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Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

It's a lazy Saturday afternoon so it's a good time for some casual, instructive critiques in 20 words or less.

I'm fairly easy to get along with, but will give you my opinion without being overtly harsh. However, that said, I tend to be a tad bit harder on bios. A bio is a resume of sorts and should be on target.

Just for fun, and no, I do not invite a return critique.

If you wanna play just let me now?

Edit: Closing this one out. Thanks for playing!

Sep 14 13 12:25 pm Link

Model

Maria Susanti

Posts: 546

Banyuwangi, Jawa Timur, Indonesia

let me know smile

Sep 14 13 01:37 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Maria Susanti wrote:
let me know smile

Wonderful bio! Nice variety of images. Love your look. Posing is slightly static. Need studio headshots. Well done!

Sep 14 13 01:52 pm Link

Model

Jupiter Red

Posts: 521

New York, New York, US

Curious to hear!

Sep 14 13 05:13 pm Link

Model

Tiffiney C

Posts: 570

Los Angeles, California, US

I'll play. Thanks.

Tiff
www.TiffineyC.com

Sep 14 13 05:15 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Shahzaade wrote:
Curious to hear!

Bright future in the business. Ooze sexy innocence. Port all over the place. Some images painfully bad. Find accomplished photographer.

Sep 14 13 05:48 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Tiffiney C wrote:
I'll play. Thanks.

Tiff
www.TiffineyC.com

From bio, to port to website should be required reading/viewing for every model on Earth. Stunning!

Sep 14 13 05:56 pm Link

Model

Danielle Reid

Posts: 4375

Little Rock, Arkansas, US

Be as harsh as you must smile

Sep 14 13 06:01 pm Link

Model

L e s y a

Posts: 15

Boston, Massachusetts, US

Would love to hear.
Thanks

Sep 14 13 06:07 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Danielle Reid wrote:
Be as harsh as you must smile

Very attractive. Picture laying on bed excellent. Lose the red wig. Find a good fetish/nude photographer. Work on posing.

Sep 14 13 07:09 pm Link

Model

Danielle Reid

Posts: 4375

Little Rock, Arkansas, US

The Signature Image wrote:

Very attractive. Picture laying on bed excellent. Lose the red wig. Find a good fetish/nude photographer. Work on posing.

Thanks...but it's not a wig...

Sep 14 13 07:13 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

L e s y a wrote:
Would love to hear.
Thanks

Nice well-rounded portfolio. Nice posing. Would like to see more studio headshots. Very well done.

Sep 14 13 07:19 pm Link

Model

_M_M

Posts: 9

Dumont d'Urville - permanent station of France, Sector claimed by France, Antarctica

Me please!

Sep 14 13 07:20 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Mischi - wrote:
Me please!

Very attractive. Lose the top row of pix. Take out "family important." Red flag. Port is varied, well done. Headshots needed.

Sep 14 13 07:30 pm Link

Model

Jupiter Red

Posts: 521

New York, New York, US

The Signature Image wrote:

Bright future in the business. Ooze sexy innocence. Port all over the place. Some images painfully bad. Find accomplished photographer.

Thank you!
I think :p
I just want to be well rounded and have a very diverse port!
As for the painfully bad part, yikes hmm

Sep 15 13 12:13 pm Link

Model

Sarah_

Posts: 1487

Denver, Colorado, US

Yes please smile

Sep 15 13 01:00 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Sarah_ wrote:
Yes please smile

Wow! Wonderful port. Your images say "I'm ready to work!" While I applaud you for having a website it is a disaster.

Sep 15 13 01:39 pm Link

Model

Sarah_

Posts: 1487

Denver, Colorado, US

The Signature Image wrote:

Wow! Wonderful port. Your images say "I'm ready to work!" While I applaud you for having a website it is a disaster.

May I ask what about the website is a disaster?  Is a technical issue or content issue?  I have heard of some technical difficulties with certain browsers.

Sep 15 13 03:52 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Sarah_ wrote:

May I ask what about the website is a disaster?  Is a technical issue or content issue?  I have heard of some technical difficulties with certain browsers.

For the life of me I cannot figure the purpose of your website? Are you an actress, singer, model, arts consultant, a salesperson looking for a job or a combination of all?

Your gallery is buried under the Personal link and when you click the link I was taken to a multitude of thumbnails that appeared more Facebook than  Gallery.

The site is difficult to navigate and extremely wordy.

Sorry...

Sep 15 13 04:22 pm Link

Model

Sarah_

Posts: 1487

Denver, Colorado, US

The Signature Image wrote:

For the life of me I cannot figure the purpose of your website? Are you an actress, singer, model, arts consultant, a salesperson looking for a job or a combination of all?

Your gallery is buried under the Personal link and when you click the link I was taken to a multitude of thumbnails that appeared more Facebook than  Gallery.

The site is difficult to navigate and extremely wordy.

Sorry...

I would agree that the purpose is convoluted.  I wish I had chosen a pseudonym for modeling because I've put myself into a precarious situation.  The majority of of people who Google me are doing so for modeling purposes.  Another large segment are searching for my music theatre info.  Those two groups can be combined fairly easily, but following the completion of my master's degree last year I have a huge number of business employers looking at my website, as well.  I thought my welcome page and tabbed divisions took care of this, but apparently the solution is not working.

I'm considering splitting the site more distinctly into into two completely separate divisions: one for modeling and music theatre and another for corporate information.  Do you have any thoughts on this potential solution?

Sep 15 13 04:53 pm Link

Model

Ruqya

Posts: 58

Bergen, Hordaland, Norway

Sure,hit me up!

Sep 15 13 05:00 pm Link

Model

winking_wonder

Posts: 5637

New York, New York, US

me?

Sep 15 13 05:01 pm Link

Photographer

NothingIsRealButTheGirl

Posts: 33529

Los Angeles, California, US

This is not the '20 word or less' forum.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/po.php?thread_id=545974

Sep 15 13 11:10 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Sarah_ wrote:

I would agree that the purpose is convoluted.  I wish I had chosen a pseudonym for modeling because I've put myself into a precarious situation.  The majority of of people who Google me are doing so for modeling purposes.  Another large segment are searching for my music theatre info.  Those two groups can be combined fairly easily, but following the completion of my master's degree last year I have a huge number of business employers looking at my website, as well.  I thought my welcome page and tabbed divisions took care of this, but apparently the solution is not working.

I'm considering splitting the site more distinctly into into two completely separate divisions: one for modeling and music theatre and another for corporate information.  Do you have any thoughts on this potential solution?

Yes, modeling/acting one website. Professional/business another site. That works. : )

Sep 16 13 02:36 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

NothingIsRealButTheGirl wrote:
This is not the '20 word or less' forum.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/po.php?thread_id=545974

If you consider my critiques "BS" or not worthy then report me to the Mods.

I've seen other critiques offered that require a one word answer so I do not see your point?

BTW, after I posted I checked with the Mods to see if it was properly placed? They said yes.

Sep 16 13 02:42 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Ruqya wrote:
Sure,hit me up!

Your beauty is shocking. Focus on improving the quality of your portfolio. Your poses are a tad stiff. You've got a future!

Sep 16 13 02:47 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

winking_wo.nder wrote:
me?

Miffed? You have a ton of comments, but I'm not seeing it? Port is weak and all over the place. Sorry...

Sep 16 13 02:52 pm Link

Model

Azia Rose

Posts: 228

Portland, Oregon, US

Yes please smile

Sep 16 13 03:32 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Azia Rose wrote:
Yes please smile

I was prepared to love you -- then I opened your port. Model skills 5. Images 4. Tattoo on wrist 1.

Sorry...

Sep 16 13 04:13 pm Link

Model

Azia Rose

Posts: 228

Portland, Oregon, US

The Signature Image wrote:

I was prepared to love you -- then I opened your port. Model skills 5. Images 4. Tattoo on wrist 1.

Sorry...

That's okay, we've all had bad breakups. Mine came in the form of a tattoo :p

Sep 16 13 04:15 pm Link

Photographer

Eric SUN

Posts: 2899

Toronto, Ontario, Canada

Sep 16 13 04:28 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

I'd love to play! smile

Sep 16 13 05:22 pm Link

Model

W I L L O W

Posts: 343

Portland, Oregon, US

This is fun!!

Sep 16 13 06:18 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

Lela Jesse wrote:
I'd love to play! smile

Well done! A nice varied port. Pouty look that I love. You have a career in pinup modeling. Bio long, but works.

Sep 16 13 06:39 pm Link

Model

julia00

Posts: 57

Rochester, New York, US

smile

Sep 16 13 06:45 pm Link

Model

Lela Jesse

Posts: 1148

Arcata, California, US

The Signature Image wrote:

Well done! A nice varied port. Pouty look that I love. You have a career in pinup modeling. Bio long, but works.

Thank you!

Sep 16 13 06:48 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

W I L L O W wrote:
This is fun!!

Willow, stunning portfolio. Well done. Demonstrates what a model can do if she is dedicated and plans her career.

*Since I make the rules I'm going to go over my 20-word promise and add this: I would suggest you scrap the "...free time" and "...work TF with..." etc., in your TFP comments.

Simplify to "Select TFP only" and leave it at that Everything else makes you appear rude.

Sep 16 13 06:50 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

julia00 wrote:
smile

"I am in school now and have very little time to shoot..."

As a photographer I stopped here.

*Comment, not critique -- which is the excuse to go over 20-words. Who wants to work with a model who doesn't have time to shoot? Your bio begins with a negative and most photographers would just move on.

Remove it and I'll continue.

Sep 16 13 07:00 pm Link

Model

E L I N

Posts: 199

Montreal, Quebec, Canada

Me?

Sep 16 13 07:06 pm Link

Photographer

The Signature Image

Posts: 12055

Gorham, Maine, US

E L I N wrote:
Me?

Dark. Moody. Sex. Sensual. Well done. You've found your niche. Your port is pure pleasure.

Sep 16 13 07:27 pm Link