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Paulfolio
Posts: 232
Worcester, England, United Kingdom


I shot this the other day and would love to know what people think, critique is always helpful

http://i.imgur.com/K1HkFl.jpg
Nov 07 12 03:33 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Lee_Photography
Posts: 8,447
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


WP Retouch wrote:
I shot this the other day and would love to know what people think, critique is always helpful

http://i.imgur.com/K1HkFl.jpg

Distracting background behind models back [Table top?]
Due to pose models has several neck wrinkles
Hair messy by models ear
Black of bra on model back has lots of noise

As far as the eyes the black part of the pupils are not round
Prefer not to have the eyes locked to one side, rather to have white on both sides of pupil
Some kind of white line along models bra strap on her left shoulder
Need to rotate head for true profile or more toward camera nose is protruding through outline of cheek

Wish you well

Nov 07 12 04:26 am  Link  Quote 
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Sandra Vixen
Posts: 763
Los Angeles, California, US


The table should be edited out.

I think the biggest thing is the light blow out, it's not really blown out and not really soft, kind of need to decide which one.

There also seems to be two temperatures of lighting going too, it's not bad though.
Nov 07 12 03:31 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
The Effective Image
Posts: 3,936
Lansing, Michigan, US


Well, it could use some help...

The table could go...

The blow-out because of the window is pretty bad... leaves a huge bright white space to pull the viewers eye off the model.

The neck creases could be softened a bit...

But her expression doesn't 'grab' me... can't really tell what she's thinking... but I'm pretty sure she's not flirting...

Just my opinion.
Nov 07 12 04:02 pm  Link  Quote 
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