Feb 25 13 10:59 am Link
New York, New York, US
There's a lot to critique, but getting to my point- it might be a good idea to stop shooting with models that you find attractive and try to make a nice pic with some one who doesnt appeal to you. Bad wall shadow behind the model, meaningless setting- what is she doing there? why hold the knob on the bannister, model gets lost in the architecture.
Feb 25 13 09:16 pm Link
Seattle, Washington, US
The stairs/surroundings are very distracting from the model in every image. With a cleaner background/better composition, and a bit more processing/retouching, some of these may have worked a lot better. Your watermark is also very distracting.
The model looks very posed and unnatural, and not in a way that makes sense for this environment.
Feb 25 13 09:27 pm Link
I thank you for your time and critique. You're one of the few to respond and I really do appreciate that. I see your viewpoint on the wall shadow. I can even see your view on the setting and how you see it to be meaningless and competing with the model for attention. I do not agree about only shooting models I find attractive. My goal was to make some nice pics with this model who graciously allocated time for me to shoot with her. My concept was a retro pin up style feel for the shoot, trying to get away from just shooting girls and cars, and I thought the staircase would be an interesting visual location. At worst my concept didn't work out quite as well as I had pictured it. I can definitely take that as criticism and build from it. Not sure how working with a model who granted me her time for the shoot is "working with models that you find attractive". My goal was to make some nice pics, and I can accept it if it didn't work, and the location was bad, but implying that nice shots wasn't my intent isn't constructive.
Feb 25 13 11:14 pm Link
Thank you. I think it falls down to the location and the concept I had didn't mesh together as well as I had pictured in my head.
Feb 25 13 11:18 pm Link
Seattle, Washington, US
DRaskin Photography wrote:
I don't think he meant you were attracted to her in a bad/perverted way, or that you only chose to work with her because you found her attractive. I think he's implying that based on these images, you seemed distracted, and not entirely focused on composing them, and directing the model in a way that made sense. There's nothing wrong with shooting attractive models, but in the beginning, sometimes it's easier to focus on composition/lighting/angles when you're working with a more average looking person.
Feb 25 13 11:36 pm Link
Feb 26 13 12:40 am Link
Las Vegas, Nevada, US
No. Not better. It's best to leave a shadow in the photo unless you possess the skills to be able to remove it believably. Otherwise it just looks like a poor photoshop job and that draws way more attention than the llama.
Miranda Kerr could be standing there and I'd be staring at the odd half removed shadow behind her. It doesn't mesh within the brain.
Either outsource your editing to someone who focuses and prides themself on that skill or get better at Photoshop. Delve in for about 4 months and then release new photos.
Feb 26 13 12:57 am Link
Sorry, obviously my quick photoshop editing was just to see if the general consensus was that it was better without the shadow. Yeah, I know my quick edit on it is far from "finished" quality. I also know I didn't convey that well.
If people think it's better without the shadow, and salvagable, then I'll farm it out to a retoucher, who has much better photoshop skills than myself.
If not, then I'll just dump it along with the others.
Feb 26 13 01:14 am Link
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US
I think I like the third image composition
[Girl on spiral]
Agree the shadows are a distraction on wall
In this one would suggest moving camera and or model to loose the column behind her so it is the solid wall
The last one on steps
Next time extend her legs, have knees lower then hips
With some fine tuning this could be a great location and model
Feb 26 13 05:31 am Link
Orlando, Florida, US
On camera flash looks awful.
Feb 26 13 05:32 am Link
Catskill, New York, US
They look like snapshots, probably due to the use of on camera flash / lack of light control
Setting / background are not appealing and the stairs don't serve the purpose you had hoped.
Feb 26 13 05:43 am Link
I appreciate the constructive criticism. Instead of just telling me they look awful, I appreciate that you suggested ways that I could improve.
Feb 26 13 09:03 am Link