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Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


veterans, lay it on me.
any image in my portfolio or your overall opinion of my small body of work, i'd love some constructive feedback from photographers who don't already know me from the modelling days. tongue
Jan 17 13 07:48 pm  Link  Quote 
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Aaron Lewis Photography
Posts: 5,078
Catskill, New York, US


First opinion, you have some unique stuff. I think you have a creative eye. It looks like to have a basic control of light. One thing I'm not fond of is your use of negative space and cropping.

There are a few images that have a LOT of negative space, which sometimes is fine, but the way they're cropped just doesn't to it for me.
Jan 18 13 08:37 am  Link  Quote 
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Tim Roper
Posts: 146
Palo Alto, California, US


I love the avatar and the other one like it, plus the pink hair tulle skirt one.  They have so much drama and feeling.    Some of the others look like you were going for the same thing, but it didn’t work as well, maybe due in part to the model.

The outdoor locations are great (lots of texture), and while the negative space may be a little extreme, that’s your artistic choice ( Venitia Scott sure likes it, too).  They could use a little more of the drama like in the studio ones, though, to make them stand out.

So I’d say, just keeping going with more like those!
Jan 18 13 09:15 am  Link  Quote 
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karenjerzykphotography
Posts: 1,752
Boston, Massachusetts, US


Geez, I wouldn't call myself a novice, if I were you. Talk about being humble. Honestly, your work is better than most I've seen.

My favorites:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29393833 (I'd like to see an edit without the bluring on the bottom. The whole "bluring a part and/or shit-ton of the photo" fad irritates me, for some reason. I think it'd be just as awesome without it).

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31197659

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29393813

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31197655 (once again, fuck the blur)

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30927248

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28168160

These are definitely your strongest photos, and in my personal pinion, would be a great benefit to you to keep going in that exact direction. The other photos in your port- eh, I'd get rid of them as soon as I had content comparable or greater than the photos I just listed. If you could get like, 20 photos on the same calibur as those, you'd be GOLDEN.
Jan 18 13 02:14 pm  Link  Quote 
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RachelReilly
Posts: 1,699
Washington, District of Columbia, US


I agree with everything Karen said your avatar is ahhhmazing but lose the blur.
Your work
Is better/ more interesting than most.
And you've gotten your hands on some really great models.. I'm jealous!
Jan 18 13 02:23 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


Aaron Lewis Photography wrote:
First opinion, you have some unique stuff. I think you have a creative eye. It looks like to have a basic control of light. One thing I'm not fond of is your use of negative space and cropping.

There are a few images that have a LOT of negative space, which sometimes is fine, but the way they're cropped just doesn't to it for me.

Thank you! i will definitely be more consciously thinking about negative space next time big_smile

Jan 18 13 07:15 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


Tim Roper wrote:
I love the avatar and the other one like it, plus the pink hair tulle skirt one.  They have so much drama and feeling.    Some of the others look like you were going for the same thing, but it didn’t work as well, maybe due in part to the model.

The outdoor locations are great (lots of texture), and while the negative space may be a little extreme, that’s your artistic choice ( Venitia Scott sure likes it, too).  They could use a little more of the drama like in the studio ones, though, to make them stand out.

So I’d say, just keeping going with more like those!

Thanks for your insight smile will work on creating more drama with on-location work

Jan 18 13 07:18 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Bunny 007
Posts: 274
Cheltenham, England, United Kingdom


For me, the "negative space" does work - and works pretty well - if the images are viewed against a black background.
Jan 18 13 07:22 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


karenjerzykphotography wrote:
Geez, I wouldn't call myself a novice, if I were you. Talk about being humble. Honestly, your work is better than most I've seen.

My favorites:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29393833 (I'd like to see an edit without the bluring on the bottom. The whole "bluring a part and/or shit-ton of the photo" fad irritates me, for some reason. I think it'd be just as awesome without it).

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31197659

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29393813

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31197655 (once again, fuck the blur)

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30927248

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/28168160

These are definitely your strongest photos, and in my personal pinion, would be a great benefit to you to keep going in that exact direction. The other photos in your port- eh, I'd get rid of them as soon as I had content comparable or greater than the photos I just listed. If you could get like, 20 photos on the same calibur as those, you'd be GOLDEN.

ahhh Karen, it means a lot to me to hear this from you, because i've wanted to model for you for so long... haaa thank you!

i'll keep the blur craziness in mind! and will definitely be adding new things to my port soon :>

Jan 18 13 07:24 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


Rachel Reilly wrote:
I agree with everything Karen said your avatar is ahhhmazing but lose the blur.
Your work
Is better/ more interesting than most.
And you've gotten your hands on some really great models.. I'm jealous!

thank you!
i am lucky in the model dept.

Jan 18 13 07:25 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


Bunny 007 wrote:
For me, the "negative space" does work - and works pretty well - if the images are viewed against a black background.

Thank you for your feedback :>

Jan 18 13 07:26 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Aaron Lewis Photography
Posts: 5,078
Catskill, New York, US


Foto Fawx wrote:
Thank you! i will definitely be more consciously thinking about negative space next time big_smile

I like negative space but it's about the positioning of the llama / subject in that space.

Jan 18 13 08:21 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


Aaron Lewis Photography wrote:

I like negative space but it's about the positioning of the model / subject in that space.

hmmm can i bug you for a specific example of what works/doesn't work for ya? *bugs*

Jan 19 13 01:29 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Marin Photography NYC
Posts: 6,623
New York, New York, US


Very creative! The cropping, well you heard all that already....I like what I see though. I don't get it but it looks like fucking fun to me!
Jan 19 13 01:41 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
RachelReilly
Posts: 1,699
Washington, District of Columbia, US


Foto Fawx wrote:

hmmm can i bug you for a specific example of what works/doesn't work for ya? *bugs*

Maybe be means model is to center in the frame

Jan 19 13 10:56 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
jesse paulk
Posts: 3,712
Phoenix, Arizona, US


phenomenal start.
Jan 19 13 11:35 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Jeffrey M Fletcher
Posts: 4,316
Asheville, North Carolina, US


Exceptional and vital work. There are some odd crops, extreme blurs, unusual color choices and off kilter compositions, all of which would be mistakes in lesser hands. In your work they all add to an exciting sense of immediacy and experimentation.

Just really impressive.
Jan 20 13 05:43 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Rebel Photo
Posts: 11,446
Florence, South Carolina, US


I like what you are doing, but I think it would be better if you prevent models from getting too close to the background.

It's a common problem. 5' is minimum distance. Why? Because shadows don't add anything and are distracting from one of your main goals, ...proper lighting.
Jan 20 13 06:01 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


Marin Photography wrote:
Very creative! The cropping, well you heard all that already....I like what I see though. I don't get it but it looks like fucking fun to me!

lol, thanks! taking the photos was a lot of fun for me ;P
the cropping!!!!

Jan 20 13 05:06 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


Rachel Reilly wrote:

Maybe be means model is to center in the frame

ohh perhaps that's it

Jan 20 13 05:07 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


jesse paulk wrote:
phenomenal start.

Thanks very much!

Jan 20 13 05:07 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


Jeffrey M Fletcher wrote:
Exceptional and vital work. There are some odd crops, extreme blurs, unusual color choices and off kilter compositions, all of which would be mistakes in lesser hands. In your work they all add to an exciting sense of immediacy and experimentation.

Just really impressive.

*cries* Thank you for your nice words! I am definitely experimenting and will be working to make better things come to fruition.
Btw, your work is really fun an different.. I love!

Jan 20 13 05:10 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Foto Fawx
Posts: 12
Allentown, Pennsylvania, US


Rebel Photo wrote:
I like what you are doing, but I think it would be better if you prevent models from getting too close to the background.

It's a common problem. 5' is minimum distance. Why? Because shadows don't add anything and are distracting from one of your main goals, ...proper lighting.

Mmm thank you mucho! :]
It is a problem for me sometimes with my setup, since I can rarely get time in a real studio. Most of what I've done so far is in a 12x14 room full of furniture XD, so it's a pretty fun challenge to see what i can get in that space (which is mostly super close portraits).
But yes, i certainly understand that moving models away from the background gets rid of those pesky shadows.

Jan 20 13 05:17 pm  Link  Quote 
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