Lots of composition and lighting problems in most of your shots:
This image:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30923759
Looks like you you used some sort of smudge technique on the makeup. It looks fake as hell. Also, why would you comment "This scares me" on your own photo? Awkward.
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Photo is way over exposed. All the highlights are blown out. It looks like an amateur snapshot. Obviously, you have a fascination with guns.
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Obviously shot in a hotel room. I can tell because you still have the hotel room coffee maker in the shot along with part of the TV as well. You also have one foot obscured and the other one cut off. Poor composition.
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The cropped foot does not seem to be part of a compositional decision, rather just laziness in your cropping. Also, the portion of the picture frame in the photo is distracting and should have been removed.
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Again, over exposed and blown out.
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The water looks plain and the blues could have been made to look better. The composition is weird with all the empty space in the shot on the right. Also that hair on her belly looks strange. In fact, it looks like she actually has a HAIRY BELLY. Better retouching and more attention to detail in your direction with the model could have fixed this.
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AGAIN...a totally over exposed and blown out photo. The hat is so over exposed it actually draws attention to the flaws in how it was shot.
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Another blown out photo
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Another poor cropping job where you cut off her feet and have tons of useless dead space on the right side of the photo.
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Another over exposed, blown out photo.
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Cropped off knees and uninspiring pose. Your white balance is also WAY off.
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Probably the only photo in your portfolio that has any real merit.
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Other than the last shot I mentioned, your work needs a lot of work. You need to get a much better attention to detail in your photos when you are shooting.