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Digital Blitz
Posts: 2,103
Gaithersburg, Maryland, US


I like this picture! Please let me know your thoughts. Educate me!

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31156730
Jan 02 13 08:47 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
E e v a
Posts: 1,724
Nashville, Tennessee, US


You cropped her toes off her right foot.
I don't like how the photo has rounded edges. Keeping it the normal frame shape would've been better. The lighting and tone of image could've been better. Seems snapshotty.
Jan 02 13 09:01 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
p e p e
Posts: 125
Melbourne, Victoria, Australia


Digital Blitz wrote:
I feel I have attained nirvana with this picture! Please let me know your thoughts. Educate me!

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31156730

Your Nirvana may be some one else's Joe Cocker

I do like the the image but its not popping at me.

Jan 02 13 09:02 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Ali Choudhry Photo
Posts: 176
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


I agree with the above.

Rounded edges, cropped toe, and snapshotty feel.

I also think that she's got such great skin everywhere else that the smudge on left leg and the marks on her feet really stand out; I would have edited those out.
Jan 02 13 11:39 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Digital Blitz
Posts: 2,103
Gaithersburg, Maryland, US


Ali Choudhry Photo wrote:
I agree with the above.

Rounded edges, cropped toe, and snapshotty feel.

I also think that she's got such great skin everywhere else that the smudge on left leg and the marks on her feet really stand out; I would have edited those out.

Thank you doe your honest feedback.

Jan 03 13 09:02 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Rik Williams
Posts: 3,283
Melbourne, Victoria, Australia


It's an ok shot, but it lacks any character or depth. Most of this can be attributed to the inappropriate method of lighting the subject. This shot is so "paparazzi" to me, I'm expecting to find a high ranking official or politician laying behind her, hopelessly trying to cover his face.
You have all the elements here for a great shot, they just need to be choreographed a little differently. Oh and try not to crop off limbs so carelessly in future.
Have fun experimenting with the lights and poses next time.
Jan 03 13 10:16 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Anagram for Strange
Posts: 21
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


The background is a cluttered mess. Her pose looks awkward. The rounded corners and sepia tone look very Instagram. The shoot angle shouts "This camera is 5'6" off the ground". Her face, with her gaze on the camera, suggests it should be the focal point, but it's way off to the left, well outside the rule of thirds bounds, with nothing drawing the eye there - and at the other end, you cropped a toe. Lots of problems.

Looking through your port, there's another photo titled "Perspective" that is basically the same subject, an implied nude girl on a bed (might even be the same model?), that's far better. Less cluttered, more interesting angle, better lit, looks casual rather than amateurish.

Of course, sometimes we get a sentimental fondness for photos that aren't our best work. That's fine, we're allowed to love our own art! And this one does have some shiny... lovely model, and a wonderful engaged expression on her face. Work with her more, she has real potential. I'd suggest rather than trying to get a full-length, fold her up some and get a closer, more intimate shot that really emphasizes her face.
Jan 03 13 10:41 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
DaddyDPhotos
Posts: 65
Salinas, California, US


I suck, so take this with a grain of salt. I too think the "perspective" shot is way better. All I see in this shot is the square gray pillow. It bothers me.
Jan 03 13 10:58 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Nikki Magnusson
Posts: 6,841
Las Vegas, Nevada, US


what they said..
maybe shoot it again..
I like your model..
better lighting..
less mess as far as distracting pillows and stuff..
careful on the toe crop..
what do I know..
just my 2 cents...http://a4.ec-images.myspacecdn.com/images02/105/m_145d1f73fa894d0b807f47cee4fdaa1d.gif
Jan 03 13 11:15 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Rik Williams
Posts: 3,283
Melbourne, Victoria, Australia


Nikki Magnusson wrote:
what they said..

http://a4.ec-images.myspacecdn.com/images02/105/m_145d1f73fa894d0b807f47cee4fdaa1d.gif

Lmao, I swear I thought I had a bug on my I pad just now smile

Jan 03 13 11:21 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
J D s Artistic Images
Posts: 72
Port Angeles, Washington, US


First off, if you look at my portfolio, you will see I am NOT that experienced… So take my comments however you want… First the crop… If you are not going to include the whole model, crop it in a way that does not look like you just missed a part… The pose… If you had directed the model to bend her knees more (raising her feet) I think it would have given her better lines and avoided the crop problem.  Also the shape of her face would have been accentuated better if you would have had her tip her head back a bit.  The image does not “pop.”  This could be your lighting or your editing… I grabbed a copy of it and made some adjustments to the levels and vibrance and it seemed to help it (would have been better to have the RAW image).
Great model… I don’t find the background that distracting… I think you are almost there with some minor adjustments!
Jan 04 13 12:50 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Anagram for Strange
Posts: 21
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


I don't know if it would work for sure, but you could try a crop... just lose her legs entirely. It would get rid of the bad toe crop, the bruise, the perspective/proportion issues, and most of the background clutter.

This was a full-length implied nude as well, and I cropped it down for balance.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130103/22/50e67bb954153_m.jpg

And losing little bits in a crop, or blowing rule-of-thirds and symmetry and other balance rules, can work if you INTEND to do so. This image is deliberately off-balance...
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120501/21/4fa0b96a78af2_m.jpg

But yeah... more than anything, your original image suffers from what feels like careless imbalance. Either balance it, or make the imbalance critical.
Jan 04 13 07:07 pm  Link  Quote 
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