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Miss Tori Marie

Posts: 34

Kaneohe, Hawaii, US

I love modeling and am very versatile in what I'm willing to do. I'm looking for opinions in hat works in my profile, what doesn't, and what you would like to see instead? Please feel free to throw anything my way!

Thanks!

Miss Tori Marie wink

Jan 31 13 06:46 pm Link

Model

Jane Kavanaugh

Posts: 366

Denver, Colorado, US

Miss Tori Marie wrote:
I love modeling and am very versatile in what I'm willing to do. I'm looking for opinions in hat works in my profile, what doesn't, and what you would like to see instead? Please feel free to throw anything my way!

Thanks!

Miss Tori Marie wink

Ok, so I see that your profile says that you want to be a VS model, so I'll assume that's the direction you want your photos to head in. I also noticed that you said you're not available to do any tf work at the moment. From my experience, I think you're missing out on a good opportunity. Though you have some good photos, I'm not sure how much experience you have by looking at them and if there are photogs that are interested in working with you tfp (and they have skills that could benefit your port) I'd go for it. Tfp works in both directions; it's not just for the photographer, it benefits you as well. I think you could definitely put more higher quality images in your port and I know a lot of photogs would be willing to do that for you. The better your port, of course, the more likely you will get more paid gigs. Most models go through a lot of tfp before getting paid gigs, but if you love modeling then this should be easy. So: work on your port, and always strive for better images. Work on developing your own personal style and try to add versatility to your port. Btw, I see you're in Cali. Lucky you! There are tons and tons of great photographers that could remake your portfolio into brilliance in a week tongue Just keep at it, you're beautiful and you'll do great. Good luck!

Jan 31 13 09:18 pm Link

Photographer

Mark

Posts: 2918

New York, New York, US

you may need to rethink your eye liner approach.  It looks all the same but more importantly, a thick dark line for me, just makes your eyes recede even more into your face and make them look a bit crazy looking.

Feb 01 13 10:42 pm Link

Model

MelissaAnn

Posts: 3958

Seattle, Washington, US

I would get rid of these:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/10578425
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/10576398
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27709889
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/10576405
You have so much better images, and the above are just bringing down your port.

I would also recommend trying a different look with your eye makeup.  The current look is a bit hard, and almost makes you look a little evil (and older) in a few of your images. Soften is up a little, I bet it will make a huge difference.

You have a lovely look & figure for glamour/swimsuit modeling, best of luck! smile

Feb 01 13 10:57 pm Link

Photographer

SKITA Studios

Posts: 1569

Boston, Massachusetts, US

Ditto the eye liner.  Maybe work w/ a MUA and say you want the VS look and see what she does?

Ditch these:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120326/14/4f70d97418694_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/090207/15/498e12f2d2449_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/090207/14/498e1252ded8d_m.jpg

Add more of this:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121208/20/50c418ab8c041_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/080703/15/486d2d04ad053_m.jpg
Your bra looks a bit small on this but the rest of the composition is good:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120612/04/4fd72186bcc14_m.jpg

Feb 02 13 08:21 am Link

Photographer

OmnyRa

Posts: 1029

Indianapolis, Indiana, US

-What works in your portfolio? That butt! And I mean it's working overtime!!
-What would I like to see more of? That butt! Just kidding. No, I'm not.
-What doesn't work? There are some unflattering shadows around the eyes, you could vary your facial expressions a little more (particularly the mouth because it's so similar in so many shots), and your posing needs to expand so you don't limit yourself to looking like a catalog model.  If the photogs aren't asking for that, start giving it and see how they react.

All in all, Bravo!! :^)

Feb 02 13 08:37 am Link

Model

Raven-Lily

Posts: 77

Eastbourne, England, United Kingdom

I really would love to see you shake it up a bit, try some vintage or gothic work, this will really stretch you and you will be able to ditch the eyeliner and try other looks

Feb 02 13 05:47 pm Link