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Slixed Foliche
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Christmas is approaching, so I’m giving those who do read a present. The first three chapters from my twelve chapter fantasy novel titled: The Sky People-Battlefield Earth, coming out on 24th December 2012.It’s an awesome book. Action packed and it will definitely challenge your thinking and beliefs about the world. The book is the first in The Sky People sequence. It is a twelve chapter novel with estimated word count of about 120 000. It is along the lines of Star trek, Star wars, The Avengers, Avatar, resident evil, sorcery and magic etc. An awesome fantasy/sci-fi read with a very strong and interesting storyline.

awesome fantasy/sci-fi read with a very strong and interesting storyline.
What is it about?
Battlefield Earth is a high romping, action packed, fantasy novel based on Greek mythology, African stories, and other worldwide creation myths from different cultures around the world. It tells the story of Khama, a strong, adventurous young man, with psychic abilities, whose uncle and father are at war with each other over kingship. Khama’s uncle, Sekai, have broken away with close to a third of the Ngwato tribe, and started a rebellion against the kingdom. With the help of AIs and robots from the future, he has tied an ancient horror; a monstrous fire spiting flying serpent dubbed ‘Nyanyabulembu’, to him and uses the monster to wage war on the Ngwato Kingdom. But the alien machines have tricked him; they have put his mind under their control using their advanced science to use him as a puppet for their own agendas. They intend to use him to do their dirty work on the outer earth surface because they are trapped in their underground cities, they can’t roam outer earth freely. Their creators and enemies, are looking for them to exterminate them. Meanwhile, Tilyhn, a blond haired white woman from the technologically advanced alien civilization at the inner hollow center of the earth, is caught and imprisoned by Sekai to be kept as a sex slave forever, and she tries hard to escape from his clutches.
I’m doing this intentionally, steal my book and idea and I ‘ll sue you all you got. That said, here is the download link:  http://www.mediafire.com/?b9z81ot44ofwat4
NB:There might be spelling mistakes in there, the book is still being edited.
Oct 03 12 12:11 am  Link  Quote 
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NothingIsRealButTheGirl
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Well, you misspelled "Battlefield," for starters.

Plus I'm pretty sure the people who already made the movie based on the book by that name are not going to be happy.
Oct 03 12 12:13 am  Link  Quote 
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NothingIsRealButTheGirl
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Los Angeles, California, US


Damnsamn Slixed Foliche wrote:
I’m doing this intentionally, steal my book and idea and I ‘ll sue you all you got.

Um, yeah. It doesn't work quite that way.

Oct 03 12 12:17 am  Link  Quote 
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Virtual Studio
Posts: 5,584
Toronto, Ontario, Canada


Damnsamn Slixed Foliche wrote:
I’m doing this intentionally, steal my book and idea and I ‘ll sue you all you got.
NothingIsRealButTheGirl wrote:
Um, yeah. It doesn't work quite that way.

No - it works that way. They can sue all they want. The big question is will they win? big_smile

Oct 03 12 02:11 am  Link  Quote 
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Orca Bay Images
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Lodi, California, US


Damnsamn Slixed Foliche wrote:
An awesome fantasy/sci-fi read with a very strong and interesting storyline.

Not so awesome. So much wrong with the sample.

For starters, there's the start. The book has a seventeen-page prologue that's pretty much a history lesson. Such a massive naked infodump up front is usually a portent of lazy writing. You should be Heinleining that info into the story or at least doling it out in smaller, more digestible pieces.

And are you sure you want to go with that title?

Oct 03 12 04:08 am  Link  Quote 
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SKPhoto
Posts: 25,779
Newark, California, US


It is along the lines of Star trek, Star wars, The Avengers, Avatar, resident evil, sorcery and magic etc.

Well, I think this says it all.

And while titles cannot be copyrighted, do you really want to title it after a movie that one "worst movie of the decade" awards?

Oct 03 12 04:12 am  Link  Quote 
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Caradoc
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Scottsdale, Arizona, US


Orca Bay Images wrote:
Not so awesome. So much wrong with the sample.

borat

Oct 03 12 04:40 am  Link  Quote 
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Ronin_LLC
Posts: 2,012
Louisville, Kentucky, US


The book is crap. Sorry it is. Its a god awful child like attempt at a wannabe generational Othello. I think reading it actually makes you dumber.

BTW Battlefield Earth, by L Ron Hubbard, was an actual good book.(The movie was crap) And Sky People I believe was a book written by S. M. Stirling.

Not only is the Prologue a mind numbing instant book killer, the rest of what I read was just taken piece by piece from other decent and not so decent works of fiction. Not to mention that the writing alone in unimaginative and lame. Like reading a 6th graders summer vacation report.


Stephenie Meyer is a  better writer than this, and she should have her hands broken for the trash she writes.
Oct 03 12 06:10 am  Link  Quote 
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Looknsee Photography
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Portland, Oregon, US


I love Sci Fi & Fantasy.

Somehow, I'm not interested.
Oct 03 12 08:00 am  Link  Quote 
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Piscis Noctis
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Santa Rosa, California, US


Ronin_LLC wrote:
BTW Battlefield Earth, by L Ron Hubbard, was an actual good book.(The movie was crap) And Sky People I believe was a book written by S. M. Stirling.

I'm interested in knowing what your definition of "good book" is.

Oct 03 12 08:49 am  Link  Quote 
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Caradoc
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Ronin_LLC wrote:
Battlefield Earth, by L Ron Hubbard, was an actual good book

yikes

Oct 03 12 09:06 am  Link  Quote 
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Ronin_LLC
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Louisville, Kentucky, US


Piscis Noctis wrote:

I'm interested in knowing what your definition of "good book" is.

A good book has one of two components. It either has a good story, or a good storyteller.

A good story is any story you want to hear no matter how it is told or who tells it.

A good storyteller is any writer who can tell any story no matter how good or bad, and you want to hear it.

Battlefield earth was a engaging story, worth reading. Though in the hands of a better story teller it would have been great. The movie was total and utter shit.

Now L Ron Hubbards novel "Fear" was both a good story and well told.

The man himself was nucking futs, but one of the requirements for being a good writer is to be at least a little nuts.

Oct 03 12 09:45 am  Link  Quote 
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Virtual Studio
Posts: 5,584
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Ronin_LLC wrote:
Battlefield Earth, by L Ron Hubbard, was an actual good book
Caradoc wrote:
yikes

+1

It was the most turgid cliche filled piece of crap I ever started.

Oct 03 12 11:09 am  Link  Quote 
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Orca Bay Images
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Funny, how writers who make a pointed, upfront threat of suing others for theft of their ideas and writing rarely have anything worth stealing.
Oct 03 12 02:30 pm  Link  Quote 
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Orca Bay Images
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Virtual Studio wrote:
It was the most turgid cliche filled piece of crap I ever started.

Not to defend the OP's novel, but I've read worse. Far worse. FAR worse.

"Attack of the Rockoids" is a prime example. The author is a legendary netcrank and the writing is awful. Almost "Eye of Argon" awful. The Rockoid author has a hard time figuring out how to transition from scene to scene, so he has the protagonist -- an ultra-elite special forces secret agent dude -- repeatedly accidentally knock himself unconscious. I almost cracked a rib from the laughter.

Oh, yeah, and then there's The Eye of Argon.

Oct 03 12 02:45 pm  Link  Quote 
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Orca Bay Images
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Ronin_LLC wrote:
A good book has one of two components. It either has a good story, or a good storyteller.

A good story is any story you want to hear no matter how it is told or who tells it.

A good storyteller is any writer who can tell any story no matter how good or bad, and you want to hear it.

So much nonsense in that. A good story can easily be rendered unreadable by a bad enough author and a good storyteller won't polish up a turd.

A good book requires both a good story and a good storyteller.

Oct 03 12 03:09 pm  Link  Quote 
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Extrosy
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Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


I couldn't get past the introduction to the download link.
Oct 03 12 03:22 pm  Link  Quote 
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Ronin_LLC
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Louisville, Kentucky, US


Orca Bay Images wrote:
So much nonsense in that. A good story can easily be rendered unreadable by a bad enough author and a good storyteller won't polish up a turd.

A good book requires both a good story and a good storyteller.

Truly good stories have endured through out the ages even when told by bad storytellers...

Take Grim's fairy tales for example. They have been around for ages and told and retold in varying versions, but still maintaining their essence.

For example, most people don't know that in the original versions most of Grim's fairy tales did not end happily ever after. Hence the "grim".


And a true test of a story teller's abilities are to "polish turds". I can think of a few good story tellers who could read or publish their grocery lists and they would be something worth listening to or reading.

Oct 03 12 03:32 pm  Link  Quote 
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Caradoc
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Scottsdale, Arizona, US


Orca Bay Images wrote:
"Attack of the Rockoids" is a prime example.

Check the Amazon reviews for that steaming turd. He apparently has eight Amazon accounts, too.

Oct 03 12 03:37 pm  Link  Quote 
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Visual Serotonin
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Los Angeles, California, US


On a related note I finally saw "Battlefield Earth" with John Travolta in dreadlocks sporting 20 in heels...

Not as bad as I thought smile Actually quite entertaining.
Oct 03 12 05:33 pm  Link  Quote 
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