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Jan 18 13 08:40 am Link

Photographer

Good Egg Productions

Posts: 15790

Orlando, Florida, US

It gets a "meh" from me.

The weird photoshop fade you did at the bottom is totally unnecessary.

The pose is nice enough, but doesn't really do her figure any favors. I do love the color in it though.

Jan 18 13 08:47 am Link

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Garage Photography

Posts: 273

Calgary, Alberta, Canada

I think both images are good. Like the soft look.

Jan 18 13 08:48 am Link

Photographer

DOUGLASFOTOS

Posts: 8557

Los Angeles, California, US

Should they be mark'd 18 +????

Jan 18 13 08:56 am Link

Photographer

Wicked LA Pix

Posts: 686

Yucaipa, California, US

I like the first image allot. The second image I would have done the focus differently, but the FIRST thing I would do would be move or remove you logo from the middle of the photo and put it in the corner or get rid of it totally.

Jan 18 13 08:58 am Link

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DAN CRUIKSHANK

Posts: 1786

Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada

Did you add the gradient in PS? I would try ditching it. Both shots seem dark and dull due to the dark gradient/ vignette effect.

The second shot does nothing for me. That pose is over used with boudoir and it isn't very flattering or interesting to look at.

The first pose is more interesting.

The watermark right in the middle of the shot sucks.

Jan 18 13 09:10 am Link

Photographer

Scott Wallis Photo

Posts: 22

Charleston, South Carolina, US

I would lighten under her arm pits, they are a bit dark and distracting. Don't care for the gradient either on the lower part of the shot.

Jan 18 13 09:23 am Link

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Jeffrey M Fletcher

Posts: 4346

Asheville, North Carolina, US

I think I like your color pallet and that you want me to look at your watermark, which is not that interesting.

Jan 18 13 09:32 am Link

Photographer

ShotbyRon

Posts: 769

Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania, US

Wicked LA Pix wrote:
I like the first image allot. The second image I would have done the focus differently, but the FIRST thing I would do would be move or remove you logo from the middle of the photo and put it in the corner or get rid of it totally.

This exactly

Jan 18 13 09:34 am Link

Photographer

Lifestyle_Images

Posts: 3998

Albuquerque, New Mexico, US

Both links do need to be marked 18+

I agree that the effects are not needed and detract from tje images.  The first image illustrates a key issue with nudes.  That pose would likely be great if she was wearing a top, but as a topless, it's very unflattering to her based on her breast shape and firmness. 

The second one is quite cliche.

The biggest missing element for me in both is any idea WHY she is topless.

Keep at it.

Jan 18 13 09:35 am Link

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sammyspade

Posts: 98

Portland, Oregon, US

You're not topless at all!  The model is.

Ok - I like them both.  For a first time, esp, it's super.

Jan 18 13 09:38 am Link

Model

Lynn Elizabeth

Posts: 1336

Coral Springs, Florida, US

Very nice for a first time topless shoot. Very clean and simple. You should be very proud of them. With those images I can see you getting more work with topless and eventually fully nude llamas.

Jan 18 13 09:41 am Link

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RachelReilly

Posts: 1730

Washington, District of Columbia, US

It's ehh.. Not very exciting
Pose, and expression are boring
Lighting is good except for the big shadow on the lower half

Jan 18 13 09:46 am Link

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GPS Studio Services

Posts: 36671

San Francisco, California, US

Wicked LA Pix wrote:
I like the first image allot. The second image I would have done the focus differently, but the FIRST thing I would do would be move or remove you logo from the middle of the photo and put it in the corner or get rid of it totally.

ShotbyRon wrote:
This exactly

Interesting, I found the first image to be the weaker of the two.  Without being offensive, I agree with the "meh."  I think it is a good first attempt, but neither image "pops."  These are not fine art, they are glamour.  I'd spend less time on post production and more time on execution.  I'd start with the lighting and go from there.

That having been said, kudos for branching out.  As I said, it is a good first try.  I am sure you will get better.

Jan 18 13 10:11 am Link

Model

Saedcantas

Posts: 445

Saint Saviour, Saint Saviour, United Kingdom

With the first image, the whole style and pose lends itself to a clothed model. The toplessness comes across as absolutely surplus to requirements and unflattering to the model.

Jan 18 13 10:56 am Link

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E Delsigne Photography

Posts: 30

Los Angeles, California, US

Keep your editing as natural as possible. Your poses work, but the softness and editing looks very amateur. Do you have the raw images? I'm a retoucher, send them over and Ill show you what I'm talking about.

Hope this helps!
Erin Delsigne Photography
https://www.facebook.com/EDPhotos

Jan 18 13 11:16 am Link

Model

Louis Kline

Posts: 22

EAST ELMHURST, New York, US

GPS Studio Services wrote:

Wicked LA Pix wrote:
I like the first image allot. The second image I would have done the focus differently, but the FIRST thing I would do would be move or remove you logo from the middle of the photo and put it in the corner or get rid of it totally.

Interesting, I found the first image to be the weaker of the two.  Without being offensive, I agree with the "meh."  I think it is a good first attempt, but neither image "pops."  These are not fine art, they are glamour.  I'd spend less time on post production and more time on execution.  I'd start with the lighting and go from there.

That having been said, kudos for branching out.  As I said, it is a good first try.  I am sure you will get better.

I agree. Take this as a learning experience.

Jan 18 13 11:27 am Link

Photographer

Tre-Mont Photography

Posts: 35

Cary, North Carolina, US

Thank you all, All the feedback is very much appreciated. You can believe I am taking notes.

Jan 18 13 12:09 pm Link

Photographer

Kev Lawson

Posts: 8685

Las Vegas, Nevada, US

Tre-Mont wrote:
Thank you all, All the feedback is very much appreciated. You can believe I am taking notes.

Please go back to your first post and used the edit link, add 18+ next to each image link.

Thanks smile

Jan 18 13 12:11 pm Link