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Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

First 10,
POST AN IMAGE ( or link )

I'll write a 5-7-5 poem commenting on your image.

1.  MatureModelMM
2.  George Ruge
3.  Acanthus Tattoos
4.  Alice A Dylan
5.  JIOPIX
6.  DivaEroticus
7.  allison mindy
8.  Lost Photo
9.  Joseph William
10. Jorge Kreimer

Jan 13 13 11:53 am Link

Model

MatureModelMM

Posts: 1373

Detroit, Michigan, US

Jan 13 13 12:00 pm Link

Photographer

GER Photography

Posts: 8233

Imperial, California, US

Here's one!:-)

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120819/13/50314e8385f71_m.jpg

Jan 13 13 12:00 pm Link

Jan 13 13 12:04 pm Link

Photographer

Odin Photo

Posts: 1459

Salt Lake City, Utah, US

Fun! I'll play please smile

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110713/06/4e1da297b4791.jpg

Jan 13 13 12:04 pm Link

Model

Alice A Dylan

Posts: 143

Sydney, New South Wales, Australia

Jan 13 13 12:05 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

MatureModelMM wrote:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30190439  (18+)

This sounds so fun!

discomfiture turns
on the covering, which lost
reveals contentment

Jan 13 13 12:14 pm Link

Photographer

JIOPIX

Posts: 1183

Toronto, Ontario, Canada

I'm game...

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121114/13/50a4143252b3e.jpg

Jan 13 13 12:18 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

George Ruge wrote:
Here's one!:-)

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120819/13/50314e8385f71_m.jpg

surprised he acted
after teasing entangled-
seduction's defense

Jan 13 13 12:19 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Acanthus Tattoos wrote:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31222237

ivy's not thwarted
by stone's hard resistance- clothes'
modest triumph stumps

Jan 13 13 12:25 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Odin Photo wrote:
Fun! I'll play please smile

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110713/06/4e1da297b4791.jpg

the surface appeals
but water's appearance hides
death in sterile brine

Jan 13 13 12:28 pm Link

Photographer

Odin Photo

Posts: 1459

Salt Lake City, Utah, US

Light Writer wrote:

the surface appeals
but water's appearance hides
death in sterile brine

I like it! Thanks! smile

Jan 13 13 12:31 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Alice A Dylan wrote:
Interesting game!

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31273971

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130113/05/50f2bb02393ad_m.jpg
fierce mask eroding
the voyeur's glancing: glimpsing
fear's masquerading

[
fear's mask eroding-
the voyeur's glancing-glimpsing
fierce masquerading


Both readings work in the context of the image.

Though there is a third reading


]

Jan 13 13 12:34 pm Link

Photographer

GER Photography

Posts: 8233

Imperial, California, US

Light Writer wrote:

surprised he acted
after teasing entangled-
seduction's defense

Thought provoking, thank you.:-)

Jan 13 13 12:34 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

JIOPIX wrote:
I'm game...

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121114/13/50a4143252b3e.jpg

colors lost fallen
children leaves stark beauty by
swift Autumn's arrival

[
color's lost, fallen
children leave stark beauty, by
swift Autumn survival
]

Jan 13 13 12:41 pm Link

Photographer

JIOPIX

Posts: 1183

Toronto, Ontario, Canada

Light Writer wrote:
colors lost fallen
children leaves stark beauty by
swift Autumn's arrival

Thank you.  Very nice.

Jan 13 13 12:51 pm Link

Model

BeatnikDiva

Posts: 14794

Fayetteville, Arkansas, US

Jan 13 13 01:34 pm Link

Model

MatureModelMM

Posts: 1373

Detroit, Michigan, US

Light Writer wrote:

discomfiture turns
on the covering, which lost
reveals contentment

Simply wonderful smile

Jan 13 13 01:38 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

DivaEroticus wrote:
How about:  http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 7a5b30.jpg 18+

what word can convey
the heat of desire rising
like unrestrained fire?

Jan 13 13 01:39 pm Link

Model

BeatnikDiva

Posts: 14794

Fayetteville, Arkansas, US

Light Writer wrote:

what word can convey
the heat of desire rising
like unrestrained fire?

smile

Jan 13 13 02:14 pm Link

Model

allison mindy

Posts: 1495

New York, New York, US

Jan 13 13 02:20 pm Link

Photographer

Pocket Watch

Posts: 52

Dallas, Texas, US

Jan 13 13 02:25 pm Link

Model

Alice A Dylan

Posts: 143

Sydney, New South Wales, Australia

Light Writer wrote:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130113/05/50f2bb02393ad_m.jpg
fierce mask eroding
the voyeur's glancing: glimpsing
fear's masquerading

[
fear's mask eroding-
the voyeur's glancing-glimpsing
fierce masquerading


Both readings work in the context of the image.

Though there is a third reading


]

Thank you smile please do share the third reading when you have the time smile

Jan 13 13 05:53 pm Link

Photographer

Lumatic

Posts: 13750

Brooklyn, New York, US

Go, Basho!  smile

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120323/19/4f6d377be9f75_m.jpg

Jan 13 13 06:26 pm Link

Photographer

Joseph William

Posts: 2034

Chicago, Illinois, US

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120726/15/5011c2b0e2b6a_m.jpg

Jan 13 13 07:18 pm Link

Model

Acanthus Tattoos

Posts: 432

Union, New Jersey, US

Light Writer wrote:

ivy's not thwarted
by stone's hard resistance- clothes'
modest triumph stumps

thank you!

Jan 13 13 07:28 pm Link

Model

Maruschke

Posts: 543

Darfield, Canterbury, New Zealand

Jan 13 13 07:50 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

allison mindy wrote:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31142781

Thank you smile

the key in the lock
belies imprisonment, screams
servitude chosen

Jan 13 13 10:33 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Lost Photo wrote:
18+ http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30919421

Thanks!

clutching fantastic
visions shielding oneself, yet 
assuming whose guise

Jan 13 13 10:40 pm Link

Model

allison mindy

Posts: 1495

New York, New York, US

Light Writer wrote:

the key in the lock
belies imprisonment, screams
servitude chosen

I adore this! Thank you!!

Jan 13 13 10:45 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Lumatic wrote:
Go, Basho!  smile

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120323/19/4f6d377be9f75_m.jpg

shoulders enticing,
wall's solitude facing, what
shadows encroaching?

Jan 13 13 10:46 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Joseph William  wrote:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120726/15/5011c2b0e2b6a_m.jpg

if senses drown in
sensation, clinging to life
in warm salt seas- when

Jan 13 13 10:57 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Maruschke wrote:
ooo.. sounds fun big_smile
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31236497

the wheat field shields her
escape- the carnival passed--
idle and free, lost

Jan 13 13 11:01 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Alice A Dylan wrote:

Thank you smile please do share the third reading when you have the time smile

fierce mask eroding
the voyeur's glancing, glimpsing
fears: masquerading

Jan 13 13 11:05 pm Link

Photographer

Jorge Kreimer

Posts: 2467

Los Angeles, California, US

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120930/08/50686a9150144.jpg

Jan 15 13 06:54 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Jorge Kreimer wrote:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120930/08/50686a9150144.jpg

brave like Christabel,
loving through struggle, with hope-
a better future

Jan 15 13 07:29 pm Link

Photographer

Jorge Kreimer

Posts: 2467

Los Angeles, California, US

Light Writer wrote:

brave like Christabel,
loving through struggle, with hope-
a better future

Very nice! Thank you, and my hat's off that you know Coleridge.

Jan 16 13 03:04 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Jorge Kreimer wrote:

Very nice! Thank you, and my hat's off that you know Coleridge.

Thanks,
also a reference to Christabel Beilenberg

Jan 16 13 06:08 pm Link

Photographer

EdwardKristopher

Posts: 3377

Dallas, Texas, US

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111012/23/4e968b07f0a8c.jpg

Jan 18 13 12:34 pm Link