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Photographer
noel marrero
Posts: 433
Menlo Park, California, US


Dan K Photography wrote:
Me please.

Okay, the only reason I'm letting that poem in your profile stand without serious critique is that I like your portfolio smile

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 363213.jpg
Beautiful image.  Nice pose except for the hands IMO.  Love the makeup, feel, and choice of B&W.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120710/14/4ffc9b5bb103b_m.jpg
Okay, WOW, that really pops.  Ring flash?   Please tell me you super imposed that, because the background is exceptional, and I have no idea how you could out W/s the sun.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120109/12/4f0b5170708ae_m.jpg
Interesting but not your best IMO.  The eyes pop a bit to much for my taste making them look fake.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120130/07/4f26b6ae70ec9_m.jpg
Love it.  Very stylized and period.  Great execution, beautiful lighting. 

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120417/07/4f8d7da829e63_m.jpg
Another beautiful capture.  Love the intensity the eyes, great look.

Great shots in the port.  Really love some of those B&W images.

Jul 16 12 10:49 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
noel marrero
Posts: 433
Menlo Park, California, US


CRUIKSHANK PHOTOGRAPHY wrote:
Ok smile

Wow, truly excellent.  Your B&W work is amazing especially the "Darker Images".   Instead of just spewing adjectives all over the place, I'll summarize with:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120707/12/4ff88af5b2a87_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120712/23/4fffc4d508846_m.jpg

Great use of contrast.  Great job at making things pop.  Excellent poses from the models.  Excellent use of the environment.  Great story telling.  I found they way you pull my eye towards a small but captivating subject within a large yet beautifully detailed canvas.   Please write a book then send me a copy.  I'd like to hold your reflector, and I've never said that to a guy before.  smile

So, let's assume I find your body of work phenomenal, so I'll list some of the less phenomenal things IMO:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120629/22/4fee93e98cd2f_m.jpg
I didn't feel that distressing the image added to the story, and instead took away from the amazing detail your backgrounds usually have.

For the "Lighter Side"
I didn't feel your lighter side images are nearly as strong as your darker ones.  Especially they didn't have the attention to detail I felt in the other set.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120714/01/5001270405b7c_m.jpg
Squinting model, with part of the tattoo showing.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120713/23/50010fd2f127c_m.jpg
The face is too shadowed, causing a shift in the skin tone to orange, probably from kicking up the exposure.  The bottom half is fine.

Jul 16 12 11:06 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Jwill Photo
Posts: 132
Orlando, Florida, US


If you have a moment smile
Jul 16 12 11:15 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
noel marrero
Posts: 433
Menlo Park, California, US


Devin Workman wrote:
I'm in.

First, would love to know where you shot some of these.  Great backdrops.  smile
I think your watermarks are adversely affecting the images. 

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120628/06/4fec5af61c4d8_m.jpg
Very nice.  Well executed.  Love the long legs, the shiny the environment.  Wouldn't have minded shiny shoes to go with it.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120628/06/4fec5ab86f76c_m.jpg
Also very nice, love the attitude.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120521/21/4fbb11548722c_m.jpg
Right arm unfortunately cut.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120313/23/4f6038abaca85_m.jpg
Lightings to harsh IMO.  I understand that you chose harsh ligthing to go with the negative emotion, but I like your more "candy" look better.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/11 … 06f3b3.jpg
Eyes look strange almost closed but not. 

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111003/21/4e8a88e6c6f2d_m.jpg
Love the look, great intensity, but the baggy clothes hides the shape.

Some really great shots.  A couple nits for posing and expression.  There are some distractions in the background I think you should fix.  The seams in the wallpaper.  The marks on the check board floor...  I would recommend a touch more fix up so that you don't accidentally let a great image become a good image.  Basically a bit more attention to detail.

Jul 16 12 11:18 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
noel marrero
Posts: 433
Menlo Park, California, US


MartaBrixton wrote:
Get some good sleep !
And me tomorrow please smile

Okay, then back to bed again.  smile    Damn, I gotta get my images processed.  Lol

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120518/08/4fb66fef2d0f2_m.jpg
Nice image.  I think it's flattering, but doesn't tell me much about you as a model.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120707/08/4ff854d014fae_m.jpg
Pose feels a bit awkward.  The bend in the back is causing the very straight line down the front, making the shape weird IMO.  Crop is not thrilling me either.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120707/08/4ff855b7c3046_m.jpg
Very nice.  Beautiful face.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120706/07/4ff6f49578494_m.jpg
Again the curve feels a bit strange to me.  Careful with hiding the fingers and hard breaks at the wrists.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/10 … de74f6.jpg
This is the first image I feel that showcases you as a model.  Great pose, phenomenal shape.   I wish that as long as we are getting a larger version of you as a shadow, that we got the whole shadow and darkened it too to make it more impressive.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120707/08/4ff85ac4d0003_m.jpg
Lovely face.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120705/03/4ff5706b43802_m.jpg
Awkward.  Elbow into the camera.  Sticking the caboose at the camera wasn't quite the sexy you were looking for IMO.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120707/08/4ff85ac2379f8_m.jpg

Soft and lovely.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120707/09/4ff8638ad9fa4_m.jpg
Nicely done.  Great makeup on you, love how the face looks, and good expression.

You have some amazing curves.  Make sure to show them off.  Look for photographers that can help you capture images with a wider range of expression.  Practice the poses, and learn what makes you look best.

Jul 16 12 11:33 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
noel marrero
Posts: 433
Menlo Park, California, US


MelissaAnn  wrote:
If you're still going. smile

I'll get you tomorrow.

Jul 16 12 11:34 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
noel marrero
Posts: 433
Menlo Park, California, US


Taking a break folks got some image to process.
Jul 16 12 11:34 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
DAN CRUIKSHANK
Posts: 1,784
Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada


Wow thanks so much! I'm new to this so I appreciate all you said smile
Jul 17 12 06:49 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
TDSImages
Posts: 802
Salt Lake City, Utah, US


noel marrero wrote:

First, I like that your images tell a story.   On the down side I felt the light control was a touch off, or at least I would have made some different choices.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120601/17/4fc95b8d18468_m.jpg
The white watermark is really killing this image that I so want to like.  I do feel this is under exposed in a way that is not helping the mood.   Looks like you set up a hair light and it was just a bit off, but the whole image was so dark that you had to crank it up and get noise while not having detail in the hair.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120320/07/4f6893c8a5340_m.jpg
Interesting, but I feel like the pose is missing something.   The image as a whole could use a bit more pop.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 477e1e.jpg
I like the concept and execution.  I like the yellow to warm it up, but the color's just a bit too much I think.  Otherwise great image IMO.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110813/10/4e46af4769eb5_m.jpg
Would have liked just a touch more light on her right eye to have it pop out of the shadow a bit.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110711/19/4e1baca94bb8a_m.jpg
Feels over exposed, with loss of detail.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110614/07/4df7770812e1b_m.jpg
I like the pose, love the hair.  Would have like to see a touch less fall off at the legs.   Not sure what that black thing is behind her arms.  Looks too straight for clothing, but I think it's hurting the image.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110407/08/4d9dda44e4ef0_m.jpg
I think this is my favorite in your port.   I like the highlights in the "head dress" and the darkness overall.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/11 … 4c93b9.jpg
Another nice image that feels under exposed in the legs.

Overall I would say watch your exposure.  I think it's great that you are doing concepts that tell a story, but a better exposure would make for a stronger image.

Thank you so much for your time and effort in critiquing my portfolio.  You are spot on in your evaluation and I really appreciate it!!

Jul 17 12 07:09 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Devin Workman
Posts: 166
Los Alamitos, California, US


noel marrero wrote:
First, would love to know where you shot some of these.  Great backdrops.  smile
I think your watermarks are adversely affecting the images.

Thanks for the great advice. The first few in my portfolio were all shot at Wonderland Studios in Anaheim. Fantastic studio with so many costumes and sets to choose from.

Jul 17 12 07:20 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Maria Panina
Posts: 139
New York, New York, US


I'd like a critque
Jul 17 12 07:42 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Annabella Kathryn
Posts: 848
Seattle, Washington, US


That's great, thanks!
Jul 26 12 11:04 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
JMarvin
Posts: 421
Portland, Oregon, US


me!
Jul 26 12 11:13 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Candy Ma
Posts: 167
San Diego, California, US


go for it! smile
Sep 01 12 11:16 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
KCLynne
Posts: 466
Harlan, Iowa, US


If your still going sure
Sep 02 12 09:41 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Devin Sparkes
Posts: 59
Los Alamitos, California, US


i believe i need some critiquing, always room to learn!
Sep 02 12 01:41 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Ashile Mooney
Posts: 57
Bakersfield, California, US


have a look:]
Sep 11 12 04:22 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Lily LeFleur
Posts: 50
Los Angeles, California, US


I'd love to hear what you think!
Sep 11 12 11:39 am  Link  Quote 
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