Designit - Edward Olson wrote:
If you need help writing it, you are not the right person to write it.

My foundation has actually already been set down, can you please give me feedback on it ?



I need help to improvise it, to make it better

Some written works will have a long list of references in their references section, example : http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Malaysia

I am hoping my work can be the same

Maria Michaela wrote:
there is too much opinion in here and too many "facts" that you can't support.

it's for local models in malaysia? what type of modelling? freelance?

Thank you so much for your feedback, please tell me more

How can I present supporting details for my points ?




Yes, its mainly for Malaysia

Yes, freelance modelling

Ecarus Dreamlabs wrote:
Thank you so much for your feedback, please tell me more

How can I present supporting details for my points ?




Yes, its mainly for Malaysia

Yes, freelance modelling

okay... first of all you need to make the distinction between freelance modelling and agendymodelling. if there's a page about agencymodelling, refer to that.

any numbers you use should be able to backed up. for instance, when you say:

"Although being born beautiful can be helpful, 8 out of 10 times it does not guarantee you will be a successful model."

where did you get those "8 out of 10 times"? why not 7? or 9,5 ? is this really true or just a number you made up? if it's the last, better say something like:

"although being born beautiful can be helpful, it does not guarantee you will be a succesful model"

be careful with the opinions . for instance, here:

"In overseas I think the women there make up every day, its like a consumer culture there which force every woman to do make up every day. Like last time I saw every woman overseas they wear heavy make up to work or university every day"

that's your observation, your opinion. Is it the truth though? what do you mean by "overseas" anyway: the rest of the world? just because you saw it, doesn't make it true. some people wear a lot of make up all the time, some don't.

even if it's true that people wear make up to university, that doesn''t mean anything when it comes to model. A lot of fulltime models wear make up for modelling, but no make up at all in their everyday life. And since you are talkig about freelance modelling anyway: for a lot of types of modelling, make up isn't that big of a deal (arrt nude or figure modelling, for instance)

instead of that whole part, just get down to what you actually want to say: that it is an advantage if you can do your own make up, even if it's just basics. It is not a requirement, but it helps.

so in general: don't speak from opinion. Wiki is not about people having opinions: it's about facts. So don't speak from the "I" form either: "I think... I heard... I have seen... I..." no. facts, not opinions.

watch your spelling. You tend to use words that are acceptable to use to your friends, but not on a wiki page. examples I have seen are:

coz
=p
vids

and so on.

I also find it peculiar that, for a page on freelance modelling, there is no overview on the different types of freelance modelling and what their individual requirements are.

If I would write this page, I would go for a different structure, more like this

*general explanation of what freelance modelling is (as opposed to agency modelling.

*different genres of freelance modelling and their requirements

*general tips and tricks that make you a better model (this is where you could talk about make, posing tips, general attitude...)

*how to become a freelance model (determining the genre you want to do, work with local photographers TF until you have a stronger portfolio, set starting rates and grow from there etc. Maybe even a part about the legal aspect of it (some models do this fulltime, like a job, so how does that work legally)

*helpful sites (like modelmayhem...)