Well first...your bio is down-right confusing. . .And at parts a little rude. Italics are your sentences, bolds are my revisions, normal is just commentary.
I have been modeling not a long time, for about 6 months... I have not been modeling for long, only for about 6 months. (Honestly, I would not include this in your bio, as it is constantly changing. I have been modeling for five months, and you shouldnt be able to tell.)
...when I got a mate who does photography to do a shoot and it was something I thoroughly enjoyed, and want to be successful at. Okay...this thoroughly confused me...First, you made a run on sentence, which is bad. But then it just doesnt make sense. Not in the US anyway. I will try to take a stab at it...
I found that after I had finished my first shoot with my photographer friend, I had fallen in love with modeling.
I'm very enthusiastic and up for anything when it comes to modeling... Good, except you contradict yourself right after by saying you wont do nudes if they arent tasteful...so you could revise:
I'm very enthusiastic and up for almost anything when it comes to modeling... I will shoot nude as long as it is tastefully done, but as long as it is tasteful I will show anything. Okay. This is also confusing. You made a run on sentence redundant as well. You already said you would shoot nudes if it tasteful, leave it as that.
The body is beautiful after all! This is fine.
It's not about money for me it's just something that I enjoy and would like to be recognized for and if I could have half of the success that the most successful models got I would be delighted. This is fine.
If you are interested please e-mail me and I will reply as soon as I can, and if I will give you my time. Get rid of the last part. This makes you seem rude.
Thank for reading this hope to read comments and get approval from all you lovely people!
Now to your pics....
Ditch. This is not good. Just because your phone does a sepia tone, does not make it a good pic.
The diagnol on this is horrible,among other things. Leave this in the family vacation album.
You look cute here, but it does not belong in your port. You need quality over quantity. This is horrible exposure, and makes you look sqaure.
Hands cut off, background is horrible, and not flattering for your stomach or face.
This is a bit overblown, and not a good faceshot of you.
This is gorgeous despite the crop. Keep.
The person that edited this needs to leave your eyes with color in them.
GET RID OF THIS.
This is soooo aweful for your port, girl. Please delete immediately.
I dont understand what made you post this.
Horrible pose, post work and face.
Delete this. What does this do for your port? Nothing. Ask yourself this before adding every picture.
Us models have something we call the "hand bra"
Dont do it. There are more creative ways to do implied. And if your hand must be on your breast, then do not grab.
Watch your legs. You lost them here. And with them, your feet. There needed to be another light as well.
Myspace photos do not belong on MM
Keep. Meh. Work on awesome poses.
Very senior picture, and he cut off your hands, but keep til you get better stuff.
Please, Im begging you get rid of this.
If youre going to do the incredibly overdone cliche that is the railroad tracks picture, then do it well. This is baaaaad.
I dont know why its unedited, but it neeeeds to be edited if theres any chance of using it. The lighting, pose, and face are just so bleck.
Ugh. Im tired of looking at it.
Noobs use selective color.
I wish you had more neck here, and the color values were better.
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This makes my physically ill.
Delete it immediately.
Your arm is horrible, and it just leads to a horribly posed hand. This makes you look overweight, and its out of focus. Not to mention the horrible lighting and location. Appalling.
It is rare that I find an overexposed photo that I enjoy. This is no exception. Lost all detail, and cropped at your elbow.
Orange tan much?
Your skin tone varies so much from body part to body part.
Dead hooker pose, your thigh looks fat, and theres a lamp growing out of your head
Serena Cuevas wrote: I've read every reply you've made here. I'd be very interested in hearing (reading) what you have to say about me! Thanks!
This is bad. This is simply greytone. No deep blacks, no brigh whites. Your pose is okay, but it makes your stomach look less than tight, and your boobs look saggy. Work on posing your hands. This is bad. Also watch your neck.
This diagnol doesnt work. And its cropped at your elbow.