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Model

Lorayne York

Posts: 2134

Colorado Springs, Colorado, US

If you're interested in ways i think you could improve, or what you are consistent with, just post in here.

Anyone is welcome, photographers, models, mua's, hairstylists, retouchers... and so on.

just remember that this is my opinion only. and i will probably nitpick your portfolio and profile.

Jan 27 13 08:53 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

Me please! I want to try to get more of a fresh start this year! Thank you!

Jan 27 13 09:13 pm Link

Photographer

I Ference Photography

Posts: 1160

Rochester, New York, US

Please, nitpick away!

Jan 27 13 09:20 pm Link

Model

Lorayne York

Posts: 2134

Colorado Springs, Colorado, US

Lela Jesse wrote:
Me please! I want to try to get more of a fresh start this year! Thank you!

Profile:
"I recently moved to Arcata, CA and I'm looking to start modeling as soon as possible. "
It's clear where you live.. you have your current city marked.. so this sentence is redudnant.

Portfolio:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121216/19/50ce8ae6a49ac_m.jpg
lighting on this shot is crappy. i get the whole combining images thing.. but only when it's done right.. this is not done right. the center image gives you terrible shadows on your face. and the right image is blown out, and the left gives you a shiny chin.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120508/20/4fa9e57c611f7_m.jpg
The pose in this photo is too distorted. it comes off as an attempt at fashion. try working with a fashion photographer who wont shoot at such a crap angle. and a photographer who edits out the red knees. fashion is also about the facial expressions and eyes. in this your eyes are closed.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130103/12/50e5e42684313_m.jpg
i've never been a fan of the whole keeping one or two colors out while muting the rest..


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/101227/14/4d19155c880ca_m.jpg
I would make this your avatar. your current one doesnt draw me in to want to check your portfolio.


Overall:

I think you are beautiful! you have a very european look. i would work with photographers who dont crop out your arms, top of your head.. and so on.

i would also like to see a well done headshot of you with minimual makeup (beauty shot) and a full length shot that doesnt make your body and legs look weird. you could definitely be working with better photographers. i know lots of photographers who would love to have you behind the camera!

Jan 27 13 09:52 pm Link

Model

Lorayne York

Posts: 2134

Colorado Springs, Colorado, US

I Ference Photography wrote:
Please, nitpick away!

i will get to you tomorrow.. because i know your work and i'm going to have to spend a decent amount of time looking for things to be wrong.

Jan 27 13 09:55 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

Lorayne York wrote:

Profile:
"I recently moved to Arcata, CA and I'm looking to start modeling as soon as possible. "
It's clear where you live.. you have your current city marked.. so this sentence is redudnant.

Portfolio:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121216/19/50ce8ae6a49ac_m.jpg
lighting on this shot is crappy. i get the whole combining images thing.. but only when it's done right.. this is not done right. the center image gives you terrible shadows on your face. and the right image is blown out, and the left gives you a shiny chin.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120508/20/4fa9e57c611f7_m.jpg
The pose in this photo is too distorted. it comes off as an attempt at fashion. try working with a fashion photographer who wont shoot at such a crap angle. and a photographer who edits out the red knees. fashion is also about the facial expressions and eyes. in this your eyes are closed.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130103/12/50e5e42684313_m.jpg
i've never been a fan of the whole keeping one or two colors out while muting the rest..


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/101227/14/4d19155c880ca_m.jpg
I would make this your avatar. your current one doesnt draw me in to want to check your portfolio.


Overall:

I think you are beautiful! you have a very european look. i would work with photographers who dont crop out your arms, top of your head.. and so on.

i would also like to see a well done headshot of you with minimual makeup (beauty shot) and a full length shot that doesnt make your body and legs look weird. you could definitely be working with better photographers. i know lots of photographers who would love to have you behind the camera!

Thank you very much for your critique!
Actually though, that first one was shot with film, as one image, so there wasn't any picking of images, to go through. It was an all for one effect. But I do understand what you are saying about it. 
Once again, Thank you very much!

Jan 27 13 09:58 pm Link

Model

NicoleNudes

Posts: 3963

Toronto, Ontario, Canada

Please do big_smile

Jan 27 13 10:50 pm Link

Model

Nari_Safari

Posts: 1

Grapevine, Texas, US

Me please!

Jan 27 13 11:05 pm Link

Model

Stefy Ray

Posts: 6

Saint Louis, Missouri, US

I could use a good once over....give it to me:) Please. and Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.
Stefy

Jan 27 13 11:17 pm Link

Model

SEALLEN

Posts: 14

Billings, Montana, US

I'd love to hear your opinion if possible!

Jan 28 13 12:27 am Link

Model

Dakota Burden

Posts: 126

Nanaimo, British Columbia, Canada

Me please!

Jan 28 13 01:00 am Link

Photographer

The Dark Side

Posts: 309

Salt Lake City, Utah, US

Please tell me...

Jan 28 13 07:26 am Link

Model

Trey Fleming

Posts: 1470

Las Vegas, Nevada, US

is this for guys to?

Jan 28 13 07:46 am Link

Photographer

Joseph William

Posts: 2035

Chicago, Illinois, US

Have we been through this before?  If not I would love to hear what you have to say.

Jan 28 13 05:45 pm Link

Photographer

zssphotography

Posts: 56

UPPER DARBY, Pennsylvania, US

me please itd be greatly appreciated

Jan 28 13 07:41 pm Link

Model

Ceci L

Posts: 235

Villena, Valencia, Spain

Me smile

Jan 29 13 08:07 am Link

Photographer

Ania Volovique

Posts: 19

Paris, Île-de-France, France

Just added pics from a recent shoot, would love to get feedback

Jan 29 13 08:21 am Link

Photographer

Curtis M LeBlanc

Posts: 69

San Antonio, Texas, US

I'm game.

Jan 29 13 08:24 am Link

Photographer

I Ference Photography

Posts: 1160

Rochester, New York, US

Lorayne York wrote:

i will get to you tomorrow.. because i know your work and i'm going to have to spend a decent amount of time looking for things to be wrong.

Well then, I'm excited to see what you come up with!  wink

Jan 30 13 10:29 am Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4126

Alexandria, Virginia, US

Tell me what you think about my shizz...  and thank you

Jan 30 13 10:32 am Link

Photographer

M i t c h T a r r

Posts: 179

Lake Havasu City, Arizona, US

I'm interested in feedback on studio black and whites.  Thx

Jan 30 13 10:36 am Link

Model

Jordan Nicola

Posts: 1

Peterhead, Scotland, United Kingdom

I would love to know what others think! I am just starting out as a model and I know I need a lot more practice and with what I don't know! Help!!

Jan 31 13 05:42 am Link

Photographer

Cameron J Wright

Posts: 34

Los Angeles, California, US

go for it

Jan 31 13 05:46 am Link

Photographer

Henry Westheim

Posts: 650

Taichung City, Taichung City, Taiwan

Yes, please.

Jan 31 13 05:48 am Link

Photographer

MCP Photography

Posts: 344

Frederick, Maryland, US

Please......

Jan 31 13 03:42 pm Link

Photographer

Decay of Memory

Posts: 618

Asheville, North Carolina, US

Surely, thank you.

Jan 31 13 04:50 pm Link

Model

Kelly Ann Carter

Posts: 93

Hollywood, Florida, US

Me

Jan 31 13 06:33 pm Link

Model

Lorayne York

Posts: 2134

Colorado Springs, Colorado, US

I Ference Photography wrote:
Please, nitpick away!

Soooo i have spent almost an entire day looking at your photos.. then taking a break and going back to see if i could find something.. needless to say i only found one image i didnt like.

this: http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 6695_m.jpg
18+
i think it's only because i've never been a fan of the shadows thing.. it's similiar to the light coming through blinds to me.. if that makes sense.

i also noticed you have a lot of images with the use of old chairs. whether it wheelchairs/rocking chairs/school chairs.. 10 out of 29 photos have a chair.. not including a sofa.

however your locations are amazing. i would love to shoot in any of them. i enjoyed reading the locations.. cause i dont think we have any abandoned schools around here sad

love the colors you have in your portfolio and the uniqueness about your images as well... wish i could be more critical.. but that's all i got damnit. smile

Jan 31 13 10:32 pm Link

Model

Lorayne York

Posts: 2134

Colorado Springs, Colorado, US

NicoleNudes wrote:
Please do big_smile

like your profile.. its short and to the point.

your portfolio...

here are my least favorite images:

All images 18+

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 91b4_m.jpg
I dont like the blurriness of this photo and the fact that your stomach is blown out. you also have the same shoes in another photo, which in my opinion is better.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … c1b8_m.jpg
this photo is too blown out for me.. and with the shadow of the shape of your boob on your other boob.. it's too distracting.  but i understand that it is a nice figure photo.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/11 … 0404_m.jpg
I think to make this photo better.. a thicker rope shouldve been used.. it wouldve made your facial expression that much better.. cause as it is right now.. it looks like youre chewing on a necklace.

my two favorite:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 0d34_m.jpg
LOVE your face in this.. soo beautiful. and i like that you can see your tattoo on your neck. your hair looks amazing too... i just love it. i wish i had this in my portfolio.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 5cf1_m.jpg
i love this for the arch in your back.. and yet you still look comfortable.. though im sure it mustve hurt. you just look so relaxed and your wet hair is perfect.. love it.

i enjoy looking through your portfolio. you lucky curvy lady, i am so jealous that i dont have the curves you do. sad i would love to see you do more nature nudes. i think you have the perfect body to do that.

Jan 31 13 10:47 pm Link

Photographer

I Ference Photography

Posts: 1160

Rochester, New York, US

Lorayne York wrote:

Soooo i have spent almost an entire day looking at your photos.. then taking a break and going back to see if i could find something.. needless to say i only found one image i didnt like.

this: http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 6695_m.jpg
18+
i think it's only because i've never been a fan of the shadows thing.. it's similiar to the light coming through blinds to me.. if that makes sense.

i also noticed you have a lot of images with the use of old chairs. whether it wheelchairs/rocking chairs/school chairs.. 10 out of 29 photos have a chair.. not including a sofa.

however your locations are amazing. i would love to shoot in any of them. i enjoyed reading the locations.. cause i dont think we have any abandoned schools around here sad

love the colors you have in your portfolio and the uniqueness about your images as well... wish i could be more critical.. but that's all i got damnit. smile

Well thank you kindly for your time; the critique is appreciated!  I'll take another look at that image in the context of the overall body of work I'm showing.

If you are ever in the area and would like to shoot, I'd love to work with you - your enthusiasm for my decrepit old buildings would show in every shot!  But be forewarned - I'll probably ask you to sit in a chair or two, as they are often among the only artifacts left behind in abandoned insane asylums.  wink

Feb 01 13 10:02 am Link

Photographer

Kerri Jean Photography

Posts: 588

Indianapolis, Indiana, US

I would enjoy a good critique.  Nitpicking usually leads to some great feedback.

Feb 01 13 10:52 pm Link

Photographer

Cameron J Wright

Posts: 34

Los Angeles, California, US

I'd love to hear what you think

Feb 02 13 01:42 pm Link

Photographer

Images by MR

Posts: 8377

Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada

Yes plz..

Feb 02 13 01:49 pm Link

Photographer

BCADULTART

Posts: 2014

Boston, Massachusetts, US

Love to hear your thoughts.  All 18+ images.

Feb 02 13 01:54 pm Link

Photographer

Maria Panina

Posts: 141

New York, New York, US

I'm always in for improvements. Let me know what you think.

Feb 02 13 01:58 pm Link

Photographer

Zman-Photog

Posts: 20

Missouri City, Texas, US

I could use improvement - welcome your feedback

Feb 02 13 06:15 pm Link

Photographer

David Kirk

Posts: 4613

Ottawa, Ontario, Canada

I'd like some feedback!

Feb 02 13 06:22 pm Link

Photographer

Project4145

Posts: 338

Phoenix, Arizona, US

Love to hear your opinion.

Feb 02 13 06:22 pm Link

Photographer

Fox and Owl Studio

Posts: 7

Asheville, North Carolina, US

I would love your critique! Thanks.

Feb 03 13 01:02 pm Link

Model

Leone P

Posts: 515

Batley, England, United Kingdom

Lorayne York wrote:
If you're interested in ways i think you could improve, or what you are consistent with, just post in here.

Anyone is welcome, photographers, models, mua's, hairstylists, retouchers... and so on.

just remember that this is my opinion only. and i will probably nitpick your portfolio and profile.

I would love your opinion. Sock it to me. smile

Feb 03 13 01:10 pm Link