Forums > Critique > New work! What do you think? :)

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

I just did a new shoot. What do you think?
( My whole port is up for critique as well!) Thank you! I'll tell you my favorite picture in your port!
These are my newest shots!
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/22/512c54f617e11_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/22/512c54f349a74_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/22/512c54f03de4e_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/19/512c2763aacb7_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/19/512c2762b8730_m.jpg

Feb 25 13 10:27 pm Link

Photographer

Mark

Posts: 2893

New York, New York, US

good additions.  Though I think you should be smiling or at least more positive looking in your "neutral" state in these pics. You should reconsider your head shot- perhaps just crop one of these shots into a portrait format?

Feb 25 13 10:34 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

Mark wrote:
good additions.  Though I think you should be smiling or at least more positive looking in your "neutral" state in these pics. You should reconsider your head shot- perhaps just crop one of these shots into a portrait format?

Any particular suggestion on which one? or any that don't stand out?
Edit!
And this is my favorite picture in your port. So soft and pretty!
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130128/08/5106ad1af3158_m.jpg

Feb 25 13 10:35 pm Link

Photographer

LA StarShooter

Posts: 1875

Los Angeles, California, US

I think the photographer delivered on lovely tonality, however, your expressions in this set don't work for me, and there's one shot on the cusp of excellent. You're standing and you have got your head at the right handle and then the eyes eyes are narrowed and the mouth looks odd. If it was a TF shoot you need to really prepare in posing and expressions so that when you come across someone who has having a great day that you take full advantage of the opportunity. I saw other shots in your port where you looked much better.

Feb 25 13 10:50 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

LA StarShooter wrote:
I think the photographer delivered on lovely tonality, however, your expressions in this set don't work for me, and there's one shot on the cusp of excellent. You're standing and you have got your head at the right handle and then the eyes eyes are narrowed and the mouth looks odd. If it was a TF shoot you need to really prepare in posing and expressions so that when you come across someone who has having a great day that you take full advantage of the opportunity. I saw other shots in your port where you looked much better.

Thank you very much. I'll work on my part more. And yes, it was a TF shoot. Most of my shoots are. My standing posing needs a lot of work, and I'm trying to get there!

This is my favorite in your port!
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121017/23/507fa0d6459ad_m.jpg

Feb 25 13 10:53 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

Anyone else?

Feb 26 13 08:16 am Link

Photographer

Marin Photography NYC

Posts: 7249

New York, New York, US

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/19/512c2762b8730_m.jpg

I like!!!

Feb 26 13 08:19 am Link

Artist/Painter

MainePaintah

Posts: 1782

Saco, Maine, US

You look gorgeous in all of them, but the top one is my favorite!

Speaking of favorites, in your port, I truly love the 3rd photo in the 2nd row!
Beautiful!!!

Feb 26 13 08:29 am Link

Model

MatureModelMM

Posts: 1182

Detroit, Michigan, US

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/22/512c54f03de4e_m.jpg

I just love that one, the pose and your expression are simply beautiful.

Feb 26 13 09:10 am Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

Marin Photography wrote:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/19/512c2762b8730_m.jpg

I like!!!

Thank you! This is my favorite in your port. Gorgeous eyes and smile!
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130226/13/512d2bc12e62c_m.jpg

Feb 26 13 03:46 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

MainePaintah wrote:
You look gorgeous in all of them, but the top one is my favorite!

Speaking of favorites, in your port, I truly love the 3rd photo in the 2nd row!
Beautiful!!!

I love this! I thought it was a picture!
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30794806

Thank you so much!

Feb 26 13 03:47 pm Link

Photographer

Nor-Cal Photography

Posts: 2695

Walnut Creek, California, US

MainePaintah wrote:
You look gorgeous in all of them, but the top one is my favorite!

+1

I don't care much for this image:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130220/15/51255fedcd097_m.jpg

because the pose and expression seem somewhat forced.

But just one worthless opinion.    smile

Feb 26 13 03:57 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

MatureModelMM wrote:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/22/512c54f03de4e_m.jpg

I just love that one, the pose and your expression are simply beautiful.

Thank you very much! I like a lot of your work, but i love this one!
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120402/06/4f79adf05b98f_m.jpg

Feb 26 13 03:58 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

Nor-Cal Photography wrote:

+1

I don't care much for this image:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130220/15/51255fedcd097_m.jpg

because the pose and expression seem somewhat forced.

But just one worthless opinion.    smile

Thank you, That is helpful! smile
I really like this set!
+18 http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/13370797

Feb 26 13 04:01 pm Link

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Model

Anna Adrielle

Posts: 18763

Antwerp, Antwerp, Belgium

lovely!

I really like the 3rd one and the last one.
I think the second one is too hunched and misses elegance because of that, but the other ones are nice smile. A bit of a soft smile would have been cute too.
I'd either add the last one to your port, or maybe a compilation of a couple of pictures.

Feb 26 13 04:04 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

Anna Adrielle wrote:
lovely!

I really like the 3rd one and the last one.
I think the second one is too hunched and misses elegance because of that, but the other ones are nice smile. A bit of a soft smile would have been cute too.
I'd either add the last one to your port, or maybe a compilation of a couple of pictures.

Thank you! I like the 3rd one a lot as well!
I adore your work. I think you are just stunning!
I've always been drawn to this picture. Your smile is stunning and so genuine!
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120612/05/4fd7397dbdcb1_m.jpg

Feb 26 13 04:12 pm Link

Photographer

Fotografica Gregor

Posts: 4122

Alexandria, Virginia, US

these are good shots....

advice -

work on your range of expression -  use the method acting technique if needed

show a mix of very strong postures in series like these along with more relaxed postures

use your eyes to create engagement with the scene or story - you don't always have to look at the photographer - a  few shots where you are either focusing intently on something off camera and / or looking dreamily unfocused and away add a lot to the flow of the mood

Feb 26 13 04:16 pm Link

Photographer

David Kirk

Posts: 4502

Ottawa, Ontario, Canada

I like the pose and body language of this shot (and the photography too), but I can't figure out the facial expression - it just seems so ambiguous - no idea what you're trying to convey to the camera/viewer.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/22/512c54f617e11_m.jpg

This one is better - and I think it's mainly the change in your mouth - but it is still a little vague for me.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/22/512c54f349a74_m.jpg

I like the mood and aesthetic of the photos and your body language but your facial expressions confound me.

Feb 26 13 05:31 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

Fotografica Gregor wrote:
these are good shots....

advice -

work on your range of expression -  use the method acting technique if needed

show a mix of very strong postures in series like these along with more relaxed postures

use your eyes to create engagement with the scene or story - you don't always have to look at the photographer - a  few shots where you are either focusing intently on something off camera and / or looking dreamily unfocused and away add a lot to the flow of the mood

Thank you Gregor! I'm still getting back into the swing of things, and know there is a lot I need to work on, expressions being only one of the things i need to work on. Hopefully I'll only get better!

And I could never pick a favorite out of your pictures. I like them all!

Feb 26 13 10:09 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

David Kirk wrote:
I like the pose and body language of this shot (and the photography too), but I can't figure out the facial expression - it just seems so ambiguous - no idea what you're trying to convey to the camera/viewer.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/22/512c54f617e11_m.jpg

This one is better - and I think it's mainly the change in your mouth - but it is still a little vague for me.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130225/22/512c54f349a74_m.jpg

I like the mood and aesthetic of the photos and your body language but your facial expressions confound me.

Thank you David! I know that is an area i need to work on, and have been practicing daily, and now i just need ti get it down in front of the camera. Thank you for the honest reply!
I love this picture in your port!
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111116/23/4ec4b5e77c9d0_m.jpg

Feb 26 13 10:14 pm Link

Model

Kristyn Emily

Posts: 28

Albany, New York, US

I really like the fourth one. smile

Feb 27 13 01:21 am Link