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Photographer
The Signature Image
Posts: 12,055
Gorham, Maine, US


As a photographer and former professional resume writer I sometimes read things in a model's bio that scream "red flag" or small things that might turn off the reader. As with a resume the bio should encourage responses, not discourage responses.

If you like I'll take a look at your port and bio and let you know if there are ways you might improve your presentation?

This is for fun and any suggestions I might make are just that -- suggestions. smile
Jul 09 11 07:21 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Kyra Mangual
Posts: 73
San Bernardino, California, US


please smile
Jul 09 11 12:14 pm  Link  Quote 
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Melinda Blain
Posts: 508
Scottsdale, Arizona, US


Me please?
Jul 09 11 12:19 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Amanda J Foster
Posts: 729
New York, New York, US


I need this. smile
Jul 09 11 02:33 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
coolbird
Posts: 49
Austin, Texas, US


I'd like some help please smile
Jul 09 11 03:19 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
The Signature Image
Posts: 12,055
Gorham, Maine, US


Kyra Mangual wrote:
please smile

Kyra, Your bio appears to be one long paragraph, i.e., it's wordy and hard to read. The information about when you graduate, etc., only takes up space and is of no use to the photographer. It is "I" and not "i." Use caps, please.

Keep it simple. Paint a simple word picture of yourself and make it no longer than perhaps 2 short paragraphs. Keep in mind that the MM template that you filled out provides most of the information a photographer or agency needs.

I think you have a bright future as a model. Shoot some more with photographers in your area and expand your port a bit. smile

Jul 10 11 06:03 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
The Signature Image
Posts: 12,055
Gorham, Maine, US


Melinda Blain wrote:
Me please?

Melinda, I would suggest dropping the "Hey I'm Melinda Blain" from your bio. It does not sound professional. Also, being home-schooled is not relevant. I would suggest saying "I have flexible hours." Noting that you are a ballet dancer is great. Most photographers love working with a model who has fluid moves.

You have a very, very bright future as a model. Work on that port some. Your port is good but try and work with photographers in your area to expand your port some. Show different looks, etc.

Jul 10 11 06:13 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Randy Potvin
Posts: 182
Rochester, New York, US


Mine?
Jul 10 11 06:15 am  Link  Quote 
Model
LexLethal
Posts: 671
New Orleans, Louisiana, US


Yes, please. smile
Jul 10 11 06:24 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
The Signature Image
Posts: 12,055
Gorham, Maine, US


Amanda J Foster wrote:
I need this. smile

Amanda, actually your bio is good. Short, sweet and to the point but it could be made a tad shorter.

The MM template asks Nudes, Yes or No? You indicated "No" so why stress that again? I do think, however, that stating no implieds, etc., is fine.

I would suggest that you delete references to "paid work." Again, only a suggestion, but at this point in your very young career you should focus on the art and not worry about pay for the moment.

There are some very fine photographers in your area. See if you can't get into a studio and add studio shots to your port. BTW, your port is fine.

Jul 10 11 06:27 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
The Signature Image
Posts: 12,055
Gorham, Maine, US


coolbird wrote:
I'd like some help please smile

Coolbird, Your bio is wordy. May I suggest deleting the paragraph that begins with "Although I am only 5'7"..." and the paragraph that begins with "As for right now..." The paragraphs add nothing to your bio. Other than that it reads well. smile

Your bio "screams" I have energy and want to work with you! That's a good thing.

Your port needs work. If you care to message me I'll go into detail.

Jul 10 11 06:39 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Catibra Burns
Posts: 1
Beaufort, South Carolina, US


I am interested in a bit (or a lot) of help. Please critique me if you can. Thanx!
cat.burns@yahoo.com or contact me here on MM
Oct 25 11 06:24 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lilith Marie
Posts: 423
Portland, Oregon, US


[Nvm, just noticed how dead this thread is. XD]
Oct 26 11 03:28 pm  Link  Quote 
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Rebecca Elizabeth Gomez
Posts: 321
Toronto, Ontario, Canada


I would love to know your opinion Thanks!
Oct 26 11 03:35 pm  Link  Quote 
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Kendra from Canada
Posts: 441
Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada


yes please
Oct 26 11 03:41 pm  Link  Quote 
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Sineann
Posts: 620
Albuquerque, New Mexico, US


I'd love to hear your thoughts! smile
Oct 26 11 08:06 pm  Link  Quote 
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Lady Morgain
Posts: 3
Molde, Møre og Romsdal, Norway


oh, yes please!! smile)
Jul 31 12 07:30 am  Link  Quote 
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Solacium
Posts: 9,640
Charleston, South Carolina, US


me too! smile
Aug 03 12 05:44 pm  Link  Quote 
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Emily Smiles
Posts: 290
Columbia, South Carolina, US


I would love to know!
Aug 07 12 09:53 pm  Link  Quote 
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Jordan Bunniie
Posts: 1,643
Los Angeles, California, US


Nvm. XD
Aug 07 12 09:57 pm  Link  Quote 
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Kelsie Leigh
Posts: 968
London, England, United Kingdom


yes please smile
Aug 07 12 10:00 pm  Link  Quote 
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Jenny Jannetty
Posts: 449
Roanoke, Virginia, US


Me too!
Aug 08 12 12:37 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Love Annie
Posts: 60
Costa Mesa, California, US


Yes, please! This would be very useful. Thank you in advance!
Aug 08 12 12:49 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Axioma
Posts: 6,776
Gent, East Flanders, Belgium


mine too please
Aug 08 12 01:35 am  Link  Quote 
Model
RUSSIA
Posts: 1
Boston, Massachusetts, US


could you please review my bio. i need some help.. smile
Aug 23 12 01:17 pm  Link  Quote 
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Ms Cupcake Couture
Posts: 123
Los Angeles, California, US


I'd greatly appreciate it smile
Aug 23 12 03:06 pm  Link  Quote 
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Kitty Brea
Posts: 22
Beaverton, Oregon, US


Aug 24 12 10:22 am  Link  Quote 
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Avery Mann
Posts: 3
Sacramento, California, US


Please do!
Aug 26 12 08:34 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Yin L
Posts: 264
London, England, United Kingdom


me?
Aug 27 12 06:30 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Larisa Rose
Posts: 4
New York, New York, US


Hello,
I am interested in having you review my bio. I have not updated it in awhile, but it seems to be working for me. I have gained a lot of notice, but i think it is time for a change, and i also need a new or reconstructed bio for another website i have for my modeling, I was wondering if you could review mine and give me a few tips. I have a resume also. What else needs to be said in a bio?
Oct 12 12 11:10 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Danielle Reid
Posts: 4,101
Miami, Florida, US


Please read mine. I usually have trouble "selling" myself
Oct 15 12 09:22 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
The Effective Image
Posts: 3,943
Lansing, Michigan, US


Danielle Kitten wrote:
Please read mine. I usually have trouble "selling" myself

Did you notice that the last time he reviewed a profile was in July of last year (2011)? This is an OLD thread!

Oct 16 12 10:18 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Danielle Reid
Posts: 4,101
Miami, Florida, US


The Effective Image wrote:

Did you notice that the last time he reviewed a profile was in July of last year (2011)? This is an OLD thread!

Well people should stop posting on it then and moving it to the top of the list -_-

Oct 16 12 11:03 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Jojo West
Posts: 972
Silver Spring, Maryland, US


If you have time, would love to get your input on mine.

Thanks.
Oct 23 12 07:34 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Maria Susanti
Posts: 540
Banyuwangi, Jawa Timur, Indonesia


me please
Oct 23 12 07:48 pm  Link  Quote 
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