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Model

Angelina L

Posts: 20

Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania, US

Hello, I'm new to America and  I feel I do something wrong smile That's why I would love to know the opinion of those people who successfully work in USA...

Sep 14 13 07:10 am Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

You have a beautiful face and obviously the camera loves you. The images with you in the fur wrap are wonderful -- but unfortunately that's where it ends for me.

1. Your bio is way too long, gives information that is both uninteresting and unneeded and reads like you wrote the bio as if you were advertising for a husband. Shorten the bio. Check spelling (it's break, not brake) and stick to the essentials of why a photographer or agency would want to engage you? I.e., I doubt an agency is interested in the fact that you speak multiple languages?

2. Your pictures are all over the place and scream "snapshots." The picture of you in Russia is the best example. Other than the two shots that I mentioned scrap everything and start by finding a photographer who will work with you to develop a balanced portfolio, including headshots, location shots and images that enhance you the model.

Again, I think you are lovely and have a future in the business. You just have to get your feet on the ground. : )

Sep 14 13 09:21 am Link

Photographer

Mark Salo

Posts: 8657

Olney, Maryland, US

I like the fur and the B&W headshot that I listed.

This is important:

Profile wrote:
I have almost dramatic connection with my hair... unfortunately... so don't ask me if I want to cut them... or dye totally different... I'd rather wear a thousands wigs!

The rest of your profile, not so much.

Sep 14 13 11:28 am Link

Photographer

Orca Bay Images

Posts: 32424

Poulsbo, Washington, US

Cut down on that profile. No one needs to know how much you love coffee and handbags and how much you want to hang out with Angelina Jolie.  No one needs to know how much you love animals and how your heart breaks for the abandoned ones. No one needs to know that you're looking for paid gigs in order to buy those fancy handbags. And it's one thing to say that you don't tolerate last-minute cancellations; it's something else to say that because of your Russian heritage you might burn down the person's house... then say "let's all keep it professional." What you said was anything but professional.

Don't even joke about threats of violence.

The portfolio is mostly snapshots and doesn't reflect five years of experience. You've got a few portworthy images -- the two B&W headshots and keep one (not both) of the two shots in white fur. The rest, replace at the earliest opportunity.

Sep 15 13 09:18 am Link

Photographer

Michael Lucas Images

Posts: 9

Daytona Beach, Florida, US

I agree with the above comments.

Cut your MM profile down...It contains way too much information. It reads like a personal ad on Match.com.

Also you need to cut out most of your pics...ONLY POST YOUR BEST.

Now find a photog that will do TFP work....Look at their work before you decide to shot with them. You don't want to end up with Point and shoot looking images.

You're beautiful and will have no problem finding a photog to do some TFP work.

Best of Luck Comrade...

Michael

Sep 15 13 09:31 am Link

Photographer

Louis Li Photography

Posts: 128

Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada

First thing you should do is rewrite your profile and make it short and than remove the travelling snapshot and post the pictures that show you as a model.

Sep 15 13 09:38 am Link

Model

sasweets

Posts: 404

Ottawa, Ontario, Canada

If you're going to delete something please delete what you wrote under "caution". Even if you did nothing wrong no one will believe you if you have that there.

Sep 15 13 10:27 am Link

Model

Angelina L

Posts: 20

Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania, US

Thank you for your help!
I just was trying to get this profile more personal since I know it's always easy to work and feel free with person you know a little smile

About pictures, I keep them to let people know how exactly  do I look right now, should I keep them or delete anyway? or wait till I will get better ones?

Sep 15 13 02:27 pm Link

Photographer

Orca Bay Images

Posts: 32424

Poulsbo, Washington, US

Angelina Chloe wrote:
Thank you for your help!
I just was trying to get this profile more personal since I know it's always easy to work and feel free with person you know a little smile

About pictures, I keep them to let people know how exactly  do I look right now, should I keep them or delete anyway? or wait till I will get better ones?

Showing personality in the profile is a bit of a tightrope-walk: not enough and you put people to sleep, too much and you risk looking amateurish. A little glimpse of personality goes a long way.

But joking about physical violence or arson is never appropriate in a profile.

IMO, keep the images until you can replace them. But work at replacing them as fast as you can.

Sep 15 13 06:57 pm Link

Photographer

Jakov Markovic

Posts: 1128

Belgrade, Central Serbia, Serbia

Go out. Buy Vogue or Vanity Fair.

Learn poses.

Sep 18 13 06:35 am Link