Forums > Critique > Serious Critique > New 18+ image in need for some serious critique

Photographer

Photos by Magic

Posts: 14

Portland, Oregon, US

Uploaded two days ago;

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/32854215

thank you!

Jun 06 13 07:43 am Link

Photographer

ArtisticallySexy

Posts: 100

Coconut Creek, Florida, US

Nice shots of her

Jun 06 13 08:17 am Link

Photographer

Miss Photog

Posts: 287

VALLEY VILLAGE, California, US

sorry, but not a big fan of this one. face is not in focus and the lighting on her face isn't very flattering. Angle of her face gives her tons of neck wrinkles which is also not too flattering. looks more like a self shot someone took to send to her boyfriend. LOVE some of the other fine art nudes you have in your portfolio, but this one doesn't speak to me.

Jun 06 13 08:23 am Link

Photographer

Dan Dozer

Posts: 603

La Quinta, California, US

Miss Photog wrote:
sorry, but not a big fan of this one. face is not in focus and the lighting on her face isn't very flattering. Angle of her face gives her tons of neck wrinkles which is also not too flattering. looks more like a self shot someone took to send to her boyfriend. LOVE some of the other fine art nudes you have in your portfolio, but this one doesn't speak to me.

I agree with this as well.  I'm really bothered by the cropping at the top of the image loosing a little off the top of her head and the little sliver of black in the top right.  Her hand position behind her face is distracting to me.  The thing that bothers me the most is your logo - how big and where it's placed.  That really kills it for me and changes this image to look like a haphazard shot with a rather amature effort at promotion. 

Sorry, but you asked for a serious critique.

Jun 06 13 08:42 am Link

Photographer

Daeda1us

Posts: 1067

Little Rock, Arkansas, US

I can live with the logo...
I can even live with the soft focus, although I would prefer sharper.
Even the pose is acceptable... on someone else.

Don't like the cropped head.
Don't like her tattoos... which is why I don't like this pose for her.
None of the tattoos are displayed effectively.  This pose just makes me wish for a shot that either didn't have the tattoos, ie photoshop them out in this pose, or even better, a pose which showed the tattoos to their best advantage.

My opinion only of course.

Daeda1us

Jun 06 13 08:59 am Link

Photographer

Photos by Magic

Posts: 14

Portland, Oregon, US

Jun 06 13 07:40 pm Link

Photographer

Red Baron Photography

Posts: 325

Montreal, Quebec, Canada

this is better than the 1. one imho

Jun 06 13 07:49 pm Link

Photographer

PBE Photography

Posts: 32

Atlanta, Georgia, US

Photos By Magic wrote:
Okay, what about this one ?

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/32867697

I like this better than the first for the previous stated reasons from others. But your logo draws my eye, not the image. Maybe tone it down a little. IMHO

Jun 06 13 07:51 pm Link

Photographer

Photos by Magic

Posts: 14

Portland, Oregon, US

I am still experimenting with the logo, so that's much appreciated feedback..

Jun 06 13 07:53 pm Link

Photographer

RachelReilly

Posts: 1730

Washington, District of Columbia, US

No no no, not flattering of the model!
Pose is all wrong.. Unless you're going for really raunchy , then you nailed it.

Less is more and modesty

Jun 06 13 09:25 pm Link

Model

Kirst

Posts: 550

Manchester, New Hampshire, US

in reference to the new pic: As much as I love female party parts, I'd say this shows too much vagina. It almost looks like you had her flex and spread a little to show it. I can tell she is uncomfortably posed by the flexing of her neck. And the panty lines should be taken out.

Jun 06 13 09:38 pm Link

Photographer

Photos by Magic

Posts: 14

Portland, Oregon, US

This is all constructive.... thank you - keep it coming! smile

Jun 07 13 07:05 am Link

Model

Damaged Daisy Syn

Posts: 609

Woodbury, Minnesota, US

To me the second image is way better than the first link you posted. For some reason, I also think the first image makes the model look facially look older than it should due to the lighting. It just isn't real flattering.

Jun 07 13 05:10 pm Link