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Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


I will tell you what I like in your port and think should stay, what I hate in your port and think you should scrap, and what I think is missing. Plus I'm a fiend on tumblr and love sharing inspiration.

All you have to do is tell me the same.

And..... go!

Please note: I tend to take a while to get to everyone, but only because I really give their ports a long think and look for images just for them.
Oct 15 12 03:02 am  Link  Quote 
Model
000---000
Posts: 706
Alberta, Alabama, US


Go ahead!
Oct 15 12 11:18 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


LizaK wrote:
Go ahead!

Keep this one:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120526/13/4fc138f25be97_m.jpg

It's quintessentially the perfect portfolio image. It shows off your gorgeous skin and great big blue eyes.

Get rid of this one:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120819/02/5030b19d4c21f_m.jpg

You're too cramped up in this pose and it looks unnatural and uncomfortable. You hair coming low over your face just serves to hide you and make it more difficult for you to make a connection with your viewer. Try not to close yourself off from the camera. Use the pose to accentuate your back and neck, but don't close down. This pose done correctly should look more like this: http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mb1lv … o1_500.jpg

What you need more of: You have lovely eyes and can pull off the innocent girl look with ease, but I want to see some smoldering sexy looks from you. Take this:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121004/13/506dedfa4126d_m.jpg
and start exploring your darker side. If you're okay with implied nudity, shed some clothing, play with that hair and tempt us a little. Something like this: http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m8cc6 … 2_1280.jpg

Oct 15 12 07:56 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Jonas JG
Posts: 17
Stockholm, Stockholm, Sweden


Cool idea! Yes, please smile
Oct 16 12 06:43 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
AWHill Photography
Posts: 151
New York, New York, US


I'm game to play.
Oct 16 12 12:32 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Hedy Suder
Posts: 166
Hagerstown, Maryland, US


Hello, yes please...just what I need.
Oct 16 12 05:24 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Hedy Suder
Posts: 166
Hagerstown, Maryland, US


Mea, you are gorgeous!  You have depth and variance in your looks and moods! You adapt. I like how you have 4 categories and think the images are really 1.graceful, 2.dark, 3.sexy, and 4powerful. your port is LARGE. But Is it robust?

My humble opinion is to narrow down the images to give one full page to each category.  20 images are perfect, everything can be seen at once, then further draws you in by YOUR image. I would suggest portrait style framing. We see you well in them I would keep them highest priority over the lanscape style framing.  I would still keep the highest artistic or visually appealing landscape framings just lower on the page. You have a lot of artist merit and are excellent at it but it isn't in your face right away, it's not drawing in because it's much smaller format. And frankly, we wanna see you!

I tend to like the portrait framing over the landscape framing (((for llamas ports)))  it fills the page and shows your beauty so much more, and all at once. It gets our attention!!!...hope that makes sense.
Ps. Composites don't add to this format either. Too small to stir interest.


Put out :
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30029115 and

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28650771

And http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28437131

They don't do your beauty justice.

I love this and think u should keep it in there forever :  http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/17 … #/26870639 definitely !
Just clip out composites and rearrange a little. You have layers and layers, keep doing what your doing!

keep evolving,
More alt /fashion images or high fashion/beauty for that matter.
More figure art
More environmental nudes
Oct 16 12 06:42 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Jonas JG wrote:
Cool idea! Yes, please smile

What should stay:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120913/10/505215045834b_m.jpg
Great profile, good choice for your avatar, and what can I say? It has "Game of Thrones" all over it and that shit is hot.

What should go:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120724/16/500f2d2822358_m.jpg
This is a terrible terrible demure nude. It would be just as awful on a female, but it certainly doesn't work with a male model. Bad angle on your body and face, makes you look 5ft tall and larger than you are, is awkward and is not artistic at all. Throw it away, never resurrect it and don't let anyone do this to you again. If you want to pull off male nudes, you need to study artistic male nudes, get a feel for the mood and shapes that you need to bring to the table, and learn how to pose for them: http://www.davidvanceprints.com/#a=0&at … 00&s=5&p=1
I know you're not into body building, but the right poses will best show off your body, believe me.

What I want to see more of: More edgy, moody images with oodles of male sensuality. You have long dark hair and dark eyes and I'm sure you could ave the audience in the palm of your hand if you turned up the heat. You have something edging closer to that here: http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120808/08/5022829f6d3cb_m.jpg
Now give me more of this: http://seanpwatters.files.wordpress.com … isin31.jpg
Get vulnerable, get sensual, get wet, get your hair all over your face. Pretty please.

Oct 16 12 07:48 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
MissEllie
Posts: 37
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Me please.
Oct 16 12 08:02 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
MissEllie
Posts: 37
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Keep: http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#29073534
Delete http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#28474691

Your port folio is great and shows a large range of styles. Keep up the great work ^^
Oct 16 12 08:09 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


AWHill Photography wrote:
I'm game to play.

It was hard for me to choose an image I liked because I feel like you're not lighting your shoots properly yet. I'm really struggling to see your subjects well, the shadows are obscuring their features, and the features of the clothing, and they make the girls look sick and very tired. To be honest with you, if you asked me to work with you, I would say no, because of your lighting. This shot I liked:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120827/12/503bc69c944fc_m.jpg
But I really really wish you had gotten the focus right.

This shot you should get rid of:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120911/19/504fed4866b70_m.jpg
Not that there's anything wrong with it, but this is Model Mayhem, not Band Mayhem. You're here to find models. And models don't care about shots of bands performing live. It doesn't tell us anything about your ability to work with us. Use this slot for another image with a model.

What I wanna see more of: Despite the lighting issues, I actually liked the idea of these shots:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120827/11/503bb937b130f_m.jpg
But I'd like to see you master the lighting and the environment, and I'd love it if you took your models outside. Kind of like a dreamy secret garden type of editorial: http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mbrgy … o1_500.jpg and http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_madob … o1_500.jpg and http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mbhhl … o1_500.jpg for inspiration. smile

Oct 16 12 08:25 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Hedy Suder wrote:
Hello, yes please...just what I need.

First of all, thank you so much for a thorough and well written critique. It is very much appreciated. smile

I like this:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120927/16/5064e3aa1db40_m.jpg
I just like the grain, the double exposure, the mood, the hue.

I think you should scrap this:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121002/11/506b38e65fad8_m.jpg
Three reasons. 1. It doesn't show models what you can do with them. 2. I loathe it when people desaturate an image with bright red in it, making the red look sickly grey-pink. If there is red it should always be RED. 3. It's just a bad shot, badly lit, unfocussed, weird burning and blurring in post going on...

What I'd love to see more of from you: Two things. Firstly, you need more strong portraits where the model is looking directly at the camera. Secondly, this gave me shivers:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30180990 18+
I love how it is very feminine and ethereal, and it reminded me of images of harems. I'd like to see you take that vein and work on it, take it outside, play with the light, the veils and robes, and work on movement with your model. Here is some inspiration: http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mb5f7 … o1_500.jpg and http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mb2on … o1_500.jpg and http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mam9z … o1_500.jpg

Oct 16 12 08:51 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Terence Bogue
Posts: 110
Melbourne, Victoria, Australia


Very inspiring work you do and would really appreciate your opinion.

I don't know that this series does you justice
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 5425b5.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 80cafb.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … b01ca7.jpg


I do like your work with Daniel Klass - especially this one

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 6a8b2d.jpg
Oct 16 12 08:57 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Hedy Suder
Posts: 166
Hagerstown, Maryland, US


Mea
Thank you so much. I will follow your advice. I really appreciate you taking the time to inspire me. -Hedy
Oct 16 12 09:28 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


MissEllie wrote:
Me please.

Thank you so much for the critique, lovely! smile

My favourite:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111130/03/4ed61aab38ad4_m.jpg
Because it shows your beautiful face, shows off how fair you are, and really exposes your vulnerability. I wish you still had that longer wispy blonde hair!

My least favourite:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#29994520 18+
This is just really stark and harshly lit, and it isn't flattering for your features. It's taken from an angle that cuts off your arms but amplifies your chest area, and makes you look disproportionate. plus she's done a weird thing to your eyes that is kinda freaky.

What do you need? I think you know what kind of art you'd like to do, and what kind of stuff inspires you. From our talks I think you are really attracted to the idea of human vulnerability, and the cool thing is that I think you pull off vulnerability perfectly. You just have to let yourself be exposed and you have to find the right people to collaborate with to express it. These I really really liked a lot:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#27255774 18+
I think you should find someone to shoot some Bill Henson-type portraits with, and some stuff like this: http://www.oliviervalsecchi.com/ which I think you will rock.

More stuff I wanna see you try: the stuff you post on tumblr! http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mbri6 … o1_500.jpg and http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mc0rk … o1_500.jpg and http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mc0rg … o1_500.jpg

Oct 16 12 09:32 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
MissEllie
Posts: 37
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Mea Culpa wrote:

Thank you so much for the critique, lovely! smile

My favourite:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111130/03/4ed61aab38ad4_m.jpg
Because it shows your beautiful face, shows off how fair you are, and really exposes your vulnerability. I wish you still had that longer wispy blonde hair!

My least favourite:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#29994520 18+
This is just really stark and harshly lit, and it isn't flattering for your features. It's taken from an angle that cuts off your arms but amplifies your chest area, and makes you look disproportionate. plus she's done a weird thing to your eyes that is kinda freaky.

What do you need? I think you know what kind of art you'd like to do, and what kind of stuff inspires you. From our talks I think you are really attracted to the idea of human vulnerability, and the cool thing is that I think you pull off vulnerability perfectly. You just have to let yourself be exposed and you have to find the right people to collaborate with to express it. These I really really liked a lot:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#27255774 18+
I think you should find someone to shoot some Bill Henson-type portraits with, and some stuff like this: http://www.oliviervalsecchi.com/ which I think you will rock.

More stuff I wanna see you try: the stuff you post on tumblr! http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mbri6 … o1_500.jpg and http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mc0rk … o1_500.jpg and http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mc0rg … o1_500.jpg

Thank you so much for your feed back it's very helpfull

Oct 16 12 09:38 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Terence Bogue wrote:
Very inspiring work you do and would really appreciate your opinion.

I don't know that this series does you justice
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 5425b5.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 80cafb.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … b01ca7.jpg


I do like your work with Daniel Klass - especially this one

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 6a8b2d.jpg

Thank you so much for your critique! smile

What I think you should keep forever:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/100328/01/4baf131a6e1be_m.jpg
and
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/080710/08/487604a2131cd_m.jpg
I mean, wow. Seriously. Perfection.

What I think you should get rid of:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 2#29662262 18+ This is the kind of shot I'd expect to see in the port of a GWC. It's a really awful angle for the model, and will make a lot of girls run away.
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 05#1531405 18+ I don't know what you did to this in post, but you killed it. Anne doesn't look like herself at all.
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 2#20607912 18+ Why? She has an absolutely stunning body and you obscured it with plastic? Why?
And this girl is seriously off the wall hot: http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120904/00/5045b0b4273db_m.jpg so why do you only have a shot up of her back, with wrinkly latex and not even showing her awesome profile? Please please tell me you photographed her from the front!

What I would love to see from you: Okay, you do great headshots, and I really like your little snippets of bodyscape type shots, but I'd love love love to see you combine both. You have a tendency to photograph your models from a not so good angle when you're trying to capture their whole body, http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120116/05/4f142341ba2eb_m.jpg so I'd suggest doing a bit of research into how fashion photographers work to elongate their model's bodies, and what kinds of lenses they're using. You really need some space to pull it off because if you're too close the lens will distort the model's midsection and make her look fat and short.

Inspiration for you to give you an idea of what I mean: http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_marxq … o1_500.jpg and http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mack4 … o1_500.jpg and http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m9ky5 … o1_500.jpg

Oct 16 12 10:14 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Hedy Suder wrote:
Mea
Thank you so much. I will follow your advice. I really appreciate you taking the time to inspire me. -Hedy

No problem! big_smile

Oct 16 12 10:22 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Terence Bogue
Posts: 110
Melbourne, Victoria, Australia


Thanks Mea - I do appreciate your comments and the time you take - And especially your finding the reference shots.

You are right about being too close - both physically and mentally - cramped - back against the wall!!

Also all too easy to be overly attached to the photographs that were a struggle to achieve.

It is great to have the benefit of an honest opinion and talented eye. Especially from a model's perspective.

Please come back and crit anytime
Oct 16 12 10:58 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Daniellekae
Posts: 1
Gold Coast, Queensland, Australia


I'm game : )
Oct 16 12 11:23 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Vanessa Lang
Posts: 1
Sunshine Coast, Queensland, Australia


Hi there. Can you please critique my profile.
Oct 17 12 01:42 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Terence Bogue wrote:
Thanks Mea - I do appreciate your comments and the time you take - And especially your finding the reference shots.

You are right about being too close - both physically and mentally - cramped - back against the wall!!

Also all too easy to be overly attached to the photographs that were a struggle to achieve.

It is great to have the benefit of an honest opinion and talented eye. Especially from a model's perspective.

Please come back and crit anytime

You're welcome! I know the feeling, and I always appreciate an objective eye myself. smile

Oct 17 12 01:44 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Daniellekae wrote:
I'm game : )

Freakin' awesome:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120621/03/4fe2f9d11c00a_m.jpg
O my god, you are so small and cute and petite and perfect and you have these gorgeous big eyes!!!
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120621/03/4fe2fcf487338_m.jpg
Do yourself a massive favor and form an ongoing working relationship with this photographer. It will help to develop your portfolio heaps.

Not so great:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120321/03/4f69ab8c7b5d5_m.jpg
A lighting nightmare: half your face is gone except for a single terrified googly eye! Should have been sexy, but just looks really awkward... This isn't doing you any favors.
Also: http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121005/18/506f848167be2_m.jpg
Be very very careful when posting work with yourself and other models in the same shot. If she has a different body type to you, the other model will only highlight your shortcomings. She is making you look short and overshadowed, better to post an image of you alone.

What's missing? You say you shoot nudes, but the only nudes you have are demure, and you're covered up mostly by The Hulk. Personally, I think you would absolutely smash artistic nudes. Check out http://www.modelmayhem.com/744454 who is also small and an excellent example of great nude modelling. I'd love to see you show off your beautiful body as much as your face.

Oct 17 12 02:01 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Vanessa Lang wrote:
Hi there. Can you please critique my profile.

The best image in your port:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120925/20/5062710cda361_m.jpg
It was a good choice for your avatar.

Okay, now the bad: You have WAY WAY WAY too many images in your portfolio. I am seriously forcing myself just to get through the pages and pages of images, and I just want to run away. You only need ONE (1) image from each set (and preferably from each shoot) in your portfolio. JUST ONE. And it should be the best representation of yourself and your abilities. You have dozens from each set and none of them are showing you very well. Photographers are going to stop looking at your portfolio and just skip over you. Go back to your portfolio and delete ALL BUT ONE image from each set. Less is more, believe me, less is more.

What to get rid of completely: Behind the scenes type stuff like these: http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120925/20/5062711503698_m.jpg and http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120925/19/50626f925a25b_m.jpg
And please get rid of the entire "Random Selfies" folder and all the events snapshots. Keep them for instagram and facebook, but no one here will take you seriously if you post those in your port.

Okay, so what should you be doing? You have fantastic height, and could do some great work, but you need to work with better photographers who are going to show that height off and make you look a-f*cking-mazing. So I want you to start looking at plus size high fashion images and get a feel for what a good photograph looks like, and then start looking for new emerging photographers who are capable of working to that level, develop a working relationship with them, and learn how to pose. And you need to get some very basic portrait images that show your face off well. Here are some shots to highlight what you should be looking for:
Super simple portraits: http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m6z8a … o1_500.jpg and http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_lzwxn … o1_500.jpg and
http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m7omj … o1_500.jpg
Poses and expressions:
http://static02.mediaite.com/styleite/u … 36x624.jpg and
http://i53.tinypic.com/pt7bb.jpg and
http://3.bp.blogspot.com/-f07DDIDwdVI/T … /jeans.jpg

Oct 17 12 02:41 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Tanya Shepherd
Posts: 2
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Would you please be able to check out mine? Thanks! smile
Oct 17 12 04:35 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Sylph Sia
Posts: 34
Sydney, New South Wales, Australia


Really interested, would love your perspective smile
Oct 17 12 05:32 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Tanya Shepherd wrote:
Would you please be able to check out mine? Thanks! smile

Love:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120523/01/4fbca09488c6f_m.jpg
Everything about this composite, from the make up and hair to the lighting and post, is great, and looks so professional. Keep it and don't ever take it down. It shows your face so well that I would strongly suggest getting more portrait shots with your hair up (and preferably no or very little make up): you have beautiful features.

Hate:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111124/05/4ece43eb53546_m.jpg
This doesn't look like... anything really. It isn't fashion, it doesn't look professional and it isn't flattering. It's just bleh... like... why does it exist? I know why, because a GWC said "Hey let's try this stupid idea that is vaguely similar to something I once saw done badly by someone else, and I'll take a picture of it." It doesn't belong in a model portfolio.

Wild card:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120926/02/5062c6bce2641_m.jpg
Okay, I'm not a fan of bikini shots, but this one grabbed me immediately because DAMN GURL, you look hot in a bikini! It's a pity you don't do nudes, but no reason why you can't do some very very saucy swimsuit and implied nude work that will have everyone drooling. My suggestion, find a photographer who does breezy beachy boho fashion really really well, and do some stuff like this: http://media-cache-ec3.pinterest.com/up … pFAz_b.jpg and http://media-cache-ec5.pinterest.com/up … ECrU_b.jpg and http://media-cache-lt0.pinterest.com/up … iTnl_b.jpg

Oct 17 12 05:56 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Vivid Phoenix
Posts: 2
Greensboro, North Carolina, US


Sound good. need much help as possible. Check me out
Oct 17 12 06:15 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Sylph Sia wrote:
Really interested, would love your perspective smile

Okay, I'm a do you a little differently...

Honorable mention:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120919/22/505aaae986c7e_m.jpg
I have a soft spot for this style.

WTF?
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120703/23/4ff3e92cb9c7d_m.jpg
I have a thing against polka dots, but this makes you look like you're a size 12 instead of a size 6...
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121010/08/50758fdc8ed8f_m.jpg
No self portraits for you! Seriously, the only selfie you should ever have in your portfolio is a simple portrait of your face with no make up to show what you look like. No weird "I drank too much absinthe" glasses.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120919/22/505aa7977aa3f_m.jpg
"O help, I'm being strangled by a candy cane!" I really really hope you got other, better images from this shoot, because it looks like a lot of effort went into your hair and make up.

Now lets get down to business.

F*CK YEAH:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120827/00/503b232338390_m.jpg
I think we both know where this is going. Girl, you were born for latex! This set is freakin' awesome, and you look amazing. Other images in your port just support this:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120707/02/4ff802e0e675b_m.jpg http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121017/04/507e9770631a6_m.jpg
Okay, here's the deal. You have a fantastic figure and face, you're petite and cute as a button and can play innocent or just plain sexy as hell. If you're going to rock alternative modelling you need to really really rock that shit. You need to get a series of poses that show you off and wow the crowd, and you need to work on your expressions. The competition in alt modeling is fierce, so you're going to have to bring it. Here's your homework: http://www.modelmayhem.com/219654

Other styles I think you could rock: http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m5hku … r4_500.jpg and http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m8iof … o1_500.jpg and http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m87la … o1_500.jpg

Oct 17 12 06:20 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Vivid Mind wrote:
Sound good. need much help as possible. Check me out

This is a hard one.

The best image in your port:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120920/09/505b47d4a2d33_m.jpg
But it's not in focus!

I'm really not a fan of any of your images, but these one's stand out:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120701/01/4ff00edb592eb_m.jpg
Cute baby, but this doesn't tell any llama whether you can photograph a grown woman. Doesn't belong here.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120920/09/505b465b8c12b_m.jpg http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120809/15/50243948c83c3_m.jpg
Cosplay yoga class gone horribly wrong? Why are you letting her (or making her) pose so badly?
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120920/09/505b44d8e8d49_m.jpg
Her expression says "I am bored and I don't like this guy and I don't like what he's doing." You do not want potential llamas to see this.

My suggestion: You still need to learn how to use your camera better and how to photograph under different natural lighting conditions. Do your llamas a favor and keep posing super duper simple. No one wants to do a whole series of difficult uncomfortable (and potentially unflattering) poses and then get crappy shots from them. You're not ready for big weird poses or fancy dress ups. You need to get a hang of correct angles and correct settings. It's time to go for super simple portraits until you have a hang of the light, and then progress onto more complicated stuff.

Some inspiration shots for you: http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m81vc … o1_500.jpg and http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m68bz … o1_500.jpg and http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m4und … r1_500.jpg

Oct 17 12 06:50 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Lakin S
Posts: 308
Ashland, Kentucky, US


I need some help! Plz & TY smile
Oct 17 12 10:11 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Flagstone Images
Posts: 1
Jimboomba, Queensland, Australia


Critique welcomed
Oct 17 12 12:22 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
KW-photo
Posts: 7
Gold Coast, Queensland, Australia


Not sure I'm ready for it but hit me with it Mea
Oct 17 12 05:06 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Bronte Beetson
Posts: 1
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Would love some constructive criticism please!
Oct 17 12 10:09 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Michaela-Ann
Posts: 161
Bendigo, Victoria, Australia


Would love to hear your opinion smile
Oct 17 12 10:43 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Sylph Sia
Posts: 34
Sydney, New South Wales, Australia


Mea Culpa wrote:

Okay, I'm a do you a little differently...

Honorable mention:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120919/22/505aaae986c7e_m.jpg
I have a soft spot for this style.

WTF?
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120703/23/4ff3e92cb9c7d_m.jpg
I have a thing against polka dots, but this makes you look like you're a size 12 instead of a size 6...
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121010/08/50758fdc8ed8f_m.jpg
No self portraits for you! Seriously, the only selfie you should ever have in your portfolio is a simple portrait of your face with no make up to show what you look like. No weird "I drank too much absinthe" glasses.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120919/22/505aa7977aa3f_m.jpg
"O help, I'm being strangled by a candy cane!" I really really hope you got other, better images from this shoot, because it looks like a lot of effort went into your hair and make up.

Now lets get down to business.

F*CK YEAH:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120827/00/503b232338390_m.jpg
I think we both know where this is going. Girl, you were born for latex! This set is freakin' awesome, and you look amazing. Other images in your port just support this:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120707/02/4ff802e0e675b_m.jpg http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121017/04/507e9770631a6_m.jpg
Okay, here's the deal. You have a fantastic figure and face, you're petite and cute as a button and can play innocent or just plain sexy as hell. If you're going to rock alternative modelling you need to really really rock that shit. You need to get a series of poses that show you off and wow the crowd, and you need to work on your expressions. The competition in alt modeling is fierce, so you're going to have to bring it. Here's your homework: http://www.modelmayhem.com/219654

Other styles I think you could rock: http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m5hku … r4_500.jpg and http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m8iof … o1_500.jpg and http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m87la … o1_500.jpg

Thanks for the lovely compliments and also for telling it like it is.
Hahah "No weird "I drank too much absinthe" glasses." Point very much taken, I'll just blame that shot on the absinthe wink

And ahh Mosh, that's some inspirational homework right there! & I'll look into the other styles as well, cheers for that!

As for your port it's really difficult to find fault with! So I'll start with the ones that are great:

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 2#27330082 - Lovely serene and peaceful mood, and your expression and pose completes the image

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#29458854 - This is fantastic, superb pose, its as if you're following in the wind with the grass, really complimentary.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 2#28445052 - This is just fierce!

Least favourite would probably have to be: http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#30286063 - I can't quite pinpoint what it is about it, but just does not do you as much justice as the rest of the series or your port.

smile

Oct 18 12 04:55 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Dev Dove
Posts: 5
Wilmington, North Carolina, US


Would appreciate a little feedback/constructive critiques.
Oct 18 12 04:36 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
EmilyDoll
Posts: 399
Fontana, California, US


=]
Oct 19 12 06:38 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Tanya Shepherd
Posts: 2
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Mea Culpa wrote:
Love:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120523/01/4fbca09488c6f_m.jpg
Everything about this composite, from the make up and hair to the lighting and post, is great, and looks so professional. Keep it and don't ever take it down. It shows your face so well that I would strongly suggest getting more portrait shots with your hair up (and preferably no or very little make up): you have beautiful features.

Hate:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111124/05/4ece43eb53546_m.jpg
This doesn't look like... anything really. It isn't fashion, it doesn't look professional and it isn't flattering. It's just bleh... like... why does it exist? I know why, because a GWC said "Hey let's try this stupid idea that is vaguely similar to something I once saw done badly by someone else, and I'll take a picture of it." It doesn't belong in a llama portfolio.

Wild card:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120926/02/5062c6bce2641_m.jpg
Okay, I'm not a fan of bikini shots, but this one grabbed me immediately because DAMN GURL, you look hot in a bikini! It's a pity you don't do nudes, but no reason why you can't do some very very saucy swimsuit and implied nude work that will have everyone drooling. My suggestion, find a photographer who does breezy beachy boho fashion really really well, and do some stuff like this: http://media-cache-ec3.pinterest.com/up … pFAz_b.jpg and http://media-cache-ec5.pinterest.com/up … ECrU_b.jpg and http://media-cache-lt0.pinterest.com/up … iTnl_b.jpg

Thank you for your comments!! They've been very helpful!! smile

Firstly, I loved your photos! There's a clear extensive range and you have some spectacular images in there. The below is my favourite, by far. I love how its different from a lot of the others. It's natural, shows you in a soft lighting and makes you look amazing.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 53ce30.jpg

Only one I wasn't a fan of:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 5220c6.jpg

When I first looked at it, I thought it was a home shot. However, when looking at it closer could tell it wasn't. Your face seems to say, 'Why are you taking a photo of me right now?' but the rest of the picture isn't.

Tanya smile

Oct 19 12 07:59 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


Lakin S wrote:
I need some help! Plz & TY smile

Get rid of every single shot take by this photographer that day:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121017/09/507edd9cea171_m.jpg http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121015/18/507cb992d007c_m.jpg http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121015/18/507cb8a92d43f_m.jpg
These shots have not been taken correctly for the ambient lighting conditions, and make you look ten years older than you actually are. They are extremely detrimental to your portfolio. The shoot was a write off, get better images.

These are gorgeous!:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120628/11/4feca07398a45_m.jpg http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120628/12/4fecaee04a552_m.jpg
They work so well for you, and have an edgy feel that suits you down to the bone. I love them. Keep working with this photographer!

I would love to see more of this in your portfolio:
http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m32ei … o1_500.jpg
http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m4dsp … o1_400.jpg
http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m5ryj … o1_500.jpg

Oct 21 12 06:17 am  Link  Quote 
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