I like. Well balanced lighting. Would like to see her in something other than a tank top. Also I do find the watermark on the wall distracting...like if it belongs on the wall. Otherwise well done.
MichaelClements
Posts: 1,660
Adelaide, South Australia, Australia
Good work nice lighting. My only criticism is the makeup is crap, look at the difference in tone between her face and body. Oh and she needs less clothes...
robert b mitchell wrote: I like. Well balanced lighting. Would like to see her in something other than a tank top. Also I do find the watermark on the wall distracting...like if it belongs on the wall. Otherwise well done.
I want to do something different with the my watermarks, but I don't know what to do instead...Any suggestions?
She looks bored. I feel bored. The shot is really claustrophobic. I feel like you were right on top of her for this shot. Her fingertips are cut off at the bottom and her foot is awkwardly bent.
I hope there are more interesting shots from this session.
MichaelClements wrote: Good work nice lighting. My only criticism is the makeup is crap, look at the difference in tone between her face and body. Oh and she needs less clothes...
Thanks!
I definitely want to go with a MUA more going forward...All I was really trying to do was work on my lighting so the model did her own makeup.
It's well lit and composed but here are my issues:
*The makeup leaves a bit to be desired.
*The model's expression is, well, there is no expression.
*I like the black & white theme you had going with the outfit and the bed but then the scene is completely interrupted by the patterned and colored bed pillows.
*My eye is drawn right to the nightstand where there are items that shouldn't be there.
As far as technical issues, I do like it. The lighting is very good and other than the above, I don't feel like I'm in a hotel room.
Good Egg Productions wrote: Here's a pretty girl on a bed.
She looks bored. I feel bored. The shot is really claustrophobic. I feel like you were right on top of her for this shot. Her fingertips are cut off at the bottom and her foot is awkwardly bent.
I hope there are more interesting shots from this session.
Looks like she's getting ready for some really uninteresting doggy style.
It's obvious that you wanted her to look sexy but she doesn't and neither is her pose.
Also her skin is OVER retouched try it with a lighter hand.
I have to say .. Yeah the lighting is good.. Try it again?
LA StarShooter
Posts: 1,126
Beverly Hills, California, US
The lighting looks good and the hair is lustrous, but the angle and the pose don't rock. It's fine to have a watermark like yours, but to me shooting in a hotel should result in an image that burns the eyeballs in a good way. Expression and pose should rock in an intimate setting. The straight arm pose doesn't show her off. If you say it was just lighting you were working on then I hope you have some dramatic light, etc., if lighting is all you were trying to do.
Looks like a good start, I would use a different retoucher, or do it yourself, they missed the skin issue. Lighting is good, model could have a more appealing look/pose. As far as a watermark, I don't mind your watermark, just placement. try putting it in a corner, not the "middle" of the frame. A lot of people hate to see watermarks, I use them on almost all my photos. It is about branding, some people don't understand that. They may have valid reasons for not liking them but fail to look at it as a product. You won't see Kellogg's not putting their brand on their products...
Sekkides
Posts: 69
London, England, United Kingdom
I don't know why people think that flat lighting is 'good'... I would try to get a little mood in there, get the light round to the right make it look as if it's hitting her through a window and maybe bounce off a reflector on the left just to stop it going completely into shadow.. give the whole thing a little shape, bit of 3-dimensionality
Plus, that hotel room was pretty tiny right? Looks like you didn't have much choice as to where to stand
Boring, awkward pose, too tightly cropped, no attention to detail (I mean come on ... There's a pillow coming out of her butt, how did you not notice that), weird wardrobe, poor editing.
ultimate dream
Posts: 838
London, England, United Kingdom
Its not a bad shot neither is it a wow shot, its just a shot of a girl on a bed. You could have just shot this at home as it doesn't really show the hotel room.
Not getting the compliments on the lighting at all here: it looks completely flat and poorly aimed to me (her leg is more lit than her face, the model doesn't "pop" to me, there's no "depth" at all,...). The post treatment is not ok (plastic skin and "Barbie"-make-up), the pose is pretty boring and lacks energy, the framing is poor and there's still clutter on the bedside table. I think there's a lot more that can be done with a model in a hotel room: I just have the feeling there was no "general idea" at all when this picture was taken, leading to a very mediocre and boring result. You have a (short) listing of hotel pictures on your profile: take the time to analyze in detail what you like about these pictures and how they were made (lighting-, framing-, styling- and posing-wise): it will help you to do better in the future.
I like the model and pose, and even the claustrophobic look to it.
What I DON"T like, is that the pillow on the bed looks like it is coming out of her butt!. Get rid of it in PS and be more aware next time of all the surrounding objects!
BTW...Got to say I LOVE your avatar! Great job there! Also, please send that beautiful model my way!
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