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SplendorShots

Posts: 11

Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania, US

I would like to know where I stand now. Please let me know what I can improve on as I am new to all this. I can take it lol

Feb 01 13 04:00 pm Link

Makeup Artist

ArtistryImage

Posts: 2989

Washington, District of Columbia, US

SplendorShots wrote:
...Please let me know...

elegant visual statement...
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130126/13/5104516fac43f.jpg

this narrative has commercial worth/value...
maybe more like this?

the question you must ask yourself is who are your clients?
would be wise to let this determine the mix in your book...

all the best on your journey...

Feb 03 13 02:35 pm Link

Photographer

David Kirk

Posts: 4586

Ottawa, Ontario, Canada

This seems like a very odd composition having a blank canvass except for a plant/tree right behind the model.  I think the shot would be stronger without the tree or with it off to one side or the other.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130131/18/510b22fed4f77_m.jpg

I like the way you have captured her freckles and hair colour here.  Perhaps add a touch of light on the backdrop to soften the contrast?
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130131/18/510b22fda0393_m.jpg

I like this one - great natural expression from the model and pleasing composition.  The contrast seems a little low in this one though - is that intentional?
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130126/13/510451718150f_m.jpg

This is very good too.  Nice lighting to flatter the model.  Not so sure about the bright blue nails and white necklace though.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121210/13/50c65b379200a_m.jpg

The hair/accent light is well done here and it gives a very clean, natural result.   Consider reducing the fill light a little to darken shadows and emphasize structure.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130131/18/510b22f9d23ce_m.jpg

I would recommend less props (guitars, flowers, necklaces, chains) to let the focus really be on the model themselves, but that's a personal preference of mine. 

Having said that, I think the guitar works well in this shot:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130126/13/51045170b510b_m.jpg

I hope that's helpful.

Feb 03 13 03:03 pm Link