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Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

MatureModelMM wrote:
I would appreciate your opinion, another llama rewrote part of my profile statement in a different discussion several months ago but possibly it could still benefit from change?

Haha, I think that was me, I remember your profile. I read through it again and I don't see anything else I'd change, but that's probably because any changes I would have already suggested are made or don't bother me anymore. smile

Apr 27 13 08:09 am Link

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lnvidia

Posts: 56

Wellington, Wellington, New Zealand

I'm keen big_smile

May 29 13 03:24 am Link

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Malina van Leuven

Posts: 86

Brussels, Brussels, Belgium

I think I will change it soon to something more clean and personal maybe, but some advice on it would definitely come handy.
Thanks in advance!

Jun 14 13 04:22 pm Link

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Mea Culpa

Posts: 353

Brisbane, Queensland, Australia

I used to have a great bio, then some weirdo copy-pasted it into her profile, so I changed it... has never quite felt "right" since...

Jun 22 13 04:48 am Link

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Tommy

Posts: 12

Philadelphia, Pennsylvania, US

Hey, just wanted to get an idea of how I can improve my bio.  I thank you for your feedback.

Have a great day
Tommy

Jun 26 13 09:08 pm Link

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Britney Lee

Posts: 7

Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada

oh I'm so thankful for you making this post haha mine is dreadful! please help me smile id be so grateful

Feb 17 14 09:22 pm Link

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kookykatkay

Posts: 10

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Please help me. I'm new to this and don't really know what to say.

Mar 02 14 12:46 am Link

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Annie S

Posts: 191

Minneapolis, Minnesota, US

Help me? smile Thanks!

Mar 18 14 06:03 pm Link

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Celine Sophia

Posts: 503

Santa Barbara, California, US

If you get a chance please

Mar 19 14 10:34 am Link

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Anni White

Posts: 13

Peterborough, England, United Kingdom

Just rewritten my bio, could you give me any advice on how to improve it? If you get a chance, please!

Mar 21 14 10:12 am Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

lnvidia wrote:
I'm keen big_smile

A good opener would help your bio, I think. Maybe something like...

"You bring the camera, I'll bring the ZING! I'm Elizabeth, an insatiably curious and eclectic model who freelances in addition to agency representation."

Apr 09 14 11:49 pm Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Malina van Leuven wrote:
I think I will change it soon to something more clean and personal maybe, but some advice on it would definitely come handy.
Thanks in advance!

This might add some spice:

"I shoot fast, study hard and come prepared to make your vision a reality. Travelling, meeting new people and contributing to a creative team are what keep me enthusiastic about modeling and life. Send me a message and let's get started!"

Apr 09 14 11:53 pm Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Mea Culpa wrote:
I used to have a great bio, then some weirdo copy-pasted it into her profile, so I changed it... has never quite felt "right" since...

It's a little word-heavy. Maybe try something less detailed and more specific to who you are and what you can provide to a client.

"I'm an experienced and creative model with rates as reasonable and flexible as my body. I have worked across Australia and Japan, and have been published in Australia, the US and in Europe. I won't work for "future joint sale profits" but I'm willing to discuss fees that are within your budget."

That kind of sums up the first half of your bio into the most informative part. A reader really just wants to get down to the nitty gritty of your portfolio.

Apr 09 14 11:59 pm Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

  Tommy wrote:
Hey, just wanted to get an idea of how I can improve my bio.  I thank you for your feedback.

Have a great day
Tommy

This might be more effective:

"I'm a model and actor loyal to my clients and dedicated to creating artistic results. Creativity for me is my business, my career, my life and I take it very seriously. Message me so we can get started!"

Apr 10 14 12:03 am Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Britney  Lee wrote:
oh I'm so thankful for you making this post haha mine is dreadful! please help me smile id be so grateful

An opener like this might be interesting:

"Climbing a mountain, jumping out of a plane, riding a roller coaster--nothing can compare to the way modeling makes me feel."

Apr 10 14 12:06 am Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Annie  S wrote:
Help me? smile Thanks!

That so cool that you can do so many things! I'm torn what to say about yours because it sounds bubbly like I imagine your personality to be smile...so I'll just say good luck with your new agency!

Apr 10 14 12:11 am Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Celine Sophia wrote:
If you get a chance please

I like how your bio flows. It's like a dance in itself. Don't change a thing.

Apr 10 14 12:13 am Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Anni White wrote:
Just rewritten my bio, could you give me any advice on how to improve it? If you get a chance, please!

Your bio reads much like a quiet questionnaire. Maybe replacing it with something like this would give it a boost:

I'm English but have a knack for Japanese street fashions. I seek collaborators who aren't afraid to experiment with unusual ideas. You don’t have to be experienced, rich or super tall, just creative and fun. If you like my portfolio or have a suggestion, I want to hear about it!"

Apr 10 14 12:21 am Link

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Pauline Yee

Posts: 215

Calgary, Alberta, Canada

Would love to know your opinion. Thanks in advance!

Apr 10 14 10:13 pm Link

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Misty Matthews

Posts: 286

Tulsa, Oklahoma, US

I would love some help with mine. Its been the same for too long.

Apr 11 14 01:38 am Link

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L J K

Posts: 267

Minneapolis, Minnesota, US

Still going with this?

Apr 12 14 06:33 pm Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Pauline Yee wrote:
Would love to know your opinion. Thanks in advance!

Maybe an adjustment like...

"I love working with photographers, stylists and makeup artists who can take my portfolio to the next level."

Sounds a little more enthusiastic, eh?

Apr 13 14 10:51 pm Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Misty Matthews wrote:
I would love some help with mine. Its been the same for too long.

Your bio has a good skeleton. Using bits and pieces maybe it could sound like...

See my beautiful toes? I'm a rubenesque and foot model who will go the extra mile for you. Willing to shoot at my home or on location. Escort preferred but negotiable. Implied nudity is my limit, non-negotiable. Themes certain to pique my interest include but are not limited to pin-up/rockabilly, vintage, and fine art.

Apr 13 14 11:08 pm Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

L J K wrote:
Still going with this?

Something that seems to go with the flow you already have could be to add this:

Hair/makeup is my forte. <b>Latex is my game.<\b>

It sounds darker, like what you mention you're trying to get into. smile

Apr 13 14 11:15 pm Link

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Pauline Yee

Posts: 215

Calgary, Alberta, Canada

Thanks Perceptive!

Apr 14 14 12:01 am Link

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Ag 47

Posts: 603

San Francisco, California, US

I am under the impression that no one reads profiles anymore, hence the lack of text on mine.

But I'll give it a go.

Apr 14 14 12:12 am Link

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Karen Fuji

Posts: 12

Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada

Hmm... I could use some help.

Apr 14 14 08:17 am Link

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L J K

Posts: 267

Minneapolis, Minnesota, US

Perceptive Portraits wrote:

Something that seems to go with the flow you already have could be to add this:

Hair/makeup is my forte. [b]Latex is my game.[\b]

It sounds darker, like what you mention you're trying to get into. smile

HA love it!
Thanks

Apr 14 14 04:32 pm Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Reboot? Anyone thought about their bio lately? smile

Aug 15 14 12:04 am Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Karen Fuji wrote:
Hmm... I could use some help.

Right now there's nothing that identifies anything special or unique about you.

"I recently graduated from college and right now I'm just working in the food and beverage industry. I enjoy dancing and listening to music. I joined MM because I am interested in Modeling."

To spice it up, maybe try something like...

"I'm a college graduate who can dance and model, often at the same time..."

Aug 15 14 12:09 am Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Call Me Caitlin wrote:
I am under the impression that no one reads profiles anymore, hence the lack of text on mine.

But I'll give it a go.

Not sure if I can give a suggestion of actual text, but maybe next time you sit down at the computer just make a quick list of what you want to accomplish here on MM. Do you want to get famous? Mingle with artists? Retire early and model in your free time? Mentioning these types of things is valuable for someone trying to imagine how they could include you in a potential gig.

Aug 15 14 12:13 am Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Misty Matthews wrote:
I would love some help with mine. Its been the same for too long.

It seems a bit choppy, like dropping breadcrumbs hoping someone can find the trail. Maybe you could try something with more pop like...

"I'm a rubenesque model always looking for makeup artists and photographers who can enhance my affinity for classics, fine art, and rockabilly. I also have cute feet and take my inspiration from beauties like Tess Munster, London Andrews, Whitney Thompson, and Marilyn Monroe."

Aug 15 14 12:22 am Link

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Jasmine Tooley

Posts: 56

London, England, United Kingdom

I'd love your help on profile writing please

Sep 03 14 06:45 pm Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 245

North Salt Lake, Utah, US

Jasmine Tooley wrote:
I'd love your help on profile writing please

Wow. Just...wow. Your portfolio is adequately descriptive and thorough. Everything about it demonstrates you have your act together, and that is highly attractive to a client. Keep it up and you'll go places!

Sep 04 14 01:48 pm Link

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Anita1993

Posts: 239

Groningen, Groningen, Netherlands

I could use some help smile

Sep 04 14 02:32 pm Link

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Kaya Mey

Posts: 6

Southend-on-Sea, England, United Kingdom

I'd love some help!

Sep 21 14 07:27 am Link

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Terriona Fletcher

Posts: 1

Chicago, Illinois, US

I would love for you to help improve my bio. I don't reall feel like it's an attention grabber.

Sep 30 14 11:45 am Link

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Lilith Von Dahlia

Posts: 120

Newcastle, New South Wales, Australia

Anything I should change?

Oct 01 14 06:50 am Link