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Photographer

MC OConnor

Posts: 68

Asbury Park, New Jersey, US

He's not a model...

This was from a portrait session for a book cover.  He's an author.

http://i268.photobucket.com/albums/jj20/marcaroc/edjak3_zps4f0663e1.jpg

Apr 20 13 07:55 pm Link

Photographer

Guss W

Posts: 10666

Clearwater, Florida, US

Back to basics - make it sharp and get light in the eyes.  Did you use a tripod?  Is your lens soft at wide apertures?

Overall tonalities - the light shade of the shirt relative to the rest of the shot is causing my eye to go straight to the shirt rather than the face.  Also, check with the printer who will print the book, the dark tones may not come out well.  Next time, do a clothing consultation in advance and have alternatives to choose from.

The expression - Is the slightly stern, thoughtful, expression appropriate for the content of the book?  If so, fine.

On the plus side, I like the hint of environmental background - That's a nice touch.

Apr 21 13 01:52 pm Link

Photographer

Justin Foto

Posts: 3621

Alberschwende, Vorarlberg, Austria

Composition is ok, but the focus is on his chin (nice and sharp stubble) and not on his eyes where I'd expect it to be.

If you know how the focus system works on your camera, maybe there's something wrong with your lens?

Apr 21 13 02:09 pm Link

Photographer

Guss W

Posts: 10666

Clearwater, Florida, US

Another thought - If this is for the cover itself rather than the back or fold-over of the jacket, you might want to crop a little wide on the shot to give the layout people enough room to overlay text or wrap the image around to the spine.

Apr 21 13 02:34 pm Link

Photographer

MC OConnor

Posts: 68

Asbury Park, New Jersey, US

Thanks peeps...

I know it's out-of-focus.  I posted for your critique to gauge just how much it is.  I love the background on this shot and so wish I had gotten more light in his eyes and a sharper focus.

I just bought a new Canon 18-135mm...  I don't think it's the lens that's the problem.  It's me.

I gave my friend 28 photos to choose from...  this wasn't the shot he chose for the cover.  It wasn't what I thought was the best overall shot, either.  I just effing love that background.  DAMMIT!

The following is the photo his agent chose...
http://i268.photobucket.com/albums/jj20/marcaroc/edjak1_zpsb983882d.jpg

This was the photo I had wished he'd chosen...
http://i268.photobucket.com/albums/jj20/marcaroc/edjak2_zps8666c9d4.jpg

Apr 21 13 06:13 pm Link

Photographer

EDITSandIMAGES

Posts: 78

West Palm Beach, Florida, US

http://i105.photobucket.com/albums/m217/safetycumsfirst/ModelMayhem%20575/Critique.jpg

Apr 21 13 07:44 pm Link

Photographer

Ali Choudhry Photo

Posts: 184

Brisbane, Queensland, Australia

In a portrait of this nature, in my opinion you want the eyes to be the most 'in focus' and well lit.  I can see why he chose those images.

Apr 23 13 06:05 pm Link

Model

Svetlana Muerte

Posts: 923

Austin, Texas, US

MC OConnor wrote:
Thanks peeps...

I know it's out-of-focus.  I posted for your critique to gauge just how much it is.  I love the background on this shot and so wish I had gotten more light in his eyes and a sharper focus.

I just bought a new Canon 18-135mm...  I don't think it's the lens that's the problem.  It's me.

I gave my friend 28 photos to choose from...  this wasn't the shot he chose for the cover.  It wasn't what I thought was the best overall shot, either.  I just effing love that background.  DAMMIT!

The following is the photo his agent chose...
http://i268.photobucket.com/albums/jj20/marcaroc/edjak1_zpsb983882d.jpg

This was the photo I had wished he'd chosen...
http://i268.photobucket.com/albums/jj20/marcaroc/edjak2_zps8666c9d4.jpg

The focus issue is something I think they took into consideration. But the half-body shot....he looks really, really *cute* there! His expression is more welcoming, even if his body language is slightly standoffish. Aw!

I also like the context the photo they chose provides.

Apr 23 13 06:14 pm Link