Let me know what you think.  Not a professional but I think I have improved since I first came to MM.  Still in the learning phase so constructive criticism is welcome.  Mean spirited comments are not necessary.

Thanks.

Eyes appear to be squinting
Lipstick color appears not to match upper lip vs. lower lip, looks like you adjusted it in Photoshop
Less head tilt, distracting background


The eyes are the window to the soul, only when they are open

Areas to work on include model posing, location selection and lighting





Big logos are a distraction

this is by far my favorite.  Good complimentary colors, she's not squinting, good eye contact, nothing distracting in the background and nothing unflattering about the model.  In the shots of the model in the beige skirt and blueish shirt, the skirt bunches up some belly fat and the short shirt exposes it.  As the above commenter wrote, there is lots of squinting.  I'd recommend photographing in the shade(with something as a reflector), on an overcast day or just after sunset etc.

Thanks for the critique (both of you).  I will keep all that you have given me in mind the next time I shoot with either of them as well as when choosing photos for my port.