MatureModelMM wrote: I would appreciate your opinion, another llama rewrote part of my profile statement in a different discussion several months ago but possibly it could still benefit from change?
Haha, I think that was me, I remember your profile. I read through it again and I don't see anything else I'd change, but that's probably because any changes I would have already suggested are made or don't bother me anymore.
Malina van Leuven wrote: I think I will change it soon to something more clean and personal maybe, but some advice on it would definitely come handy.
Thanks in advance!
This might add some spice:
"I shoot fast, study hard and come prepared to make your vision a reality. Travelling, meeting new people and contributing to a creative team are what keep me enthusiastic about modeling and life. Send me a message and let's get started!"
Mea Culpa wrote: I used to have a great bio, then some weirdo copy-pasted it into her profile, so I changed it... has never quite felt "right" since...
It's a little word-heavy. Maybe try something less detailed and more specific to who you are and what you can provide to a client.
"I'm an experienced and creative model with rates as reasonable and flexible as my body. I have worked across Australia and Japan, and have been published in Australia, the US and in Europe. I won't work for "future joint sale profits" but I'm willing to discuss fees that are within your budget."
That kind of sums up the first half of your bio into the most informative part. A reader really just wants to get down to the nitty gritty of your portfolio.
Tommy wrote: Hey, just wanted to get an idea of how I can improve my bio. I thank you for your feedback.
Have a great day
This might be more effective:
"I'm a model and actor loyal to my clients and dedicated to creating artistic results. Creativity for me is my business, my career, my life and I take it very seriously. Message me so we can get started!"
Anni White wrote: Just rewritten my bio, could you give me any advice on how to improve it? If you get a chance, please!
Your bio reads much like a quiet questionnaire. Maybe replacing it with something like this would give it a boost:
I'm English but have a knack for Japanese street fashions. I seek collaborators who aren't afraid to experiment with unusual ideas. You don’t have to be experienced, rich or super tall, just creative and fun. If you like my portfolio or have a suggestion, I want to hear about it!"
Misty Matthews wrote: I would love some help with mine. Its been the same for too long.
Your bio has a good skeleton. Using bits and pieces maybe it could sound like...
See my beautiful toes? I'm a rubenesque and foot model who will go the extra mile for you. Willing to shoot at my home or on location. Escort preferred but negotiable. Implied nudity is my limit, non-negotiable. Themes certain to pique my interest include but are not limited to pin-up/rockabilly, vintage, and fine art.