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Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


I'll be blunt and obnoxious about your portfolio and how it makes me feel.

all i ask is that you check out my facebook fanpage and add me?

http://www.facebook.com/travelinglorayne

Please remember that no matter how annoying your portfolio is, it's only my opinion and don't get upset.
Dec 06 12 10:05 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Rik Williams
Posts: 3,331
Melbourne, Victoria, Australia


Lorayne York wrote:
I'll be blunt and obnoxious about your portfolio and how it makes me feel.

all i ask is that you check out my facebook fanpage and add me?

http://www.facebook.com/travelinglorayne

Please remember that no matter how annoying your portfolio is, it's only my opinion and don't get upset.

Yay !!

and merry xmas to you too Lorayne xx

Dec 06 12 10:12 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
MickCetera
Posts: 276
Chicago, Illinois, US


Haha sounds good, merry Christmas to you too!
Dec 07 12 08:18 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
730372
Posts: 1,952
Abbeville, Alabama, US


Go for it - I'll add you.
Dec 07 12 08:30 am  Link  Quote 
Model
HEATHER 19
Posts: 1,127
Boston, Massachusetts, US


Ready
Dec 07 12 09:00 am  Link  Quote 
Model
000---000
Posts: 706
Alberta, Alabama, US


Go ahead
Dec 07 12 09:12 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
I Ference Photography
Posts: 1,152
Rochester, New York, US


Haha, I give you leave to be obnoxious.
Dec 07 12 09:16 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Egle Aida Damulyte
Posts: 374
Vilnius, Vilniaus, Lithuania


i'm in smile
Dec 07 12 11:07 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,068
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Sure - why not ?  I'm adding you -  you might enjoy my facebook artist page as well.... Cheers -
Dec 07 12 11:08 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Paige Morgan
Posts: 4,058
New York, New York, US


Hit me.
Dec 07 12 11:11 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
DAN CRUIKSHANK
Posts: 1,786
Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada


Let's do this!
Dec 07 12 11:12 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


Rik Image wrote:

Yay !!

and merry xmas to you too Lorayne xx

smile I like your portfolio. i'd probably list some of it, if listing photos didnt take so long.
as far as lighting... you know what you're doing. i dont see any funky lighting on any of the models.

it seems your downfall is your postwork. Some of the skin of the models looks fake.. and then in the same picture you have unedited skin. i would also say that when you have a pale model wearing white.. having a white background that is blown out makes the model blend with the background.. examples:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120316/20/4f63fed665400_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110819/03/4e4e3ca233e62_m.jpg

this photo would be good... if the model, car, and grass werent all the same color and texture.. http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120316/20/4f63feeeec2ea_m.jpg

here's a group of photos i would remove to strength your portfolio:
(all links are 18+)
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … eb94_m.jpg
^ the red leather is obnoxious.. and the pose isn't amazing.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/090323/18/49c834afa234d_m.jpg
^all i see is the flat foot. it also kind of looks like a prom/homecoming photo gone bad. i get the background is pretty.. but a girl standing on rocks looking uncomfortable isn't helping the landscape.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120517/00/4fb4a896d5dee_m.jpg
^holy shit.. there is too much to look at.. my eyes are drawn to the girl.. but also the billboard and the telephone poles and wires... way too much going on.

i like these:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110819/08/4e4e83f024bba_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120305/21/4f55a6fce0efe_m.jpg

there are others.. but it'd take too long to post.

Dec 07 12 01:45 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


MickCetera wrote:
Haha sounds good, merry Christmas to you too!

i've never met a man with a 0 inch chest.. you must be dead.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120717/02/50052dce2b34c_m.jpg
^ i see this look/emote (whatever you wanna call it) in your portfolio a lot.. it looks like "i'm a baby deer"... or maybe "i'm cute and cuddly.. but insecure.. but i'm trying to be seductive"... i have no idea... either way.. it makes me laugh a little. Be a f.cking man and show some manly emotion.. like anger.. or "i'm a f.cking badass".

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120615/09/4fdb5ca19a6d2_m.jpg
^why are you wearing shorts? everything else is dressed up.. except the shorts.. and unless you are modeling the giant chair you're sitting in.. this photo does nothing to your portfolio strength.

Remember this.. quality over quantity. meaning if you only have two amazing photos.. only post those two.. dont post a bunch of crap to fill up spaces.

my advice, work with photographers who dont ask for that deer in the headlights look, and find some that will make you look like a rugged man. you have a beard thing... whic is manly.. yet your photos are the opposite.

Dec 07 12 01:53 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
_eMMe_
Posts: 842
Florence, Toscana, Italy


Added you...
Dec 07 12 01:55 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
MesmerEyes Photography
Posts: 2,890
Tyler, Texas, US


If I had a facebook I would add you.
Dec 07 12 02:02 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
NicoleNudes
Posts: 3,796
Toronto, Ontario, Canada


Sure
Dec 07 12 02:04 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Yin L
Posts: 264
London, England, United Kingdom


Lorayne York wrote:
I'll be blunt and obnoxious about your portfolio and how it makes me feel.

all i ask is that you check out my facebook fanpage and add me?

http://www.facebook.com/travelinglorayne

Please remember that no matter how annoying your portfolio is, it's only my opinion and don't get upset.

pls do smile

Dec 07 12 02:07 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Maggie Xia
Posts: 452
Atlanta, Georgia, US


Let's play smile

and I just added you on fb
Dec 07 12 02:52 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
C A T H Y
Posts: 5,464
Anaheim, California, US


I'm in smile

EDIT: I liked your facebook page..
Dec 07 12 02:53 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Rik Williams
Posts: 3,331
Melbourne, Victoria, Australia


Lorayne York wrote:

smile I like your portfolio. i'd probably list some of it, if listing photos didnt take so long.
as far as lighting... you know what you're doing. i dont see any funky lighting on any of the models.

it seems your downfall is your postwork. Some of the skin of the models looks fake.. and then in the same picture you have unedited skin. i would also say that when you have a pale model wearing white.. having a white background that is blown out makes the model blend with the background.. examples:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120316/20/4f63fed665400_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110819/03/4e4e3ca233e62_m.jpg

this photo would be good... if the model, car, and grass werent all the same color and texture.. http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120316/20/4f63feeeec2ea_m.jpg

here's a group of photos i would remove to strength your portfolio:
(all links are 18+)
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … eb94_m.jpg
^ the red leather is obnoxious.. and the pose isn't amazing.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/090323/18/49c834afa234d_m.jpg
^all i see is the flat foot. it also kind of looks like a prom/homecoming photo gone bad. i get the background is pretty.. but a girl standing on rocks looking uncomfortable isn't helping the landscape.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120517/00/4fb4a896d5dee_m.jpg
^holy shit.. there is too much to look at.. my eyes are drawn to the girl.. but also the billboard and the telephone poles and wires... way too much going on.

i like these:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110819/08/4e4e83f024bba_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120305/21/4f55a6fce0efe_m.jpg

there are others.. but it'd take too long to post.

Thank you for all that smile it is appreciated.

Dec 07 12 03:28 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Maria Susanti
Posts: 539
Banyuwangi, Jawa Timur, Indonesia


I'll play =]
Dec 07 12 03:52 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
You Were Hotter Online
Posts: 63
New York, New York, US


ok i'll play
Dec 07 12 04:02 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Avalon Fell
Posts: 75
Rowland Heights, California, US


What do you think?
Dec 07 12 05:38 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Darin B
Posts: 998
San Diego, California, US


Please do. Thanks!
Dec 07 12 06:19 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


T B O L wrote:
Go for it - I'll add you.

lovely studio/art nudes

i do not like this:
18+
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 034b_m.jpg
^ editing on her face or lighting just makes it have zero depth.. it looks like a flat piece of paper.

18+
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/11 … bc78_m.jpg
^ she is squinting... and the railroad thing has been done soo many times.. im not sure why people love railroad ties sooo much. anyway.. to avoid the squint.. try counting to three and have the model open her eyes on 3.

love this:
18+
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/10 … bd29_m.jpg

it seems you are comfortable with art nudes.. and are trying to do some more creative things? if not.. you should be.

also have models do more poses than just standing and hugging themselves or stretching upwards.. i get that art nudes showcase the body.. but it gets boring.

Dec 08 12 09:15 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Maria Panina
Posts: 139
New York, New York, US


I'll play
Dec 08 12 09:25 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


HEATHER 18 wrote:
Ready

love most of your stuff.. and then i see shit like this:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110603/18/4de986c336089.jpg
why are your arms different colors than your legs? and the trash dumpsters in the background just make it so classy. (sarcasm)

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120811/05/5026524a676bd_m.jpg
Hello orange. i believe this is called shit editing... or where they layer three different shots.. mainly used for cars to bring out colors.. unfortunately for you.. it brought out orange.. you look kinda like a pretty oompa loompa.

the good:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110313/08/4d7cdc63caf23_m.jpg
^ this should be your avatar. it's beautiful. though the other similiar photos are not as good as this.. and i would possibly lose them.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120508/14/4fa990587daab_m.jpg
^hello prom photo.. i decided not to wear white to my prom, nor did i get my photo taken by the photog they had at the dance.. but if that's your thing...


everything else in your portfolio is good. though cut back on some of the runway show photos.. there is one where your forehead is shiny... i'd probably dump that since you have wayy better

Dec 08 12 09:27 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
New Image Creations
Posts: 412
Edmonton, Alberta, Canada


I liked your very likeable Facebook page!
Dec 08 12 09:41 am  Link  Quote 
Model
MissLaurelle
Posts: 3,532
Montreal, Quebec, Canada


sure smile
merry christmas to you!
Dec 08 12 09:49 am  Link  Quote 
Retoucher
PWF Retouch
Posts: 290
Jacksonville, North Carolina, US


Me please! Merry Christmas!
Dec 08 12 03:27 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


LizaK wrote:
Go ahead

you have a lot of hands near your face poses.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121127/12/50b522756e69d_m.jpg
^ this is too blown out, you blend with the background.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121127/12/50b521e331960_m.jpg
same with this

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121012/11/5078623738d4e_m.jpg
i liked this until i saw the black eye..

love this:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120819/02/5030b19d4c21f_m.jpg

you are very pretty, but i would like to see photos where you arent posed to the side. it seems most of your shots are you with your head angled.

and im not sure what to think about the snow and lace thing ones.. they dont make much sense to me and you cant see yourself... which is what you are trying to sell.. your look.

Dec 08 12 06:04 pm  Link  Quote 
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Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


I Ference Photography wrote:
Haha, I give you leave to be obnoxious.

i'm jealous of all your locations you've shot at. though i think you have an obsession with models sitting in chairs. look through your photos and count how many are sitting in some kind of chair.

hmm i like a lot of your photos.. i will list a few. lighting is good and considering you do art nudes i cant really say you should do headshots.. cause that defeats the entire shit behind the idea.. (sorry im a little drunk)... however.. if you find a cool location.. or want to let me know where some of these are.. message me wink

all links are 18+

this is my favorite:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/10 … f5a1_m.jpg

this is my least favorite and doesnt belong in your portfolio:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/11 … 5d33_m.jpg

Dec 08 12 06:09 pm  Link  Quote 
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Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


Egle Damulyte wrote:
i'm in smile

first off i love your hair. you should definitely be doing fashion or editorial. you have amazing features.

love this:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/111113/01/4ebf94fd06f55_m.jpg

i would suggest working with photographers who can shoot full length to improve your portfolio.. and not someone who will put you in some weird mermaid thing on a white block... yah.. not getting it.

Dec 08 12 06:14 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
E e v a
Posts: 1,724
Nashville, Tennessee, US


I'm game
Dec 08 12 06:17 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Brittney Denea
Posts: 285
Oceanside, California, US


Merry Christmas to you, too.
Dec 08 12 06:19 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


Fotografica Gregor wrote:
Sure - why not ?  I'm adding you -  you might enjoy my facebook artist page as well.... Cheers -

added you smile

how come i have never seen your portfolio before? you have a lot of shit i like. good lighting, composition and all that other shit photographers know about.

i like this image:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120525/19/4fc03e1df31b1_m.jpg
except... the weird black poop smudge on her butt/thigh.

also.. when you light your subjects for full length.. it seems like you are using a light directed mainly at their face/torso.. throwing the legs into shadows.. try correcting it by either bouncing light or using another light source.. i only say that because it makes the legs look like they belong to a corpse when compared to the rest of the body.

if it seems like i'm being overly picky.. it's cause i am. there isn't anything major to change.. so i'm picking on all the little details.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121205/19/50c012d878ece_m.jpg
hello neck rolls...

this is the best out of your portfolio:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120719/21/5008e4b47a066_m.jpg

Dec 08 12 09:38 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


Paige Morgan wrote:
Hit me.

holy shit.. you've come a long way! i remember when you were first starting and now look.. you're a full blown freelancer!

btw.. LOVE the retro makeup on you.. the lashes and thick top liner.. it's enough to make me a lesbian for a few seconds.
like this:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120815/14/502c136e3c6bd_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120417/20/4f8e36d6120d9_m.jpg
Yummy.

i think what your portfolio could use.. some natural photos. you have a lot of "i'm a hardass".. i think seeing the softer side would compliment your port and give you another genre of art. so try something with natural makeup.. with softness.

Dec 08 12 09:44 pm  Link  Quote 
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Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


DAN CRUIKSHANK wrote:
Let's do this!

oh i know you.. i've stalked your portfolio. i love everything. i remember you posted about some photos in the canyon or riverbed... i loved them all. it looks like you kept all 4. and i LOVE your new aspen 4.

these two being my favorite. love the first because of the pose.. and the etching in the trees with her ribs showing.. and the second because of her pose and the mountain.
18+
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 5edd_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 28a3_m.jpg

your images just have so much depth.. they are beautiful. i'm flattered you posted in my thread thing.. makes me all warm inside.. and it also makes me want to shoot out in the freezing cold where my tits will shrivel into concave holes.

Dec 08 12 09:49 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,068
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Lorayne York wrote:
added you smile

how come i have never seen your portfolio before? you have a lot of shit i like. good lighting, composition and all that other shit photographers know about.

i like this image:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120525/19/4fc03e1df31b1_m.jpg
except... the weird black poop smudge on her butt/thigh.

also.. when you light your subjects for full length.. it seems like you are using a light directed mainly at their face/torso.. throwing the legs into shadows.. try correcting it by either bouncing light or using another light source.. i only say that because it makes the legs look like they belong to a corpse when compared to the rest of the body.

if it seems like i'm being overly picky.. it's cause i am. there isn't anything major to change.. so i'm picking on all the little details.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121205/19/50c012d878ece_m.jpg
hello neck rolls...

this is the best out of your portfolio:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120719/21/5008e4b47a066_m.jpg

Thank you for the critique -  it is appreciated   -

Dec 08 12 10:21 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
DAN CRUIKSHANK
Posts: 1,786
Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada


Lorayne York wrote:

oh i know you.. i've stalked your portfolio. i love everything. i remember you posted about some photos in the canyon or riverbed... i loved them all. it looks like you kept all 4. and i LOVE your new aspen 4.

these two being my favorite. love the first because of the pose.. and the etching in the trees with her ribs showing.. and the second because of her pose and the mountain.
18+
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 5edd_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 28a3_m.jpg

your images just have so much depth.. they are beautiful. i'm flattered you posted in my thread thing.. makes me all warm inside.. and it also makes me want to shoot out in the freezing cold where my tits will shrivel into concave holes.

Wow! Thanks so much! I'm glad you like my stuff smile

Dec 08 12 11:42 pm  Link  Quote 
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