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Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


RobertOPhoto wrote:
Thank you for taking the time to review and critique my portfolio.  Not only did I learn from your analysis, but I am also learning from all of your other reviews as well.  It is very generous of you to take the time to do these reviews.

if anyone actually learns something of value, then I am happy to give the time.  Thank you for the feedback - Cheers -

Jan 12 13 12:39 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Jorge Kreimer wrote:
Go ahead!

Hello Jorge Kreimer -

I enjoyed reading your profile - it is interesting, informative, charmingly unassuming and a good read.  I rather like your current emphasis on "Stylistic Austerity" as you put it.   And we share a similar taste in Espresso as well smile

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28847538
I very much like the minimalism here -  very simple and clean set, tones and palette.  A certain harmony there.  And an interesting juxtaposition in linear and curvilinear form, and texture,  enhanced by the simplicity and directness of approach.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29344866
here I am not a fan of the hot spot on her cheek, nor the rather odd shadow there....  the model's head being tilted back in this instance I do not find particularly pleasing as it sets up a certain perspective distortion.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29031356
this is very cool - like the perspective and composition, the pose, the way the light is flowing across the scene - the cast shadow by her right arm is particularly interesting as it does not seem to "echo" the shape of her arm....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28254125
dynamic perspective -  I can see how dim this environment must have been -  I like your choice of exposure value here even with some of the burned out pixels - it seems "Natural" - the sun as backlight approach works well here - my only discomfort with this shot is the vertical subject being isolated in the midst of the frame -  if she were offset toward the left margin - or the composition were larger to the viewer's right I might have liked it better

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31065165
like the pose, the mood, the direction and quality of light - like the tones as well

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29571880
smashing pose and equally so - the perspective

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29808093
this is a lovely model and look and a near ideal perspective -  I'm not quite liking what the ringlight is doing in this and several other shots though - at least as edited -  not liking the feel of the skin and the flatness the sense of dimension and in the tones.  I usually rather like ringlight.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27287359
one of several interesting and dynamic  examples of the use of negative space in your portfolio - not quite a fan of this perspective in terms of what it does to her form

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30693746
this series of window / backlit images is lovely -  I might have argued for a slightly less orange skin tone and white balance but I like the EV choice and composition

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30332204
one of several examples of a subject isolated in mid frame - in this case a landscape format composition.  I never really care for this except in your one example of a very symmetrical pose - and even then, find shifting a vertical subject off center  sometimes well of center - to be a more dynamic composition.
as in this example:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27939126

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31003835
love your work with this model perhaps especially this example - love the look, the perspective, the mood

in sum
I am a fan of your work -  my only issues are very minor -

isolation of vertical and non-symmetrical subjects in mid frame
a couple of instances of hard light or shadow on model's faces
a couple of instances of white balance and skin tones
for some reason not liking most of your ringlit shots -  a lack of dimension and depth and not liking what they are doing to the skin textures

for the most part I am loving what you are doing with your "stylistic austerity".  I am loving the flow of light in most of your images, your exposure value choices and toning. 

your work breathes, and it glows.

Jan 13 13 06:02 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Jorge Kreimer
Posts: 2,382
Los Angeles, California, US


Fotografica Gregor wrote:

Hello Jorge Kreimer -

I enjoyed reading your profile - it is interesting, informative, charmingly unassuming and a good read.  I rather like your current emphasis on "Stylistic Austerity" as you put it.   And we share a similar taste in Espresso as well smile

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28847538
I very much like the minimalism here -  very simple and clean set, tones and palette.  A certain harmony there.  And an interesting juxtaposition in linear and curvilinear form, and texture,  enhanced by the simplicity and directness of approach.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29344866
here I am not a fan of the hot spot on her cheek, nor the rather odd shadow there....  the model's head being tilted back in this instance I do not find particularly pleasing as it sets up a certain perspective distortion.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29031356
this is very cool - like the perspective and composition, the pose, the way the light is flowing across the scene - the cast shadow by her right arm is particularly interesting as it does not seem to "echo" the shape of her arm....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28254125
dynamic perspective -  I can see how dim this environment must have been -  I like your choice of exposure value here even with some of the burned out pixels - it seems "Natural" - the sun as backlight approach works well here - my only discomfort with this shot is the vertical subject being isolated in the midst of the frame -  if she were offset toward the left margin - or the composition were larger to the viewer's right I might have liked it better

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31065165
like the pose, the mood, the direction and quality of light - like the tones as well

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29571880
smashing pose and equally so - the perspective

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29808093
this is a lovely model and look and a near ideal perspective -  I'm not quite liking what the ringlight is doing in this and several other shots though - at least as edited -  not liking the feel of the skin and the flatness the sense of dimension and in the tones.  I usually rather like ringlight.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27287359
one of several interesting and dynamic  examples of the use of negative space in your portfolio - not quite a fan of this perspective in terms of what it does to her form

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30693746
this series of window / backlit images is lovely -  I might have argued for a slightly less orange skin tone and white balance but I like the EV choice and composition

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30332204
one of several examples of a subject isolated in mid frame - in this case a landscape format composition.  I never really care for this except in your one example of a very symmetrical pose - and even then, find shifting a vertical subject off center  sometimes well of center - to be a more dynamic composition.
as in this example:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27939126

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31003835
love your work with this model perhaps especially this example - love the look, the perspective, the mood

in sum
I am a fan of your work -  my only issues are very minor -

isolation of vertical and non-symmetrical subjects in mid frame
a couple of instances of hard light or shadow on model's faces
a couple of instances of white balance and skin tones
for some reason not liking most of your ringlit shots -  a lack of dimension and depth and not liking what they are doing to the skin textures

for the most part I am loving what you are doing with your "stylistic austerity".  I am loving the flow of light in most of your images, your exposure value choices and toning. 

your work breathes, and it glows.

Very nice critique, and way too kind.

Thank you,

Jorge

Jan 13 13 06:38 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Dontez Akins
Posts: 326
Douglasville, Georgia, US


Fotografica Gregor wrote:
Hello Dontez Akins -

I see from your profile that you've been on MM for 3.5 years and rate yourself as very experienced.....

you also have a very large portfolio -  I will try to select a few images to illustrate general points I see in your work....

here is an example in an out of doors shot
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28348619

where exposure overall is an issue - also in this case the sun as rim light is just too hot without under-exposing the shot,  or using a scrim to soften it....

I am seeing a lot of skin tone that is not quite right due to a tendency to either over expose in camera or process for a light, unsaturated look.   

Since you list yourself as doing compensated work only  -  if people are buying it, stick with it - but from a purely technical standpoint it does not pass muster

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29894988
either the frontal placement and quality of the light, the exposure, or the edit, is killing the detail in this shot - it does look quite a bit over exposed -  I am seeing this in quite a lot of your shots including on ebony skin....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/25857227
here is another example -   either in lighting exposure or processing detail and depth is being lost -  I see a lot of images that look flat, without a sense of dimensionality -  this is usually due to frontal lighting

this on the other hand is very nice
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30481028

nice light and shadowing, super perspective and use of leading and trailing lines creates a superb sense of depth and realism

lovely beauty headshot
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30838176

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/26381523
very cool shot - love the perspective and toning -

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/25080423
love this - great capture and edit

in sum
I find your profile to be a bit of a mixed bag -

the bad:
a lot of lost detail and flat images from either the direction and quality of light employed,  exposure choice or post work -  resulting also in skin tones that do not seem right in some shots

I am specifically not speaking about images where it is clear that it is a choice made in post or in composition with back light

the good
some really nice perspectives and compositions - but not consistently
a minority of shots with very nice depth and toning
a general high key / high energy vibe to your work

Sorry for getting to you so late had to re-find this thread, but thanks for the critique I trimmed down my port a bit with the unnecessary stuff.  I have been experimenting with light a lot to give certain stuff a fine arts feels.  Professors got me going in the fine arts direction and wanted me to gear more to the one light set up rather then the key, fill, and back light set up.  But i need to start sticking with light for fashion and light for fine arts and not try to mix one another.  But as for clients I dont even try to experiment depending on what they want to shoot. And thanks again

Jan 13 13 06:38 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Fwee Photography wrote:
I would love it if you would do me.

Hello Fwee Photography -

you have a lot of interesting conceptual photography.  But not a great deal of work that is flattering for your models.  This last bit is important -  you need to be able to demonstrate that you can shoot work that your models are going to want for their own portfolios and that you can shoot "straight up"content of commercial interest.  In other words it's okay to have an artistic and conceptual portfolio but most are going to want to see that you can master the basics of creating a sound image

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28500783
this does not help your case -  really abysmal light, muddied tone, inconceivable white balance.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28239710
trying to be creative here, but very poor light and contrast and very un-flattering to your model

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27769555
flat, uninteresting light and contrast ratio,  there's lots of texture there that we are not really seeing.  Poor white balance. Unflattering comp and perspective makes your model look really big.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/25769753
way too much contrast, and why a gratuitous armpit shot?  Nobody really wants the subject of their images to be an armpit.....   

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29647274
very poor white balance - nice otherwise

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29647039
poor white balance and perspective - look how this point of view foreshortens your model, making her look short and heavy below the waist.... always question yourself if you are shooting a standing model from a level higher than her navel.....

in sum
a bit of your studio work has interesting lighting but is not properly white balanced and the tonal and contrast ratios are way over cooked.  If you want a few shots - maybe up to half of your port - to make an art statement that's fine but when someone is judging your competency as a photographer you have to show them that you can master the basics of a good image

the problems:

white balance
skin tones
harsh light
flat light in some cases
lack of lighting nuance
perspectives that do not flatter your model in some cases
over-cooked contrast and tone

Jan 14 13 08:05 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Jojo West wrote:
I'd like to see your opinion.

Hi Jojo West

you have a nicely written profile and handle the "llama herder" issue well enough.  All of the information I would want to see is there....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#31151203
notice how reaching forward with your right arm creates a perspective distortion here -  generally you want to keep your limbs near the plane of your body unless going for something specific.  Here the right arm alone reaching forward looks distorted.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#31151201
when actually leaning on hands,  if the weight is on your palms this creates a very inelegant line -   instead, steeple your fingers and take the weight on your finger tips for a lovely hand position and line  - of course this works better on a firmer surface then a bed

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30920221
not a fan of "disappearing" limbs - especially just a hand

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30709915
smashing look -  the "look away" in this case creates a lovely mood

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30770222
you see them all over the place but I am not a fan of forward leaning poses  -  great posture always makes for a dynamic image.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30770171
this is partially the fault of the perspective but note again how having an arm toward the camera creates a distortion -  your arm is not that big in relation to your body -  the mind can process this *to an extent*  but beyond that point it looks surreal   

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#30723885
nice pose - but two things - the weight on palms bit I mentioned earlier, and the hooked fingers on the hat are a detraction -   elegant hands make a huge difference in posing -  hands that are more nearly straight, fingers separated a bit, wrists that are bent at a max 45 degrees, fingers elegantly employed...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30444398
Love - best in port

in sum
elegant hands!
hidden hands or arms...
hands or arms too much toward the camera
you are doing some wonderful things with your eyes
I am seeing a limited range of expression though
posture posture posture

Jan 14 13 08:16 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Kayla Anne Thomas wrote:
I need some serious critique. If I may ask, do you have an opinion of what kind of modelling I would fit best into? I am too all over the place with all my creative work. I always want to do it all. Thank you!

Hi Kayla Anne Thomas

your profile is informative and a good read and contains all the pertinent information....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31226380
not a fan of the posture,  hand or arm positions

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30909693
this would be lovely *but* for the hands......    your eyes and your hands "sell" your pose -  this is not working...  please see my discussion of "elegant hands" throughout this thread.  Basically -  nearly straight, fingers slightly spread but not tense,  and any touching of hair skin or couture needs to be "pretend".  Fisted hands / curled fingers rarely work even when appropriate in context - find elegant ways to use your hands

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28677433
lovely look - but strong elegant posture would make it much better....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30909673
almost lovely -  re-imagine this shot with a lovely and elegant left hand position.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30714170
when you see that your photographer is shooting from a lower position - do not lead with your chin -  this creates a perspective distortion of the face that is not flattering....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28677477
great look

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30606723
would be very lovely with more elegant hands

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#28684292
*strong* look -  but the posture is lacking

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30606640
lovely and charming

I would suggest working on
hands
posture -  highly recommend a few Yoga lessons for this -
perspective awareness - knowing what your photographer's chosen viewpoint means for your posing - this is just as important as understanding what lighting means for your posing - you need to understand these things as well as most and better than some photographers to save them from their own mistakes lol....

as to your question - you have a fresh and lovely look that could go "anywhere" in terms of genre.  Your height and measurements though pretty much make you a generalist unless you wanted to try the commercial / lifestyle genre and see about agency representation....   not sure about the requirements in your market.

Jan 14 13 08:36 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


saajid motala wrote:
id love some help.

Hi Saajid Motala

your profile leaves me with lots of questions in fact -  and most models would probably not take the time -  you might want to flesh it out a bit....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 2#30715642
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 2#30715536
very flat, poorly managed light with muddled tones,  harsh contrast and burned out bits on your model -  with lighting  *less is more*.  Any light that is not controlled is doing more harm than good....    in all of my work other than beauty, the light is at least 45* off camera axis.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 2#30629276
look at her neck -  the weird shadow and burnt out area - poorly controlled light.  Is she wearing black?  if so, it's not....  are you going for soft, and overexposed here?  It is a cool shot along with the others in this set - just needs refinement in approach

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 2#30628116
lovely light and soft shadow -  I can't really see where the focus is though -  and the black point / tones are not very dynamic

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 42#7209096
this is very cool - I would argue for your rim lights to be positioned lower and maybe a little more forward to sculpt her cheeks but nice shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 2#24449361
cool story - like the perspectives and mood

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 2#17504507
this is cool - a bit of heat on the forehead -  and are these skin tones right?  You might want to consider feathering your subjects head with the light coming from this angle, and letting the central hotter bit of light hit your subject further down.  Use the properties of fall off and distribution of intensity in the light cone to your advantage so that the weaker light at the edge of the spread is reaching your subject first and the harsher light a foot or two "later" giving more even distribution.

In sum
you have a lot of interesting ideas and stories to tell -

would recommend a bit more nuance and control at lighting - experiment with light well off of the camera axis

understand the properties of the distribution of light from a source / modifier and use this to advantage

be sure of your white balance and exposure choices / black points

avoid too much light, or light from a direction that makes it flat and uninteresting.

Jan 14 13 08:53 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


KelseyL4d wrote:
Hi!  I'm a teen model.  I'm trying to learn as much as I can and would really appreciate your critique of my work so far.

Thank you!

Hi KelseyL4d

you have a professional quality profile and an impressive portfolio

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#31212375
don't know if you were being directed to give a bit of a squint here but generally prefer well opened eyes - it is still possible to communicate intensity or concentration....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#31212357
be aware of the perspective created by your photographer's point of view - when shooting from a lower point of view as is the case here, a lifted chin is not the best look -  it creates a bit of distortion of facial shape. When the photographer goes low, best to lower the chin a bit as well

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#31212347
absolutely smashing look

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#30392099
lovely and charming -  and one of the things that really *sells* it - is your elegant hand positions...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#30572331
smashing look - straighter fingers on the right hand would have been better

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#29944164
lovely pose and look - lovely hands and eyes -  hands and eyes are the details that "sell" the pose...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#29007939
another absolutely smashing look

in sum
you are doing elegant things with your hands and eyes - but a bit better consistency with the hands might be in order

you do some amazing and captivating beauty looks

do not lift the chin when the photographer is shooting low

one thing I see that could use some attention throughout is posture.  Engaging core muscles,  elegant spinal and shoulder posture -  feeling and activating your body's muscles when you pose creates more dynamic lines and looks

you are doing excellent work - I would love to shoot with you

Jan 14 13 09:41 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Cyn Michelle
Posts: 80
Vallejo, California, US


Would like to hear your thoughts!
Jan 14 13 10:26 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fwee Photography
Posts: 37
New York, New York, US


Fotografica Gregor wrote:

Hello Fwee Photography -

you have a lot of interesting conceptual photography.  But not a great deal of work that is flattering for your models.  This last bit is important -  you need to be able to demonstrate that you can shoot work that your models are going to want for their own portfolios and that you can shoot "straight up"content of commercial interest.  In other words it's okay to have an artistic and conceptual portfolio but most are going to want to see that you can master the basics of creating a sound image

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28500783
this does not help your case -  really abysmal light, muddied tone, inconceivable white balance.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28239710
trying to be creative here, but very poor light and contrast and very un-flattering to your model

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/27769555
flat, uninteresting light and contrast ratio,  there's lots of texture there that we are not really seeing.  Poor white balance. Unflattering comp and perspective makes your model look really big.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/25769753
way too much contrast, and why a gratuitous armpit shot?  Nobody really wants the subject of their images to be an armpit.....   

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29647274
very poor white balance - nice otherwise

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29647039
poor white balance and perspective - look how this point of view foreshortens your model, making her look short and heavy below the waist.... always question yourself if you are shooting a standing model from a level higher than her navel.....

in sum
a bit of your studio work has interesting lighting but is not properly white balanced and the tonal and contrast ratios are way over cooked.  If you want a few shots - maybe up to half of your port - to make an art statement that's fine but when someone is judging your competency as a photographer you have to show them that you can master the basics of a good image

the problems:

white balance
skin tones
harsh light
flat light in some cases
lack of lighting nuance
perspectives that do not flatter your model in some cases
over-cooked contrast and tone

Thank you for your honest critique! I will work on all these issues.

Jan 14 13 11:27 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Kelsey Langford
Posts: 32
Sacramento, California, US


Fotografica Gregor wrote:

Hi KelseyL4d

you have a professional quality profile and an impressive portfolio

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#31212375
don't know if you were being directed to give a bit of a squint here but generally prefer well opened eyes - it is still possible to communicate intensity or concentration....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#31212357
be aware of the perspective created by your photographer's point of view - when shooting from a lower point of view as is the case here, a lifted chin is not the best look -  it creates a bit of distortion of facial shape. When the photographer goes low, best to lower the chin a bit as well

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#31212347
absolutely smashing look

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#30392099
lovely and charming -  and one of the things that really *sells* it - is your elegant hand positions...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#30572331
smashing look - straighter fingers on the right hand would have been better

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#29944164
lovely pose and look - lovely hands and eyes -  hands and eyes are the details that "sell" the pose...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 5#29007939
another absolutely smashing look

in sum
you are doing elegant things with your hands and eyes - but a bit better consistency with the hands might be in order

you do some amazing and captivating beauty looks

do not lift the chin when the photographer is shooting low

one thing I see that could use some attention throughout is posture.  Engaging core muscles,  elegant spinal and shoulder posture -  feeling and activating your body's muscles when you pose creates more dynamic lines and looks

you are doing excellent work - I would love to shoot with you

Thank you so much for your critique and your very kind words.  I really appreciate you taking the time to provide such a detailed review. 

I will work on some consistency with my hands as well as my posture.  (I just started taking pilates as a way to improve my posing.)  I also appreciate the direction on lowering my chin when the photographer is shooting low. 

Thank you again!

Kelsey

Jan 14 13 11:05 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Charlotte  White wrote:
Been modelling for a while and I've had stuff published BUT this is the first time I've had a MM profile. Interested to hear what you think, what's missing, which shots aren't so great etc. Hope your day is going well!

Hi Charlotte White -

Your profile is informative, nicely written and contains all of the pertinent information....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31235577
nice pose - this sometimes works better with the leg nearest the camera being the one that's bent.  When leaning on your hands, if you can steeple your fingers a bit and take the weight that way it's more elegant

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31239175
great look -

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31235438
these are pretty "meh" mostly through no fault of your own - a candidate
for removal

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31215759
if you're looking to prune here's another one to consider excising from your port

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31215860
classic pose - would have been much stronger with a bit more arch in the back and your head held vertical - also with the right knee drawn up a bit more

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31235310
good vibe

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31235492
this is elegant - would have been better with your left hand elegantly employed
and visible - perhaps resting higher on your thigh

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31235322
this kind of perspective, with your knees so close to the camera, creates a distortion that does not really flatter - another one to consider removing

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31235280
"meh" - another one you could do without

If you are set on being an SG / glamour model then you just need a much better quality of images and some posing refinement along the lines of better posture, more elegant, lengthened lines, more activation of core muscles. You're doing pretty well....

my own bias being what it is, I'd love to see you doing some more elegant fashion and glam stuff - nicely styled, lovely locations, quality photography.....   I'd like to see you take it higher class all the way -   but I am an old world gentleman of years.....

Jan 15 13 04:56 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Square Jaw Photography wrote:
Just began studio type photography. Would love to know what you think. Good?  Bad?  Ugly?

Hello Square Jaw Photography -   let's see what you've got going.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31083260
pretty nice exposure choice and perspective - don't understand the composition though - why slice off a bit of her backside?

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31140171
I am a military Lifer.  Still a competitive shooter.  But I have to admit that I don't really like seeing models with firearms.  Firearms are serious business.  Unless she is a shooter, handling the weapon properly in a proper setting, I think it sends the wrong message. 

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#31083004
nice composition -  in this case I might have preferred more depth of field so that the graffiti in the background was sharper....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30455317
the tones are pretty muddy here -  the shadow of the hair on her face is detracting....   if you're going to slice and dice like this, try to manage the light a little better,  and watch for model pose and hair that might create unwanted shadows.   If you want to PM me I'll give you an idea for creating a shot like this that works better than your approach.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30455122
nice perspective composition and tones

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30135333
nice exposure value and composition -  I would have directed the model toward a better sitting position and posture though.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#30133975
lovely.  Not quite believing the skin tones - a bit orange -  but here warm tones work

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#29963032
interesting perspective and use of the geometry of the lines in the floor and the cast shadows - her arms reaching toward the camera are unfortunate - would have been so much better with good model posing direction

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 1#29962558
not working well - muddled tones, hot spots, reflections from the glass on your model.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29450745
nice perspective - nice mood

You are doing a lot of good stuff -  you've learned the fundamentals from your experience.  Now it's time to learn some nuances -   model posing and direction is a big one and takes time.   Learning how to handle artificial lighting with a bit more nuance as well.

Jan 15 13 05:09 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Shelly Sunshine
Posts: 67
Port Richey, Florida, US


Fotografica Gregor wrote:
Next up: Sarah Page Photography

There are currently 5 people in the queue

But generally, please be patient and expect it to take up to one week to receive your critique when the line is long. If you subscribe to this thread you will always know when it has been updated.....

Open for business -   

everyone in before I close this will receive a critique.... 

I will not just disappear - whenever I call it quits I will name the last person to receive critique.  However I am busy so I can only do 2 or 3 a day and sometimes will disappear for a day....

Offering critique.  Basically whatever I feel like at the moment in response to your portfolio.

I might give a general portfolio comment

I might pick one aspect of your work

I might pick images to critique to make a broader point

If you don't think I'm good enough to benefit you, skip it.

I will not be rude or impolite or destructive

But if you are really a masochist - check out my feature and interview in ArtsNFashion Magazine Winter 2012.....

To everyone who has posted or written to thank me for the critique -  you are more than welcome.  My goal is to help you get better if I can.  That *should* be the point of critique, after all.....

***

Jan 15 13 05:59 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
John M Hoyt
Posts: 344
Greenville, South Carolina, US


Thanks for taking the time to share your thoughts. Being a newb to anything other than casual shots, hearing from those more experienced is a huge help.   I don't disagree with any of your points either smile.   

I'll work on it, I promise smile
Jan 16 13 10:31 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Bronte Ann
Posts: 23
Detroit, Michigan, US


Interested in hearing your thoughts!
Jan 17 13 12:11 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Sarah Page Photography wrote:
I would love your insight! Please note some are film, some digital, etc

Hello Sarah Page Photography -

here's the issue -  I am a technician - trained on roll film and rangefinder cameras and then SLRs....    I'm not an artist by any means - so I have a hard time critiquing ports that are about art -   what I want to see in a port is at least some technically correct images to demonstrate a set of competencies -  this goes back to my stint as an editor I guess -  so keep this data in mind....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31237103
the pose and the form do not look anatomically correct or possible - and I've worked with dancers -not a fan of the left hand position -  not a fan of the black point - looks like lots of detail lost in the skirt that could be brought up with some fill light -  skin tone does not look real to me

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#24498521
very lovely -  but I don't care for the crop -   I would like to see her eyes at the bottom right third line intersection for a more dynamic image - or even farther
into the lower right corner of the frame.  I never like to see eyes that close to mid frame...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31136846
cool shot but don't like the composition - too much headroom,  would prefer that the model and reflection be either exactly centered (yes it violates the golden mean but there is symmetry)  OR  be shifted more to the left hand margin of the shot 

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31136869
aesthetically I'm not a fan of this sort of cross toning for a shot like this -  and your watermark is really huge and distracting here - like the model style and look though

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31136849
this is interesting -   you could crop off a chunk of the lower frame and have a more dynamic image -   I don't get the vertical bar thing with your watermark - really distracting

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31136856
pretty shot -  but when I re-imagine it without the headroom and the distracting bright area at the top of the frame, and imagine a perspective and composition that offsets your model with respect to angularity within the frame, I see a much stronger image.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31136833
perhaps better model direction or a better perspective would be in order - the dominant object in this composition is her right shoulder  -  the shoulder and hand look huge in comparison to her face -   a longer focal length for a more balanced perspective or a tighter crop might be in order

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#26430989
like

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31136844
if you had moved your composition to the right a bit you would have had a much stronger image

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31136836
okay, but why centered in the frame?  Lost opportunity....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31136865
crop off the lower 1/2 frame and you have a nice shot

in sum
the biggest issues I see in your work:

choice of perspective -   points of view straight on to the model are the most boring thing in the world especially when the port is filled with them.  Move around more. Experiment with perspective....

I am getting the sense that you "fall in love" with your subject and do not evaluate how she fits in the overall framing and composition.  Read up on the Golden Mean / Golden Ratio / Rule of Thirds.  Learn to look at the entire frame and not to be sloppy with overly wide compositions.  Focus - narrow it down - you do not need to include so many elements - this is diluting your work

that watermark has to go -  come up with something much more compact

Jan 18 13 05:34 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Stuart Henderson wrote:
Id really like to get your opinion on what ive done so far.

Hello Stuart Henderson -

on first glance - not bad at all -

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31330413
like the perspective and comp - you're picking up green tones from the foliage that are screwing with your skin tones though

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31289198
nice perspective and comp - good connection with your model - I'm wondering about your white balance here a bit - good compromise on the exposure

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31254643
I like cast shadows -  but not when the subject is leaning right on the background -    actually having the model right on the background is *always* a lost opportunity for using cast shadows and creating depth.  Nice point of view though.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31254045
Like  (that's strong praise coming from me lol)

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31219888
like the toning and textures -  yes there is a lot of parallelism here but still don't like the vertical subject isolated mid frame.  So far you've been doing well with this bit so I am assuming that you know 'rule of thirds' if not Golden Ratios -  the latter are very instructive

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31216466
almost Like -  skin tones are too orange - happens with bright light and high contrast ratios sometimes

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31210944
almost like -  could be cropped shorter, skin tones are yellow / green

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31210909
Like

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31198910
both decent shots - almost like the one on the right - why composite them?

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31198686
skin looks blurred - hair looks blurred -  you were heading in the right direction though - maybe go back and look at an unedited version of this again....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31186932
tough shot to crop pleasingly.....      I would say that you really don't need more than one shot from the same look in your port but that's a hard sell with folks in building mode.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31186792
not working for me with subject isolated mid frame

in sum -

you are doing excellently given your self reported experience level.  Work on perspective and composition, shoot more for depth in your images instead of plunking your model smack on backgrounds,  avoid shooting "head on" so much and explore more angles of view.   White balance and skin tone do matter.....

Jan 18 13 05:49 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Stuart Henderson
Posts: 16
Newcastle upon Tyne, England, United Kingdom


Fotografica Gregor wrote:
Hello Stuart Henderson -

on first glance - not bad at all -

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31330413
like the perspective and comp - you're picking up green tones from the foliage that are screwing with your skin tones though

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31289198
nice perspective and comp - good connection with your model - I'm wondering about your white balance here a bit - good compromise on the exposure

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31254643
I like cast shadows -  but not when the subject is leaning right on the background -    actually having the model right on the background is *always* a lost opportunity for using cast shadows and creating depth.  Nice point of view though.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31254045
Like  (that's strong praise coming from me lol)

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31219888
like the toning and textures -  yes there is a lot of parallelism here but still don't like the vertical subject isolated mid frame.  So far you've been doing well with this bit so I am assuming that you know 'rule of thirds' if not Golden Ratios -  the latter are very instructive

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31216466
almost Like -  skin tones are too orange - happens with bright light and high contrast ratios sometimes

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31210944
almost like -  could be cropped shorter, skin tones are yellow / green

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31210909
Like

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31198910
both decent shots - almost like the one on the right - why composite them?

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31198686
skin looks blurred - hair looks blurred -  you were heading in the right direction though - maybe go back and look at an unedited version of this again....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31186932
tough shot to crop pleasingly.....      I would say that you really don't need more than one shot from the same look in your port but that's a hard sell with folks in building mode.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31186792
not working for me with subject isolated mid frame

in sum -

you are doing excellently given your self reported experience level.  Work on perspective and composition, shoot more for depth in your images instead of plunking your model smack on backgrounds,  avoid shooting "head on" so much and explore more angles of view.   White balance and skin tone do matter.....

Thank you so much for taking the time to go through my images....Everything you say makes sense and I will definitely work on improving in those areas. Quite over the moon to get som likes in there too...
Thanks again
Stuart.

Jan 19 13 06:54 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
juliarabkin
Posts: 570
Rochester, New York, US


please critique my portfolio: www.juliarabkin.com
Jan 19 13 05:55 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Andi Maxwell
Posts: 7
Sacramento, California, US


Would love to hear your thoughts if you're still at it!
Jan 19 13 07:25 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Danielle Arizona wrote:
Critique, please!

Hi Danielle Arizona -

first off - if you want to be considered for work by the more serious photographers who can really advance your portfolio,  we need to be seeing your full information - measurements and shoe size - professionally taken for accuracy.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#31257494
if you're going for commercial / lifestyle work this is a good sort of shot, but this example is of very mediocre quality for reasons that I cannot say here, as the photographer is not the subject of the critique...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30713125
you've got the start of a lovely pose here -  but modeling differs from how you might "pose" in everyday life and is much more demanding -   this would call for strong activation of core muscles,  much better posture (ie upper back and shoulders not rounded but arched),  weight upon your steepled fingertips to maintain an elegant line of the arm and hand...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30713117
elbows toward the camera are always a bad idea  - this creates a perspective that distorts the shape of the arm.  Keep bent elbows 45 degrees or more away from the camera.   Also a bare midriff calls for activation of core muscles and a lift of the chest to create a flattering line

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30713107
basically nice - could be improved with a better left hand -   all touching of your hair couture, or skin should be light "pretend" touching.  The line of the arm here would be stronger with the elbow pulled back and the hand lowered a bit. 

Keep in mind - all poses that look really good are placing a demand on the body -  activation of core muscles, dynamic posture,   a stretch in the range of motion

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#30713095
lovely - would be better with an elegant hand position -  the curled fingers in the hair are a distraction  -  a straighter hand with spread but relaxed fingers pretend-touching the hair would be more elegant

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 0#29846538
Like  - strong, engaging look

in sum
I would suggest trying to trade with stronger photographers who can not only provide a higher quality of work but are able to coach you with respect to posing, and / or see if there are some dynamic models in your market who would be willing to spend some time with you on posing techniques.   If you want to go it on your own, try Yoga - but not "health club" Yoga -  and practice some of the points I've raised here especially posture, core muscles and hand and arm positions.

Jan 20 13 09:01 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


El Artista wrote:
Hi, I'd like some honest feedback. I'm a beginning photographer. Thanks. smile

Hello El Artista

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31274337
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31252700
hint:  don't think of light placement in two dimensions - use the third - in this case, a more elevated light would give a better result -  study op on Rembrandt Shadow or Chiaroscuro

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31252647
here your light placement is too close to the lens axis for what you are trying to accomplish, and the perspective is too low for this sort of composition

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31252540
notice the separate nose and cheek shadows....   watch where these shadows fall -  they should not be separated

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31252520
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31252479
Like

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31250487
when you see neck rolls,  direct your model to stretch a bit more to alleviate them

In sum

a bit more refined perspective - look at the whole frame, don't lock on your subject

try just raising your lighting to 45* above horizontal and play with that a bit, keep main light off camera axis by 60 degrees or more will help you refine what you are doing

just a bit  better model direction here and there

Jan 20 13 09:09 am  Link  Quote 
Model
SiffaScary
Posts: 11
New Orleans, Louisiana, US


Critique me please? It would mean a lot
Jan 20 13 09:15 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
El Artista
Posts: 4
Toronto, Ontario, Canada


Thanks for your feedback, Fotografica Gregor. The things you pointed out never occurred to me. It's much appreciated!
Jan 20 13 09:27 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Cyn Michelle wrote:
Would like to hear your thoughts!

Hello Cyn Michelle -

your profile really needs to contain full and accurate professional taken measurements if you are as serious about your modeling as you seem to be....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31323177
elbows pointed at the camera are always a bad idea - draw your bent elbow at least 45 degrees off camera axis with 60-90 being optimal for a lovely line.  Hands lost in hair are also not the best -  a more elegant way to go is the hand lightly pretend-touching the hair -  you do not want to distort the shape of your hair, your skin or your couture with your touch

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31284467
nice look - it would be much better with an elegant right hand position - elegant hands are open but relaxed, not stiff, fingers slightly spread.....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#31227979
elbows are almost far enough off camera axis here - not quite on your right -  but your left and disappears behind your head - disappearing hands are always a bit disconcerting...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#30435975
elegant en pointe -  more elegant hands here would be in improvement

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#30117983
Like

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#30034211
here you can see that the photographer was shooting you from a lower position - when this happens you want to drop your chin a bit to keep a dynamic line of the chin and neck and a more direct look -   this is a subtle thing - 1 inch would have been about right

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#30003213
shoulders rounded forward are very popular in fashion posing these days but make for a very weak body line -  good posture is always the best foundation for a pose

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#26192473
love the mood

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 7#23953847
Like - very lovely, direct but open look

in sum-
elegant hands -
posture -
engage the camera - if the camera goes down, lower your chin even if
looking sideways
you are doing wonderful things with you focus, your eyes, your expressions

Jan 20 13 09:55 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
I Ference Photography
Posts: 1,152
Rochester, New York, US


I would love to hear your thoughts.
Jan 20 13 09:55 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


I Ference Photography wrote:
I would love to hear your thoughts.

I like your work very much, so it will be my pleasure - you are currently 5th in queue - Cheers

Jan 20 13 10:07 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Rosemarie Bennet
Posts: 144
Warrington, Pennsylvania, US


Please.
Jan 20 13 10:28 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
RachelReilly
Posts: 1,730
Washington, District of Columbia, US


Fotografica Gregor wrote:
Hello Rachel Reilly -

basics - basics - basics


More care with exposure values, skin tones,  hands cut off in composition,  lost opportunities in composition where llamas are too much in the centre of the frame.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … d37613.jpg
you needed some sort of fill to deal with the shadows and contrast ratio
better llama direction (the cut off arm disappearing into space)
the perspective is jarring - taken from too low a level

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30711823
composition -hand cut partially off
model posing direction - left arm blocking your couture - a huge no-no
if you want to do fashion photography
model hands curled -  you want your llama's hands to be almost straight but not stiff, fingers slightly spread, any touching of the skin hair or couture to be "pretend" with no pressure so as not to create distortion.   Hands must be *elegant*. 

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30709829
you don't want "disappearing limbs" - 
cut off hands

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30709632
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30708163
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30709688
composition -  llama too centered in the frame  - study up on the golden ratios and golden mean - a slight shift in composition in these images would have improved them dramatically. 

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 3a1ce8.jpg
lit from the wrong direction throwing harsh 1/2 arm shadow
and your llama has brassiere lines on her skin
pay attention to direction and quality of light
models should immediately remove underwear when showing up
on a shoot and put on a seasonally appropriate robe until hair and MUA
are done, so as to avoid lines from brassiere and panty

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30332068
posture -  elegant posture is your friend.  Thereagain this is the photographer's responsibility.
partially cut off hand in your composition

In sum -

when shooting out of doors, either shoot very early or late in the day, or be prepared to scrim (block or filter) harsh sunlight or to fill with flash or strobe or reflector to soften shadows

learn the basic rules of composition and perspective -  don't be content with the rule of thirds (though you are for the most part not following that either) - study the golden mean and golden ratios and apply them.  When you are so deeply familiar with them and their use that you understand them completely, you may choose to "break" these rules to good effect.  You and I both are a long way from that point.

Keep an eye on what is going on in your entire frame - you are cutting off bits of hands etc. 

pay attention to perspective - some of your standing llama shots would have given your llama more length if shot from a slightly lower perspective, some of your tight shots were shot from too low a perspective.  Generally, standing llamas should be shot from a level between the hip and knee, unless you are going for a higher point of view, in which case be careful not to foreshorten your llama.  1/2 and head and shoulders shots need to be shot from nearly level, or from slightly above - not too much deviation-  if as you say in your profile your goal is to shoot editorial work.

pay attention to direction and quality of light and pay careful attention to shadowing especially on the llama or couture. 

model preparation -  avoid underwear lines

model direction -  learn the basics of llama posing - don't be so focused on your concept or style or whatever that you forget that llama posing makes or breaks a shot - and it is ultimately the photographer's job to pay attention to and direct your llamas. 

contrast ratios -  hard light or steep contrast ratios are tools for the extremely skilled and best avoided until more basics are mastered.

That is more than enough to keep you busy for a while -   please do feel free to check back in with me in the future if you want an updated private critique.  I would be happy to help if I can.  After all, we're almost neighbors smile

Wow can't believe I didn't see this before!
Such good advice!!
Unfortunately or fortunately I deleted a bunch of the photos your critiqued though I do remember which you're referring to and you're absolutely right In your critiques.
One thing other photographers keep telling me is to tone it down. Start with basic light set ups and pretty makeup / styling. I agree because right now I am rushing into concepts that are too difficult for me to produce properly with my level of experience.

I see you're quite busy with this but if  you get a chance id  like to know your opinion if my newer photos are any better.

Jan 20 13 07:01 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Elizabeth Michelle
Posts: 47
Garden Grove, California, US


would love your critique! smile
Jan 21 13 02:44 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Starling W
Posts: 139
Palmdale, California, US


New stuff posted. Would love to hear your opinion.
Thanks!! smile
Jan 21 13 04:15 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Shelly Sunflower wrote:
***

Hello Shelly Sunflower -  I am assuming you want in smile

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#31257472
I'm not buying your facial expressions in this set -  I think it's mostly
in the eyes -  for some reason you come across to me as uncomfortable
or evasive here

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#28077874
this is pretty nice but could be improved with a good back arch and square shoulders

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#25776531
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 8#31257427
charming - love the energy

my suggestions:

work on posture
elegant hand positions
stay with the bright and engaging moods -  these are charming and engaging

Jan 22 13 08:25 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Bronte Ann wrote:
Interested in hearing your thoughts!

Hi Bronte Ann -

my first thought is that you should be here, shooting editorial fashion with me smile  You would survive the experience as long as you are willing to take a little direction....

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31231513
like the energy - don't like the curled fingers on the right hand -  better to have a nearly straight hand with slightly separated fingers - or maybe in this case a dramatic hand position

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31231464
good level look and nice hand positions here

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31091287
wishing your head was not leaning in this shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31091276
this one's not working especially because of the right arm position

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31091231
nice look, S curve pose and hand positions

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31091167
I think that if the left arm was pulled back a bit so the elbow did not break up your outline quite the same way it would be stronger - maybe 45 degrees...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31091165
this is lovely and bright - but the right hand detracts - don't lean flat on palms - support your weight with somewhat steepled fingers to create a lovely line.

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31091132
re-imagine this pose with the right hand elegantly employed on the left forearm, the left hand not grabbing but a bit more elegantly touching the hair and the head more level, and you've got  a winner

In sum -
you are doing nice things with your hands in some of your shots - stay mindful of your hands and use them elegantly - these are the final detail that can make or break a look

whenever you feel the urge to tilt your head, ask yourself why?  unless you are facing nearly straight onto the camera it often does not work well - 

keep in mind how your arm positions fit the flow of a pose -

your posing stances seem from this sample to be a bit limited -  you've got some good S curve poses and some dynamic poses but I'm not seeing sweeping lines -  you've got a good foundation - study the posing of really good models and add to your repertoire -

and my door is always open

Jan 22 13 08:36 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Quentin Skyking
Posts: 296
Lancaster, Massachusetts, US


I can always do with another critique...

Please, look over my port.
Jan 22 13 08:45 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Dominique Banner
Posts: 56
Edmonton, Alberta, Canada


myself being new to mm would be awesome to have some critiques, i am doing 3 shoots in feb and would love to know what i need to improve on smile
Jan 22 13 08:52 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


JuliaRabkindotcom wrote:
please critique my portfolio: www.juliarabkin.com

Hello JuliaRabkindotcom -

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30002133
striking model - superb look - elegant posture and hand - like the direction and quality of light -  not personally a fan of the toning you are going for in many of these images but that is a matter of personal style -  I would characterize this and quite a few others as just a bit "gritty" texturally for my taste but it is lovely work

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#30002144
love the shadow play here

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31024277
never have been a fan of having a model "lead with her chin" - but it is an intriguing look if that's what you are going for

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 3#31400464
this is elegant -  again this is a matter of personal taste - I would have had her lower her chin especially with an over the shoulder look and especially with this point of view and perspective

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31400054
this is gorgeous - 

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31352087
smashing capture and edit - love how sculpted this is

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30002244
elegant all the way around

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/18173720
beautiful short lighting and falloff

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/8656700
smashing - my personal fave in your port

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 02#7653002
beautifully lit and tone

you have an impressive portfolio of work -  I like what you are doing
with direction and quality of light, with perspective, with motion,
and I admire your artistic sense

not a fan of some of the editing especially toning but that is a matter
of difference in personal style -

Jan 26 13 11:19 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Andi Maxwell wrote:
Would love to hear your thoughts if you're still at it!

Hello Andi Maxwell -

your profile is an engaging read and very informative -  I personally would prefer to see your measurements there as well

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31347406
not a fan of the pointed right elbow and disappearing hand,  and you don't look very comfortable in this shot

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31347364
lovely styling and look -  your expression seems very neutral in this set of glam shots as well -

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30862603
wait! can it be?  gorgeous expression here -  yes a lovely smile is not always appropriate to every concept...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pi … 4#30862504
just exceptionally lovely

At this point I would advise working on facial expression and being sure that you are comfortable with whatever you are shooting....

Facial expression, the eyes and the hands that "sell" the pose or concept.  I realize that it takes a while to really get comfortable and get into being "shot"  but do think about working on a wider array of facial expression, and if some topic or concept just makes you uncomfortable it may not be worth doing, as this will show....

try to avoid hard lines -  for example the pointed right elbow I mentioned

Jan 26 13 11:29 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,120
Alexandria, Virginia, US


SiffaScary wrote:
Critique me please? It would mean a lot

Jan 26 13 11:41 am  Link  Quote 
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