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Light Writer

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Oakland, California, US

Post an image or link
I'll write a comment in 5-7-5 poem form
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Senry%C5%AB

I hear images
like colors in sound- silence
singing in gray shades

Feb 10 13 09:44 pm Link

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winking_wonder

Posts: 5711

New York, New York, US

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Feb 10 13 09:54 pm Link

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Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

winking_wonder wrote:
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Azure the wind's breath
over the brown trees- winter
longing for flowers

Feb 10 13 10:19 pm Link

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_eMMe_

Posts: 866

Florence, Toscana, Italy

Feb 11 13 01:07 am Link

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Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

_eMMe_ wrote:
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Please smile

sunlit blackbirds trill
from shadowing trees obscure
leaves rustle- eyes pierce

Feb 11 13 06:14 am Link

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Ceci L

Posts: 235

Villena, Valencia, Spain

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Feb 11 13 08:03 am Link

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Jorge Kreimer

Posts: 2455

Los Angeles, California, US

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Feb 11 13 09:30 am Link

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TDSImages

Posts: 888

Salt Lake City, Utah, US

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Feb 11 13 10:15 am Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Ceci L wrote:
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white rings like bells, blue
echoes softly lasting long
distant quiet sounds

[
rings could be a noun or verb
]

Feb 11 13 06:32 pm Link

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Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Jorge Kreimer wrote:
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wrecked engines quiet
in their tombs- disturbed fur-clad
stranger's revenge- tall

Feb 11 13 06:34 pm Link

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Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

TDSImages wrote:
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heart beats blood red, white
flowing ringing fabric, child's
cries to come, soon, soon

Feb 11 13 06:36 pm Link

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Jorge Kreimer

Posts: 2455

Los Angeles, California, US

Light Writer wrote:

wrecked engines quiet
in their tombs- disturbed fur-clad
stranger's revenge- tall

Very nice, thanks!

Feb 11 13 10:52 pm Link

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EdwardKristopher

Posts: 3377

Dallas, Texas, US

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Feb 12 13 12:27 am Link

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Maruschke

Posts: 543

Darfield, Canterbury, New Zealand

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Feb 12 13 01:49 pm Link

Photographer

Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

EdwardKristopher wrote:
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orange sounds of skin
on skin, gentle stroking touch-
smiling contentment

Feb 12 13 10:01 pm Link

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Light Writer

Posts: 18387

Oakland, California, US

Maruschke wrote:
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the sound of rain on
broad leaves running and dripping:
heat of summer's storm

Feb 12 13 10:02 pm Link

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Amul La La

Posts: 864

Saint Austell, England, United Kingdom

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smile

Feb 13 13 06:15 am Link

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OmnyRa

Posts: 1029

Indianapolis, Indiana, US

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Feb 14 13 09:51 am Link

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TDSImages

Posts: 888

Salt Lake City, Utah, US

TDSImages wrote:
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Feb 15 13 05:49 am Link

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TDSImages

Posts: 888

Salt Lake City, Utah, US

Light Writer wrote:

heart beats blood red, white
flowing ringing fabric, child's
cries to come, soon, soon

That was beautiful...thank you!!

Feb 15 13 05:50 am Link