staticflickr.com/8327/8139 … ee2b_c.jpg

Poor thing is missing half her hands, and stuck right near the middle of this big empty white space... 

a better crop would improve this.  If you are going to use negative space in a composition,  *use* it -   have the model's pose or gaze lead us into it, or use it to create a dynamic tension.

Same issues here - 
http://farm9.staticflickr.com/8327/8139 … ee2b_c.jpg

a better crop, a better placement of your model in the space, perhaps a better perspective as well

this is lovely
http://farm9.staticflickr.com/8481/8212 … e03e_c.jpg

I like this model, the pose, the style
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 6#18942006

but it would have been  a stronger image with the cinderblock wall in focus

this is smashing
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/19635366

but the skin appears over-worked to me, with loss of what would have been elegant detail in her shoulders, clavicles etc.  Looks like she's been blurred.

Composition - most of your shots have the model in the middle of the frame. This is boring.  Just a shift there creates much more dynamic work.  The "rule of thirds" or better yet, the golden mean and golden ratios, are instructive.  Rules are meant to be broken, but only by those who really are skilled in their adaptation. 

All in all a basically good portfolio that would improve greatly with attention to detail.

Dec 02 12 07:55 am Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

ByteStudio wrote:
I'd like to hear what you have to say...

Hello ByteStudio -


First of all, I really really like your creative vision, your model choices and the wonderfully lush styling and setups in your portfolio.

These shots
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30674315
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30067495
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27440292
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27441196
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/19752444

would have been stronger with a golden ratio composition - they are beautiful but you are losing something by having your model in or too near the middle of the frame, especially here:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/19752444

where a shift in lateral perspective would have been smashing

I could see improvement with better model direction in a few instances

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/6730104
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/12549515

The model's arm reaching toward the viewer - there would have been better ways to pose these, maybe requiring a change in perspective as well

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/17307079
the left hand would have been better "aimed" downward with a nice shape, fingers slightly spread, lightly touching her left thigh

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/16117676
the model's right hand, instead of disappearing, could have been placed in an elegant manner upon the calf instead of hooked under the knee

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/4831026
the arm holding the umbrella, moved away from the body and lifted just a bit...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/21142708
disappearing left hand....

and so forth -  this is not a critique of the models - it is the job of the photographer to see such things and direct.  Arms or legs foreshortened by perspective, inelegant hand shapes or positions,  disappearing hands or parts of arms etc are very very basic. 

In sum - more attention to perspective, composition, and model direction are called for. 

You have otherwise a smashing portfolio - I hope you find these observations useful.

Dec 02 12 08:35 am Link

Photographer

DAN CRUIKSHANK

Posts: 1786

Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada

Thanks a lot! Those points all make sense... and specifically the two shots in the trees I knew something was kind of 'off' with them, so it's good to see that you picked out a few missing details smile

Dec 02 12 09:29 am Link

Model

Alixx Rose

Posts: 225

Atlanta, Georgia, US

thank you so much! That was all very reassuring, and I'll definetally make sure to check back with you and make sure I'm still on track
=]

Dec 02 12 10:42 am Link

Model

P I X I E

Posts: 35327

Toronto, Ontario, Canada

Fotografica Gregor wrote:

Hi Pixie smile -  como ca va  ? 

I noted that you posted with some trepidation on my facebook page that you had stuck your neck out here -   you know I'm way too mellow to be afraid of lol

I love these

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29757490
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28106290
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27762415
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27143115
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/12398387

this one really bugs me

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/25638388

I think that even very conceptual art nudes should be flattering.  This one I find a bit jarring.  But perhaps that is as intended....

This on the other hand, is rather delicious
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/16595020


the other nudes range generally from nice to somewhat elegant at least in the figure / posing aspect.

Aesthetically I would prefer more slicing and dicing of light, more shadowing and dramatic light in your portfolio especially with the figure work  - but perhaps this is not to your taste?   And it is there to a degree in the film noir bits....

All in all, for what you are trying to do and given the market you work in, you're doing fine. 

I very much like that you describe your body features very frankly - this is very respectful of the photographer's needs and is very much appreciated. 

I personally would like to see more of the elegant and less emphasis on some of the conceptual, but I speak as a consumer, as it were, with a particular viewpoint and taste.  Just because I may not "get" some of your work ( a small bit really ) does not mean that it is not worthwhile or may not be very much appreciated by others....

Après tout, les gouts et les colours ne se discutent pas, n'est ces pas?

Thank you very much for the critique. You are right that I should focus on more 'beauty' stuff. But it seems like people want to shoot conceptual things with me most of the time... This one photo you didn't like much is probably more fetish than the rest of my work, and I don't shoot that stuff as much anymore, so it kinda doesn't belong anymore.

I'm actually thankful you gave me a critique because it gave me hindsight on where I am as a model. If it makes any sense. lol

Dec 02 12 12:18 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

MickCetera wrote:
Aw hey are we still under 10 :-) I'd love to hear whatever you think of!

What I glean from your profile is that you wish to increase your value as a model - this is an interesting and mature point of view.

So let me give you a couple of ideas to think about -

the serious work for male models is in fashion.  In fashion, your posing is a vehicle to showcase the couture.  You need to think about posing that accomplishes this, and does not detract from this.

One of the biggies is that you should not use your arms in ways that block the view of the couture, should not touch yourself or the clothes in ways that create distortion.

In more basic modeling,  arms or hands that "disappear" are a no-no. In your avatar, for example, you appear to have one arm and half of a hand on the other arm.   It is a nice relaxed snapshot pose - not something you want to use to promote yourself...

Also there should be a little bit of separation between your arms and your body or head, a little "daylight" in between ideally.

When modeling, posture is your friend.  An elegant posture speaks poise and looks good to the camera.  Not a stiff posture (I am not seeing "stiff" in your port by the way)  but one that shows proper spinal alignment.  I would not be surprised if a basic Yoga class would improve the statement you make in your modeling. 

For a male model, versatility is paramount.  Take as many opportunities as you can to practice your craft.

That's really all I've got for you and hope it leads you in a good direction.

Dec 02 12 09:07 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

Rachel Reilly wrote:
have at it!

Hello Rachel Reilly -

basics - basics - basics


More care with exposure values, skin tones,  hands cut off in composition,  lost opportunities in composition where models are too much in the centre of the frame.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … d37613.jpg
you needed some sort of fill to deal with the shadows and contrast ratio
better model direction (the cut off arm disappearing into space)
the perspective is jarring - taken from too low a level

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30711823
composition -hand cut partially off
model posing direction - left arm blocking your couture - a huge no-no
if you want to do fashion photography
model hands curled -  you want your model's hands to be almost straight but not stiff, fingers slightly spread, any touching of the skin hair or couture to be "pretend" with no pressure so as not to create distortion.   Hands must be *elegant*. 

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30709829
you don't want "disappearing limbs" - 
cut off hands

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30709632
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30708163
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30709688
composition -  model too centered in the frame  - study up on the golden ratios and golden mean - a slight shift in composition in these images would have improved them dramatically. 

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 3a1ce8.jpg
lit from the wrong direction throwing harsh 1/2 arm shadow
and your model has brassiere lines on her skin
pay attention to direction and quality of light
models should immediately remove underwear when showing up
on a shoot and put on a seasonally appropriate robe until hair and MUA
are done, so as to avoid lines from brassiere and panty

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30332068
posture -  elegant posture is your friend.  Thereagain this is the photographer's responsibility.
partially cut off hand in your composition

In sum -

when shooting out of doors, either shoot very early or late in the day, or be prepared to scrim (block or filter) harsh sunlight or to fill with flash or strobe or reflector to soften shadows

learn the basic rules of composition and perspective -  don't be content with the rule of thirds (though you are for the most part not following that either) - study the golden mean and golden ratios and apply them.  When you are so deeply familiar with them and their use that you understand them completely, you may choose to "break" these rules to good effect.  You and I both are a long way from that point.

Keep an eye on what is going on in your entire frame - you are cutting off bits of hands etc. 

pay attention to perspective - some of your standing model shots would have given your model more length if shot from a slightly lower perspective, some of your tight shots were shot from too low a perspective.  Generally, standing models should be shot from a level between the hip and knee, unless you are going for a higher point of view, in which case be careful not to foreshorten your model.  1/2 and head and shoulders shots need to be shot from nearly level, or from slightly above - not too much deviation-  if as you say in your profile your goal is to shoot editorial work.

pay attention to direction and quality of light and pay careful attention to shadowing especially on the model or couture. 

model preparation -  avoid underwear lines

model direction -  learn the basics of model posing - don't be so focused on your concept or style or whatever that you forget that model posing makes or breaks a shot - and it is ultimately the photographer's job to pay attention to and direct your models. 

contrast ratios -  hard light or steep contrast ratios are tools for the extremely skilled and best avoided until more basics are mastered.

That is more than enough to keep you busy for a while -   please do feel free to check back in with me in the future if you want an updated private critique.  I would be happy to help if I can.  After all, we're almost neighbors smile

Dec 02 12 09:51 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

Stephanie Newman wrote:
I just started so I could use your feedback

Hi Stephanie Newman -

First off I don't see any clearly elucidated goals in your profile so it is hard to critique your images with respect to your goals.

I did notice lack of grammar and mis-spellings, changes of voice from first to third person etc.   This should be cleaned up - take the time to make it a stronger presentation and one that sounds lucid -  I have found that the profile sets the tone for the type of people who will want to work with you, especially as a newer model.

As far as the images go,  pretty much as I would expect for someone new.  Nothing terribly wrong, and I'm not going to spend a lot of time here doing model development and coaching posing. 

I will say be aware of your hands - in several shots you have fairly nice hand positions but in quite a few they are curled -  nearly straight hands but not tense, with slightly separated fingers are called for.

I will also suggest becoming more aware of your facial expressions and what you are doing with your eyes.  When looking at the camera do not look at the end of the lens - your gaze needs to be focused at or behind the plane of the photographer to look "sharp". 

Focus on these things and hit me up for a "check-up" in six months.

Oh - and while you're at it,  I highly suggest familiarizing yourself with the information found here:

http://www.newmodels.com

And best of luck

Dec 03 12 07:34 am Link

Model

MickCetera

Posts: 276

Chicago, Illinois, US

Fotografica Gregor wrote:

What I glean from your profile is that you wish to increase your value as a model - this is an interesting and mature point of view.

So let me give you a couple of ideas to think about -

the serious work for male models is in fashion.  In fashion, your posing is a vehicle to showcase the couture.  You need to think about posing that accomplishes this, and does not detract from this.

One of the biggies is that you should not use your arms in ways that block the view of the couture, should not touch yourself or the clothes in ways that create distortion.

In more basic modeling,  arms or hands that "disappear" are a no-no. In your avatar, for example, you appear to have one arm and half of a hand on the other arm.   It is a nice relaxed snapshot pose - not something you want to use to promote yourself...

Also there should be a little bit of separation between your arms and your body or head, a little "daylight" in between ideally.

When modeling, posture is your friend.  An elegant posture speaks poise and looks good to the camera.  Not a stiff posture (I am not seeing "stiff" in your port by the way)  but one that shows proper spinal alignment.  I would not be surprised if a basic Yoga class would improve the statement you make in your modeling. 

For a male model, versatility is paramount.  Take as many opportunities as you can to practice your craft.

That's really all I've got for you and hope it leads you in a good direction.

Thanks so much, it's always refreshing to hear a genuinely good critique from a genuinely good photographer. I will embark on a yoga journey now. And I have a ton more shoots booked already so ill have the opportunity to work on my posing.

Dec 03 12 04:29 pm Link

Model

Melodye Joy

Posts: 542

Rancho Cucamonga, California, US

Fotografica Gregor wrote:
Critique open to the first 10 additional people -

I am able to do 2-4 a day so be patient. I put a lot into some of these. 

Offering critique.  Basically whatever I feel like at the moment in response to your portfolio.

I might give a general portfolio comment

I might pick one aspect of your work

I might pick one image to critique to make a broader point

If you don't think I'm good enough to benefit you, skip it.

Ask any question you want - but I will probably ignore it in favor of offering ----  whatever i feel like at the moment in response to your portfolio

I will not be rude or impolite or destructive

I will attempt to be constructive - but that does not guarantee that you will like it

First 10.


If I learn something from it or enjoy it,  I'll keep at it a while.....

get ready
get set......

ah, you know what to do....

I'm probably too late, but think you could squeeze in one more? wink

Dec 04 12 09:56 am Link

Model

_eMMe_

Posts: 842

Florence, Toscana, Italy

Ok, let's go smile
Your critique look interesting.

Dec 04 12 10:06 am Link

Model

Egle Aida Damulyte

Posts: 375

London, England, United Kingdom

i'm in smile

Dec 04 12 10:33 am Link

Model

angie marie w

Posts: 22

Bridgeville, Delaware, US

mine please...im just started this around oct and its just a hobby for now...but i love getting my pic taken and trying to get an awesome shot out of it...

Dec 04 12 06:01 pm Link

Photographer

LLOYD WRIGHT

Posts: 664

Newcastle upon Tyne, England, United Kingdom

i know i can't count....but i may be better with a camera...or maybe not!!!

Dec 04 12 06:09 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

Melodye Joy wrote:
I'm probably too late, but think you could squeeze in one more? wink

Hi Melodye Joy smile

you seem to be first in line for the second round of 10 -

right then -

It seems to me that you are accomplishing a lot, given your credits.  You know that you do not fit the standards for editorial or commercial fashion, but you've made a niche for yourself -   congratulations.

And you have at least 5 years experience given your MM join date. 

So what I am going to have to say are fine points, things that might help you refine your craft and hopefully take things up yet another notch.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27350432
you have a great face - and the style / concept are wonderful, but this would have been a decidedly stronger image, with better posture. When I am shooting beauty work I reject right off the top any shots with stooped shoulders. 

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29709112
This shot is beautiful - lovely look, style and mood - but it is distracting that your right hand is obscured.  This would have been improved with an elegant nearly straight hand, fingers slightly spread, tilted in plane slightly toward the camera, and pretend-touching your hair.   

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/25612855
Love the personality here -  but your arm position is a detraction - if the shot had been cropped wider you would have had your elbow pointing at the camera - a no-no -  if you want bent elbows with hands up around the face or hair, always rotate your arm at least 60 degrees away from the camera.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/25390379
This one is tough - you are trying to hold the sheer fabric with your left hand, resulting in the hand being "cut off" visually where you are grasping the fabric.  A much more lovely effect could have been achieved with your hand nearly straight, fingers spread a fair bit,  *inside* the fabric, lifting it into position, with your hand in an elegant shape showing through.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30661245
here the goal is to hold the box, but the way your left arm is doing it results in a disappearing arm.  Thereagain, elegant hand and arm positions -  you could have used your hand in a nice shape to support the under side of the box or to pull it toward you....

you notice that I am harping on arms and hands -  this is a consistent issue in your port -  and a rather advanced one, as is fitting with your experience. 

I also see a few shots where the chin is lifted too much -  and one where the chin being lifted is appropriate and dynamic

so I see three areas of concentration

Back / shoulder posture
neck / head / chin posture
elegant hands and arms

You are doing well -  hopefully paying some attention to these facets of your craft will result in furthering your achievements.

Dec 04 12 06:44 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

_eMMe_ wrote:
Ok, let's go smile
Your critique look interesting.

Hello _eMMe_ 

You are doing some very lovely work.  My critique for you will focus on refined points because you have a strong basis working for you.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30608152
I love this shot - the expression, the style, the mood, the light -  the one unfortunate bit is the left elbow pointing pretty much toward the camera. It is a distraction from an otherwise powerful image.   

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30608114
Love the pose, the style, the vibe - but don't like the curled fingers.  Elegant hands would have added tremendously to this

elegant hands are nearly straight, fingers slightly spread, and never hidden in or behind couture or hair.  elegant hands only pretend touch the body, the couture, the hair or skin. 

This is an advanced level refinement.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30608066
Elegant pose - love the look, the mood -  the basis in foot / knee / hip positions is lovely.  The arms are not.  Your right elbow points toward the camera while the arm disappears in the process of blocking the line of the neck.  The left arm disappears not only in the fabric, which would be okay with this shot, but also behind the head.....

a better pose might have included the right arm reaching down and touching yourself on or about the right hip or thigh with an elegant hand position,  the right arm elevated, or if needs be extended more so that it did not disappear behind the head.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27723632
love the pose, the mood, the style, the concept - don't particularly love the disappearing left hand.  An elegant hand position would have been a strong plus - the right hand pulling on the garment could have been done more gracefully as well.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27723644
I love this shot as well - I can imagine how much more I would love it with two elegantly formed and placed hands reaching down toward the foot, instead of only two fingers....

your posture and basic posing instincts are pretty nice. I like your ability to create a mood with facial expression and subtleties of pose,  your using the direction and quality of your glance as well.   

Concentrate on adding elegant hand and arm positions.

BTW I don't mean to be harping on this (since I mentioned this to the lady above as well)  but it happens to be the last thing that most models master....

If you build a pose from the ground up,  knowing what your foot position and knee positions are doing to create this foundation,  work the line of your hips against the line of the breast / collarbone,  create elegant head / neck positions, you are 90% "there".   

The last 10% is the arms and hands.  The best models I've seen always check in with their hands as the last "item" in building their poses.

Dec 04 12 07:04 pm Link

Model

Mariana Vergara

Posts: 7

Wilmington, North Carolina, US

I will like to hear what are you thoughts about my portfolio.Thank you

Dec 04 12 07:28 pm Link