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Model
Lily LeFleur
Posts: 50
Los Angeles, California, US


I would love to know what you think of my portfolio if you're still letting people into your queue! Thank you in advance!
Dec 07 12 02:43 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Lily LeFleur wrote:
I would love to know what you think of my portfolio if you're still letting people into your queue! Thank you in advance!

of course I am - and I will be happy to try to give a helpful critique - however it will probably be a few days til I work my way down the list to you -

Dec 07 12 03:14 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Alexia Foxx wrote:
I don't know if I made the ten but I'd love some honest and helpful critiques on my portfolio!smile

Hello Alexia Foxx

i like that your profile is clear, direct, well organized and lucid -

your chosen avatar is a good shot and gives a pretty good sense of what you are about at least as I may infer from the majority of your portfolio

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30820319
this shot is not helping you -  it is not flattering or well captured

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 9#30820203
honestly, the expression here does not seem very engaging, gives the impression that you were bored with the shot at this point

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 9#30702888
I am just not buying the look here - the pose is fine, the look does not seem genuine

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30288425
another stock glamour pose with a look that is not selling it

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30379259
while I totally buy the look in this shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 9#30379258
and the mood in this one

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30288445
this is beautiful -  more work with this sort of approach would be a lovely direction for you

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 9#30803831
this is a better expression -  a big part of modeling is selling what you are posing - the eyes, the genuine-ness of the look, and the hand positions all go a long way toward this.....   this shot could have been improved by one small detail -  if your right hand was touching the handlebar somewhat sensuously....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 9#30820130
this is a pretty cool shot -  given the interaction with the environment I like the pose and look

Your shots that are more moody tend to be your best in terms of facial expression - 

in sum -

the facial expression is to me the biggest drawback in your work right now.  Some models are better at facial expression than posing, some better at posing than facial expression, but either way you can't let one side of the equation let down too much.....

Your glamour / pinup shots are the ones that for the most part lack the expressiveness to sell them.   Your more arty, moody shots are working better -

Dec 07 12 09:48 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Lauren Sweeney-Fenton wrote:
If you have time, me! smile

Hello Laruen Sweeney-Fenton -

You've been at it a while and it shows in your work, which is very polished over all.  I am going to have to work a bit hard to find some things that might be helpful.....

You are doing super things with you range of expression, with your eyes -

There are some shots where a stronger posture would be more engaging, in my opinion

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/26028747
I think a better shoulder alignment and posture would sell me on this one a bit better

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#19632249
I would have liked this one better with a lowered chin and more open and direct eyes and expression -

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#19797085
this shot is a weakspot in your port - there are aspects that I cannot properly critique here -  but I think you would have a stronger port without it.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#13718091
not a huge fan of this one either - something about the combination of the pose and perspective is just off for me

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#17511091
the blurred hand - motion blur ?  - is a big detraction for me

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30759663
the right arm coming toward the camera in combination with the perspective makes it look outsized - not your strongest shot -

in sum -   I would say that there are a few shots where a more elegant or aggressive posture would be an improvement - a few where more elegant hand positions also might be desired - but the biggest emphasis should be on improving the quality of your portfolio by deleting the weaker images.  In some if not many cases, the "right" people will judge you by your weakest work.....

Dec 07 12 10:00 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Jordan Bunniie wrote:
Hmm.. I'm curious.

Hello Jordan Bunniie -

well you know that I am a fan of your work (fair disclosure) so I'll get that out there in advance...

You have enough experience at this point to take some detail in critique so let's see what we can come up with....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30537394
Pretty shot - but let's re-imagine it with a few changes -
eyes a bit more open and focused
chin down just a smidge
elegant hands - nearly straight but not stiff fingers, slightly spread, lightly stroking your hair, the left placed a little lower touching your inner hip area with a bit more of  a sense of sensuality

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30741267
really like the intensity here - illustrates the better eye contact I'd like to have seen in the shot above

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30873979
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30741370
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30741412
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30741534
these shots are pretty far below the standard in your port for several reasons and should be removed


http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30741246
this is absolutely wonderful - and represents the standard I would love to see you aim for -  very elegant pose, moody but very engaged look -  you seem to be actually "seeing" something instead of being unfocused

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30741247
another very solid shot
 
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30741536
I suppose that there is an artistic statement being made here that I am missing.  Don't pitch it on my account - I just don't "get" it..

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30741289
super look - lovely hands

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#28018099
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#28018117
beautiful art piece - love the mood

Everything "below" this shot in your port is very lovely


so in sum -

concentrate on consistently lovely hand positions

focus more on higher quality, more artful work as far as additions to your portfolio - don't feel like you have to add something from every shoot necessarily

you have way too many shots -  port cleanup !  Suggest starting with those I've mentioned....  after that it gets harder....  use your port to show us the direction you want to go, now where you have been

concentrate on *focus* - you should seem as though you are really seeing something whenever your eyes are in the shot - 

avoid the occasional "chin up" shot -  a chin at or below the level of the camera is much more dynamic for you

the rest of your posing I find to be very elegant.

Dec 08 12 09:42 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Moodscapes wrote:
If you're still going - thanks :-)

Hello Moodscapes -

I really like the great majority of your work.  I see only a few minor things (from the perspective of my own skill level - I can't really critique that much better than I can "do" lol)

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/21214293
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/16199201
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/11379944
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/16212481
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/12669954
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/12397698
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/11811085
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/11379470
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30183157
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/24104585
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/22300668

as examples -  perhaps consider a slightly more dynamic, horizontally offset composition, more in line with golden mean / golden ratio perspective - as you have done in some of your other work.....

beyond that I am liking your exposure values and toning.  There is the occasional shot that could be revisited with respect to white balance, but that's about all I can contribute.  I very much enjoyed viewing your work.

Dec 08 12 09:52 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


MeganJeanne wrote:
Oh man. If you're still doing this, any advice would be so appreciated. I'm not sensitive and can take your toughest critique... Besides, it's all to learn and get better! And if you don't have time for me I understand. Cool port by the way! thankyouthankyou.

Hello Megan Jeanne

looks like we're going to stick with some basics that I hope will be of help....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/22300668
white balance?
right arm cut off below the elbow -

there is a very old "rule" - and one which certainly may be broken, that a limb if not shown fully should be cropped before the first joint - ie arm above elbow, leg above knee.  For the most part this is a good rule to keep in mind

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30877179
Love the perspective and exposure but would have been better with a golden ration / golden mean / rule of thirds composition, with your llama offset to a line approximately 1/3rs of the way into the frame from one side or another. 

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30867439
very lovely but too much "headroom" above the llama and also would have been better with the llama placed in the frame by rule of thirds

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30775827
nothing about your llama seems to be in focus -  of course it may be a movement capture - but it's not working for me - also the poor thing's hands are cut off -  have to pay attention to the whole frame not just the subject. If in doubt especially where shots are coming fast, shoot a bit wide and crop later.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30775629
Interesting idea - I think the white balance needs seeing to

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30656443
interesting idea - would have looked a bit more dynamic with the camera position a foot or two higher and with some llama direction to give you  a good clean hard open eyed look

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28765336
another interesting idea -  too much dead space in the left side of the frame, and the llama's hand positions are un-attractive all curled up -  see my discussion of "elegant hands" in this thread -  this is not a critique of the llama - it is the photographer's job to see and to direct....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28765293
super idea - the seemingly missing right arm is disconcerting, the composition would have been stronger shifted to either the left or right a bit - you rarely want a subject directly centred in frame unless the entire scene has strongly symmetrical elements

okay - in sum -

study up on rule of thirds and better yet golden ration and golden mean

don't let your camera decide your white balance - learn to manage that better

maybe for a while you should plan to shoot a bit wider and crop afterward so you do not cut off so many body bits

until you really get further along,  do not crop arms below the elbow or legs below the knee

pay attention to what your llama is doing and do not be afraid to direct, to get good hard looks, and elegant body positions including hands. 

shots featuring faces are best 90  % of the time with the chin at or below (but not too much below) the level of the camera

I like your artistic sense -  I hope this helps move things up a notch. Feel free to hit me up in six months for a "check-up"

Dec 08 12 10:06 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
MeganJeanne
Posts: 53
San Clemente, California, US


Fotografica Gregor wrote:

Hello Megan Jeanne

looks like we're going to stick with some basics that I hope will be of help....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/22300668
white balance?
right arm cut off below the elbow -

there is a very old "rule" - and one which certainly may be broken, that a limb if not shown fully should be cropped before the first joint - ie arm above elbow, leg above knee.  For the most part this is a good rule to keep in mind

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30877179
Love the perspective and exposure but would have been better with a golden ration / golden mean / rule of thirds composition, with your model offset to a line approximately 1/3rs of the way into the frame from one side or another. 

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30867439
very lovely but too much "headroom" above the model and also would have been better with the model placed in the frame by rule of thirds

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30775827
nothing about your model seems to be in focus -  of course it may be a movement capture - but it's not working for me - also the poor thing's hands are cut off -  have to pay attention to the whole frame not just the subject. If in doubt especially where shots are coming fast, shoot a bit wide and crop later.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30775629
Interesting idea - I think the white balance needs seeing to

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30656443
interesting idea - would have looked a bit more dynamic with the camera position a foot or two higher and with some model direction to give you  a good clean hard open eyed look

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28765336
another interesting idea -  too much dead space in the left side of the frame, and the model's hand positions are un-attractive all curled up -  see my discussion of "elegant hands" in this thread -  this is not a critique of the model - it is the photographer's job to see and to direct....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28765293
super idea - the seemingly missing right arm is disconcerting, the composition would have been stronger shifted to either the left or right a bit - you rarely want a subject directly centred in frame unless the entire scene has strongly symmetrical elements

okay - in sum -

study up on rule of thirds and better yet golden ration and golden mean

don't let your camera decide your white balance - learn to manage that better

maybe for a while you should plan to shoot a bit wider and crop afterward so you do not cut off so many body bits

until you really get further along,  do not crop arms below the elbow or legs below the knee

pay attention to what your model is doing and do not be afraid to direct, to get good hard looks, and elegant body positions including hands. 

shots featuring faces are best 90+ % of the time with the chin at or below (but not too much below) the level of the camera

I like your artistic sense -  I hope this helps move things up a notch. Feel free to hit me up in six months for a "check-up"

Cool thank you for taking the time to do that!

Dec 08 12 10:04 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Maria Susanti wrote:
me please, if you still do this

Hello Maria Susanti -

You have a very lovely portfolio, which emphasizes artistic concepts and moods....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30671414
perhaps the mood of this shot is intended to be contemplative, but it would work better for me with a bit of a harder eye focus - a sense that you are engaging with something inside or outside of the frame....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#29950637
more like this, which is very lovely - actually most of your work features much more compelling use of your eyes....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#29950515
this is very lovely, but would be more dynamic with a stronger posture - a better shoulder alignment

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#27023755
a more elegant right hand position here -  instead of having the inside of the forearm facing the camera and the fingers curled,  how about having the inside of the arm facing down and an elegant hand pretend touching the hair or face?

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#26956434
expression -  you look unhappy, or lost,  to me anyway - perhaps I am missing the intent of the mood...

In sum-
Your portfolio does not contain "traditional" fashion or glamour posing - it is aimed more at artistic concepts....  nonetheless,  some attention to more elegant posture and use of hands, and really focusing your eyes (there are only a few shots where this is missed) might be something to think about....

also you are at the point where the few shots that are below the average quality of your port are dragging it down a bit -  so thinking about removing a few images might be in order.....

Dec 09 12 10:17 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Starsquid wrote:
I'm in smile

Hello Starsquid -   let's have a look at a few images

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30868999
lovely light tones and mood - nice contrast ratio -  I don't know what your intention is here but a bit of a different crop might make it a better shot - the hair is just barely cut off for example - when cropping you might want to be more decisive -  and a rule of thirds or golden mean composition with the subject moved a little more to the left in frame and the eyes placed about 1/3rd of the way from the top of the frame would be more "traditional" - and in this case, perhaps stronger....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 9#30868995
here is a very "non-traditional" framing and crop that I think works brilliantly - nice dynamic tension

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 9#30868988
standing subjects right in the midst of the frame are considered to be a bit of a no-no for a reason -  moving your model to the left or right 1/3rd line of the frame would be a more dynamic comp - I like the light tones and mood though

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 9#30093885
very cool concept shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 9#29011264
I like the way you capture moods -  I'm not sure I like the palette here and what the colour cast is doing to the skin tones - also we have a vertical subject in mid frame again -  the rule of thirds / golden mean is like all rules a thing to be broken when you know what you are doing - if you are achieving what you want with this than ignore my viewpoint -  but I do think placing the vertical subject off centre is stronger....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 9#29011261
an example where the gelled (?) light seems to work fine despite the skin tones - it is a strong shot

in sum
I really like the cleanness, clarity and toning of your work - I like the moods you create.  The only thing I can contribute is a suggestion to revisit some of your compositions of vertical subjects and see how you like the shots when composed more along the lines of the golden mean / rule of thirds -  it is *your* work so there is no reason why you have to do it the more traditional way.  I especially think that your movement captures would work better off-centre -

I like your use of gels or other coloured light most of the time but at least the one shot does not work for me

Strong portfolio -

Dec 09 12 10:30 am  Link  Quote 
Model
n e e c o l e
Posts: 172
Morton Grove, Illinois, US


do tell ! :]
Dec 09 12 10:40 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Chanelle Sarai
Posts: 41
Los Angeles, California, US


me please smile
Dec 09 12 01:10 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


John Allan wrote:
Ok - you seem to actually be putting some constructive thought into this. Thanks.

Hello John Allan -

I apologize for the delay in getting back to this -  life and all that.....

You have a wonderful portfolio and it will be a challenge for me to make a positive contribution through critique...

overall you are aiming for a very different style than mine so some of this will be opinion that may not be relevant to you....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30600236
to my taste the contrast on her face is just a tad steep - especially the highlight area on her left forehead

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 6#19330076
the hand and foot being bisected bug me -  but I love the shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 6#28619839
I am oft accused of being a heavy hand at processing -  I would have edited the right underarm a bit as it looks a tad rough especially compered to her left, which area is smoothed - perhaps by light and not edit - to seem to lack anatomical detail a bit

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 6#19330230
hands partially cut off -  I am not really a fanatic for the old "rule" about cropping a limb before the first joint, but I am a believer in *decisive* cropping - hands bisected or cut off at the wrist bug me

That's about it really  - and it's all nitpicks based in my own personal preference -  your work is very lovely.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 6#19141107
when models shave to shape their eyebrows I'm always at a loss how to handle the rough / stubbly look this leaves -  I often don't do much with it myself - but in many of my shots and in this one it is a bit noticeable because of the highlight. I also find the bowing forward of the shoulders here to be disconcerting -  I'm a fanatic for posture and would have directed her differently

Dec 11 12 04:02 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Lanika Thomas wrote:
I would love your feedback.

Hello Lanika Thomas -

I see from reading your profile that you are interested in commercial print,  and in adding quality work to your portfolio -  good and realistic goals in my opinion

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30145741
my assignment for you would be to reproduce this pose in a mirror... then,  bring your elbows back away from the camera as far as you can comfortably, then a bit farther, and see which you think looks the best......  bent arms toward the camera tend to not look the best...    also,  in commercial print, you want to get in the habit of pretend-touching yourself, your hair or the couture etc.  This is a nice glam look but generally you do not want to distort whatever the client is selling

Beyond these two points you are doing pretty well - 

except that you have way too many images in your portfolio and quite a few that are of lower than average quality for your port, or not consistent with your goals....

I would suggest evaluating these
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30659446
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29489082
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29441937

as a start, and getting in the habit of being more focused about
your images selections *now* so that your port is telling us what
your focus is, and where you want to go....   try limiting yourself to 20 images.

(Yes I have a ton of images - but I do not have your goals.....)

you are doing quite well for your level of experience

Dec 11 12 04:16 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Alexia Foxx
Posts: 36
Tyler, Texas, US


Thanks sooo much for the critiques! It is truly appreciated:)
Dec 11 12 05:32 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Alexia Foxx wrote:
Thanks sooo much for the critiques! It is truly appreciated:)

you are more than welcome - I hope something was helpful -  cheers

Dec 11 12 05:40 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
J O H N A L L A N
Posts: 9,474
Santa Ana, California, US


Thanks for taking the time to give detailed and thoughtful impressions.
It's so refreshing within this forum to receive critiques that actually contain useful information, where one can walk away with something of value.

Thanks again,
John
Dec 11 12 08:06 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


John Allan wrote:
Thanks for taking the time to give detailed and thoughtful impressions.
It's so refreshing within this forum to receive critiques that actually contain useful information, where one can walk away with something of value.

Thanks again,
John

You are more than welcome - anytime really - though I'm not sure you're getting too much value out of my critique - you have exceptionally lovely work

Cheers

Dec 11 12 08:17 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Albie96
Posts: 2
Tysons Corner, Virginia, US


please take a look!
Dec 12 12 07:44 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Michelled Model
Posts: 4
Hemel Hempstead, England, United Kingdom


I would like to hear your thoughts :-D
Dec 12 12 07:57 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Lilith Noir
Posts: 430
Asheville, North Carolina, US


If you make it to this page, I could use an honest critique.  My portfolio is a bit of a mess right now and I would love to have a few things to keep in mind while I'm working to update it!
Dec 12 12 02:17 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
TDSImages
Posts: 769
Salt Lake City, Utah, US


Me next?
Dec 12 12 07:35 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
ShiefTheChief
Posts: 29
Miami, Florida, US


me next please
Dec 12 12 08:32 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Elesha Eden
Posts: 296
Southampton, England, United Kingdom


Hiya
I would love to hear an honest review on my port..i am always looking to improve and know i have a long way to go as i am 16 but i am loving the journey so far...so this will be most helpful
kind regards
Elesha Eden
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Dec 13 12 09:59 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Tristyanne
Posts: 14
South Beach, Florida, US


Would love to hear what your thoughts are on my port
Dec 13 12 12:10 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Lily LeFleur wrote:
I would love to know what you think of my portfolio if you're still letting people into your queue! Thank you in advance!

Hello Lily LeFleur -

Though your model mayhem profile is fairly new you appear to me to be a good bit more experienced than this would suggest.  I like a lot of your work -

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28352750
love the concept and mood, but the elbow toward the camera is distracting -  and never a good idea really unless held very low - it creates a distorted perspective of the arm that is jarring

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28843800
beautiful - and I love the mood - but would have liked the pose a bit better (technically speaking) if the head were not tilted quite so far away from the camera

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28352658
this is elegant, but I wonder about the missing arm -  this is generally to be avoided - I know it can be tough knowing what is showing on camera sometimes -  but if your right arm was reaching back far enough to see the hand and a bit of the forearm, or was placed a bit forward into view,  this would be less disconcerting.  Of course it's a lovely nude so only someone into the technical side of modeling is going to notice smile

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#29890977
smashing shot, lovely mood - but you are leading with the chin again as in the first shot -  I know the "look away" creates a mood -   but the raised chin is rarely dynamic...   looking level or down and away creates much more drama

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28352753
this is smashing - just sayin' smile

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28843798
this would be so much more elegant with your elbow pulled away to your side away from the camera  -  bent knees and elbows pointed toward camera are almost always a bad idea....


In sum -

think about the tilt of your head -  away from camera is a weaker look

think about not pointing elbows and knees toward the camera - away is much more elegant in terms of what it does to the entire pose

think about arm and hand positions and aim for a bit more elegance there

you have a smashing and seriously sexy portfolio and it was a joy to have a flick through.....

Dec 13 12 02:14 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


n e e c o l e wrote:
do tell ! :]

Hello n e e c o l e -

You list yourself as having "some experience" but you've had a profile  here for 5 years -  and your port is a bit of a mix -  but I'll see what I can do....  (oh, and I like the sentiment you expressed last in your profile btw....)

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30903815
re-imagine this shot with your left hand placed elegantly on the side of your left thigh and your chin lowered a bit,  with a deep gaze at the camera....  it's good like it is but could be more dynamic

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#29235074
absolutely charming "personality shot" - every llama should have one - they give "us"  a sense of what you are about and make it more likely that we would choose to work with you -   this is tres charmant

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#28065985
really cute - but the missing left hand bugs me - why not place it elegantly on your hip or backside?   This is an advanced point actually.... and a bit of an nitpick - but that's the point of critique....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#22361178
another example -  lowering your chin just a tad is going to be a much more dynamic look for the shape of your face - I'm not talking anything drastic - 1" would make a big difference....

You have a very..  "varied"  portfolio and I can't tell from it what it is you want to do with your llamaing -  that's okay if you're just having fun with  it, but if you want to take it in a direction,  think about clearing out the shots that are not consistent with that direction -

In sum -

think about dropping your chin a bit  and see what that looks / feels like

think about arm and hand placement

think about where you want to go with your llamaing and give us a clue - either in your profile or in the images you show us -  you'll get better opportunities that way....

Dec 13 12 02:28 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Sibby S
Posts: 178
Adelaide, South Australia, Australia


me please smile
Dec 14 12 01:21 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Chanelle Sarai wrote:
me please smile

Hello Chanelle Sarai

I see from your profile that you are fairly new and interested in portfolio building.  It is okay at this point in the game to experiment a bit and build a varied portfolio but eventually you are going to want to focus your work on one or two genres.  I think you will find some helpful information about realistic expectations here:

http://www.newmodels.com

so let's look at some shots

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30174866
it is *generally* a good idea for your eyes to be more prominent than your chin - the tilt of the eyes / forehead away from the camera  can work with some moods but for something on the order of a headshot it is a weak look

when looking at the camera, do not look *at* the lens - look deeply through it.  Else you don't look quite "focused" to the viewer.  Looking directly over the photographers head where you are focused on something in the background can be good - but your eyes need to seem to be focused to the viewer

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 6#29893152
re-imagine this shot, where both of your hands are used more elegantly -  elegant hands are more straight than curled but not tense

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 6#29893138
basically a nice pose - but learn to be aware of camera perspective -  with this shot, if you had twisted a bit at the waist to bring your right arm further away from the camera it would have looked stronger

you are also "leading with the chin" here a bit - a dropped chin would have been stronger as well -

and I'm not really understanding the mood in this shot - your expression is not telling me anything

(these are all fairly advanced points by the way)

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 6#29893054
great personality shot!

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 6#29880429
this shot almost works well - the left hand position is lovely - but the right
is not "doing" anything and is a distraction 

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 6#27369019
this is super - but imagine it being just a bit better with a more elegant right hand position...

also you have a couple of "snapshots" in your port - they are fine for now but should eventually be eliminated as your port grows

In sum

you're posing is coming along - your facial expression needs to catch up - emphasize that for a while

don't "lead with your chin" quite so much

think about good sharp "eye contact"

think about what your hands look like when you pose

start thinking about where you want to take your modeling and be sure that this is realistic (newmodels.com)

Dec 14 12 08:20 am  Link  Quote 
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Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Albie96 wrote:
please take a look!

Hello Albie96

Your nudes with food and toys are not doing anything for me.  They may be "art" but I'm not feeling them.   The lighting is flat, there is no drama, they are uninteresting. 

The "stuff" of seeing is light - it is the quality and direction of light that makes the image interesting, or not -  highly recommend the book "Light Science and Magic".....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29447394
is a nice shot -  love to see more lovely ladies and / or nudes in nature
from you

also -  instead of the very closeup approach why not some larger scale body scapes and shapes using dramatic light?



Just a though about direction -

Dec 14 12 08:27 am  Link  Quote 
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Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Michelle Duckett wrote:
I would like to hear your thoughts :-D

Hello Michelle Duckett

I am basing my critique on your profile which says that you are experienced and agency repped.   Your port seems to be about fashion as well....

someone shooting fashion with full production teams at a mid to high level is going to need information that is not present in your profile / portfolio -

full information about height weight and measurements
information about your relationship with your agency - ie is it exclusive or regional?
a legit headshot with little or no makeup
a description of any body mods scars etc

now let's look at some shots -

the first two are very amateur and not doing anything for you

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#30845281
very lovely look and mood

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#30055038
great intensity  and look -   the hand positions are a little weak -  check my discussion of "elegant hands" with other models in this thread

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#29104352
a bit too much chin lift -  if you're going for that look,  experiment with a little less chin lift

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#27522674
stunning portrait - great eyes and mood

in sum -

I see some nice lifestyle fashion posing and some dynamic looks in your port but there are tonnes of models to choose from and without the necessary information I would probably skip right over

you are doing wonderful things with your eyes looking at the camera - learn to use them looking away with a dynamic intensity as well

lovely expression and mood in your port - but the range is a bit limited - I would like to see a greater range of mood at your level

hand positions!   go for more elegance here

Dec 14 12 08:37 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Jojo West
Posts: 969
Silver Spring, Maryland, US


If you're still going, I'd like to know where I could improve smile
Dec 14 12 08:41 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Sure - there are six yet ahead of you making you #7 on the current "list" -  I should get to you by Monday and perhaps sooner -
Dec 14 12 11:06 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Lily LeFleur
Posts: 50
Los Angeles, California, US


Fotografica Gregor wrote:

Hello Lily LeFleur -

Though your model mayhem profile is fairly new you appear to me to be a good bit more experienced than this would suggest.  I like a lot of your work -

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28352750
love the concept and mood, but the elbow toward the camera is distracting -  and never a good idea really unless held very low - it creates a distorted perspective of the arm that is jarring

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28843800
beautiful - and I love the mood - but would have liked the pose a bit better (technically speaking) if the head were not tilted quite so far away from the camera

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28352658
this is elegant, but I wonder about the missing arm -  this is generally to be avoided - I know it can be tough knowing what is showing on camera sometimes -  but if your right arm was reaching back far enough to see the hand and a bit of the forearm, or was placed a bit forward into view,  this would be less disconcerting.  Of course it's a lovely nude so only someone into the technical side of modeling is going to notice smile

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#29890977
smashing shot, lovely mood - but you are leading with the chin again as in the first shot -  I know the "look away" creates a mood -   but the raised chin is rarely dynamic...   looking level or down and away creates much more drama

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28352753
this is smashing - just sayin' smile

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28843798
this would be so much more elegant with your elbow pulled away to your side away from the camera  -  bent knees and elbows pointed toward camera are almost always a bad idea....


In sum -

think about the tilt of your head -  away from camera is a weaker look

think about not pointing elbows and knees toward the camera - away is much more elegant in terms of what it does to the entire pose

think about arm and hand positions and aim for a bit more elegance there

you have a smashing and seriously sexy portfolio and it was a joy to have a flick through.....

Thank you so much!  I really appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts!

Dec 14 12 01:22 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Michelled Model
Posts: 4
Hemel Hempstead, England, United Kingdom


Thank you so much for your feedback! Sometimes you just need someone to take a look and tell you exactly whats what! so thank you smile Really appreciate it and I really need to work on the hands, it's something Im working on, find it hard though but il get there smile


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Dec 14 12 02:57 pm  Link  Quote 
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Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Mina Mori wrote:
If you make it to this page, I could use an honest critique.  My portfolio is a bit of a mess right now and I would love to have a few things to keep in mind while I'm working to update it!

Hello Mina Mori -

having had a quick flick through your portfolio I am positively impressed overall - I think what issues there are may be of consistency,  refining your portfolio,  and some degree of artistic difference in taste - but let's see what we find.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#25284153
not sure what you are going for here - this pose seems somewhat stiff and the look at the ceiling is not doing anything for me - the other two shots in this series are very lovely and you are using your hands very nicely....   

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#25284069
very lovely and classic art pose -  but your expression is not doing anything for me here -   I would expect either a serene or neutral look but you seem tense to me -  but maybe that is your neutral look...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 51#7789039
even with the "missing right arm" this is a favourite of mine - gorgeous study in form and texture

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 51#5355097
beautiful

the above two images are the sort of thing I would love to see you concentrate on - but of course this depends to a great degree on the photographers who book you...   nonetheless - why use your portfolio not only to showcase your best and most artful work - but in the process, to suggest to set a tone for future collaborations?

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30784864
very interesting - strong addition to your port

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#23968571
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#23968555
I like that you have some "fashion nudes" in your port for versatility

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30951401
if you are going to shoot bdsm inspired looks, *this* is the way to do it - 
most of the others are not selling me (and that is my lifestyle fwiw)

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 51#7673349
Love

in sum -

my take is that you have way too many images -  if you kept the most artful you would have a stronger portfolio -   this from the perspective of a consumer of your work -  there may be a wisdom to keeping some of the more "average" images from the standpoint of not scaring away business - I don't know - a calculation only you can make

You don't have to put everything you shoot in your portfolio -  you can use it to show us a direction you want to go instead of illustrating where you've been

I'm not saying don't shoot bdsm genre work - just saying that posting only the most elegant would raise the quality of your portfolio from the perspective of most viewers and from that of the higher end shooter.....

your facial expressions are not always selling me -  they are over-done with the glam shots,  not sufficiently neutral or serene with the classic art poses

love your period / art pieces

Dec 14 12 04:31 pm  Link  Quote 
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Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


TDSImages wrote:
Me next?

Hello TDSImages

The first thing that strikes me is the dearth of information in your profile - if that is working for you in your approach then not an issue but as a model or production team asset I would want to see quite a bit more...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27628285
honestly, this one scares me a bit -  maybe I just don't get it

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#24446161
lovely beauty work - super use of negative space in your composition - model direction could be improved a tad - a straighter neck / better posture would have improved the shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#23500295
if you're going to do symmetrical this is the way to do it - lovely image

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#22424722
very cool shot - again like the compositional use of negative space - but with this concept I wonder what I am missing by not having a full length shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#22169084
nicely done all the way around

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#21716064
the poor thing is missing her hand and a bit of her arm - better perspective and composition here would have improved this shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#16471139
very cool

in sum

you have some solid work but I don't really have a clear sense of what you are about -  still enjoyed the ride

a bit better technical composition and perspective might be occasionally called for
especially in not amputating body parts  (crops should properly be done before the first joint) -  with respect to perspective - maybe move around more and see what different angles do for the shot

I see a place for a bit better model direction in a few of your shots

Dec 14 12 04:39 pm  Link  Quote 
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Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


ShiefTheChief wrote:
me next please

Hello ShiefTheChief

Yours is another profile that I find lacking in a lot of basic information.  If it's working for you, then fine - but experienced people generally provide a more professional level and quality of information in their profiles....   

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30955445
cute - nicely done -  colours are a bit over-saturated but perhaps that is part of the concept

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#30955439
train tracks?   Not suggestive of experience.  Very very amateur...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#30813222
way too much saturation -  skin tones need a lot of help

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#20481421
nice environmental portrait - but a lot of burned out areas -  a better choice of exposure (lower EV) would have made a fantastic shot -   did you let your camera set the exposure here?   If so - don't -  you won't get consistently good results that way....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#30813233
oversaturated - over exposed -  skin tones crying out for help - looks like an program or automatic mode snapshot whilst set on Vivid mode.... 

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#22539961
nice subject and perspective - poor composition - better cropped mid thigh and there is way too much headroom -  nice vertical placement though

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#24838068
poor crop - best not to crop limbs below the first joint - exposure looks a little hot at least here on MM - 

in sum

your profile says "experienced" but your images do not. 

learn how to compose much better
learn how to evaluate exposure and saturation
learn how to properly edit skin tones

Dec 14 12 05:05 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Elesha Eden wrote:
Hiya
I would love to hear an honest review on my port..i am always looking to improve and know i have a long way to go as i am 16 but i am loving the journey so far...so this will be most helpful
kind regards
Elesha Eden
X

Hi Elesha Eden -

I have commented on your images so many times!  This will be different, though.....   

I notice in your profile that you mention various publications, but there are no credits for them listed - that would be good form.

Other than that I like your profile and the information you impart.....

on to some images....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30914051
spectacular style and look -  I would have liked a bit better shoulder posture but it's a smashing shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30913887
same as above - smashing style and look - a bit rounded in the shoulders here -  excellent posture always makes a shot look more dynamic as does really engaging the various body muscle groups.

*these are nitpicks* -  but they would make a difference - and that's why you're "here", right ?

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30825083
lovely - and nice hands as well

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30825076
all the basics are here - nice use of eyes and hands, nice "S" curve and shoulder posture

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30825065
here if you drew your right elbow back and used your right hand a bit more elegantly it would be nice - here your hand is disappearing into and lifting your hair - I'm not sold on that approach -  instead, and elegant hand pretend-touching your hair would have been more lovely

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30668831
another rounded shoulder shot -  since these are happening with the same photographer perhaps you are being directed that way.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#27690120
smashing look and attitude - love to see a bit more of that in your port

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30668856
you've got the pinup vibe down pat - lovely use of hands and nice squared shoulders here

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#29864188
this is absolutely ethereal - just sayin'

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#29864636
beautiful mood - elegant hands as well

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30081787
this shot is just not doing it for me - well below your port average

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28968023
very elegant

well... you have quite a few images - I've perused all of them but am not going to comment on all of them.....

in sum

Your posture is so elegant in most of your work -  try this in your beauty work as well -

keep it elegant with arm and hand positions - keep a nice line in arms with bent elbows

you are doing the direct / strong gaze thing very well -  a bit of nuance would be the next thing to consider here -  a softer look and mood, while maintaining solid eye contact with your viewer or some object in the environment.  You are doing some of this already - bringing this to your beauty work would be lovely

maybe consider trimming your portfolio a bit

you are doing so much so very well -  lovely portfolio

Dec 14 12 08:07 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 3,973
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Tristyanne wrote:
Would love to hear what your thoughts are on my port

Hello Tristyanne

You seem to be just starting off -  so my critique will be aimed at trying to help you from that perspective.

Your port currently contains shots that look like they are all from at most two shoots.  That's okay - but as you get more images, pare down the images from any particular shoot to the very best, and eventually to one or at most two per look.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27612001
lovely pose and look, elegant use of hands - nice shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#27611993
pretty shot and mood - the disappearing hands are to be avoided if possible

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#27611983
try to avoid elbows toward the camera at all costs

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#27611892
be aware of where the camera is - and don't lead quite so much with your chin -
a lower chin here, and eyes toward the camera, would have been dynamic

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#27516036
I'm seeing a tendency in quite a few shots to tilt the eyes / forehead farther away from the camera than your chin - learn to use that look sparingly -

in sum

be mindful of your hands and elbows

be mindful of the camera location - how high or low the photographer is shooting from, and don't show him or her the underside of your chin

you're doing some nice things for your experience level - the thing you need to concentrate on now is finding and working with the best possible photographers, who will be able to teach you a good bit,  and produce a higher quality portfolio.

This is the journey that confronts all newer models.  Your shots are pretty good for a new port but I hope to see you outgrow them very soon. 

You would be welcome to check in with me in 6 months for an update if you like.

Dec 14 12 08:17 pm  Link  Quote 
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