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Model
Louis Kline
Posts: 22
EAST ELMHURST, New York, US


Last weekend I did my very first photoshoot.
It was something very casual in New York City. I just wanna know what you guys think of the pictures taken. I was a bit tired since I didn't get any sleep. This was more for experience than anything else.
Here are the links
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31321910

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31321992
Jan 18 13 11:48 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
robert b mitchell
Posts: 1,315
Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada


They are lifeless. They lack any emotion/expression. Some even look like mug shots for s police file. Study some of the better male models and how they present themselves. You learn by studying and Good Luck!
Jan 18 13 12:00 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Louis Kline
Posts: 22
EAST ELMHURST, New York, US


robert b mitchell wrote:
They are lifeless. They lack any emotion/expression. Some even look like mug shots for s police file. Study some of the better male models and how they present themselves. You learn by studying and Good Luck!

Thank you so much for the criticism! I will start studying other models and their facial experssions smile

Jan 18 13 02:33 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Lee_Photography
Posts: 8,549
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130116/20/50f782e483b23_m.jpg
Of the two this is the better one
Why so much space above his head, you could crop some of that off
With short hair generally best to show just one ear, simply rotate models head till only one ear is seen for the most part
Try shooting with a less distracting background
[Aim camera so there is no blown out sky, or the yellow light]
Jan 18 13 03:27 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Louis Kline
Posts: 22
EAST ELMHURST, New York, US


Lee_Photography wrote:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130116/20/50f782e483b23_m.jpg
Of the two this is the better one
Why so much space above his head, you could crop some of that off
With short hair generally best to show just one ear, simply rotate models head till only one ear is seen for the most part
Try shooting with a less distracting background
[Aim camera so there is no blown out sky, or the yellow light]

I think your thinking that I'm the photographer...but I am not. I am the model in the pictures. As he emailed  the picture I did crop out the top.

Jan 18 13 05:19 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
E e v a
Posts: 1,724
Nashville, Tennessee, US


Since the expression thing has already been addressed, I will point out two things below.

One. When you get another shoot down, lose this image and pose:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/13 … 4871b0.jpg

Why? (and I mean this only about your pose)
http://3.bp.blogspot.com/_yjQ7ZI-X7VI/S8_-zOQB_sI/AAAAAAAAAa0/-E7KTN4ISZM/s1600/little-monkey-is-simply-confused.jpg

It will remind people way too much of this. Make your poses more relaxed and more simple. Study poses. If you don't know what to do with your arms, leave them down, or do something with your wardrobe. There's so many ideas, that you don't need the monkey scratching head pose.

Two. If you were the one who brought your wardrobe, don't think wardrobe like what you'd wear in high school. Keep it simple and showcase you, and don't oversize your clothes. Male models can get away with just jeans and teeshirt, or jeans and button ups. Don't over complicate everything when you're starting out.

With that said, I wish you well, and hope to see more shoots.
Jan 18 13 05:41 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Louis Kline
Posts: 22
EAST ELMHURST, New York, US


Samantha Emme wrote:
Since the expression thing has already been addressed, I will point out two things below.

One. When you get another shoot down, lose this image and pose:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/13 … 4871b0.jpg

Why? (and I mean this only about your pose)
http://3.bp.blogspot.com/_yjQ7ZI-X7VI/S8_-zOQB_sI/AAAAAAAAAa0/-E7KTN4ISZM/s1600/little-monkey-is-simply-confused.jpg

It will remind people way too much of this. Make your poses more relaxed and more simple. Study poses. If you don't know what to do with your arms, leave them down, or do something with your wardrobe. There's so many ideas, that you don't need the monkey scratching head pose.

Two. If you were the one who brought your wardrobe, don't think wardrobe like what you'd wear in high school. Keep it simple and showcase you, and don't oversize your clothes. Male models can get away with just jeans and teeshirt, or jeans and button ups. Don't over complicate everything when you're starting out.

With that said, I wish you well, and hope to see more shoots.

I didn't really like that picture at all to begin with. Like I said this was my first shoot so I wasn't really sure on what to do or what to wear. I've definately gained a lot of experience already for my next shoot so thank you so much for the advice.

Jan 18 13 06:22 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
E e v a
Posts: 1,724
Nashville, Tennessee, US


Louie Kline wrote:
I didn't really like that picture at all to begin with. Like I said this was my first shoot so I wasn't really sure on what to do or what to wear. I've definately gained a lot of experience already for my next shoot so thank you so much for the advice.

Well that's silly. If you didn't like the photo then why have it in there? Sell them what you think is best.

As for the outfit its understandable. You will learn which things go with the camera with time.

Jan 18 13 06:28 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Louis Kline
Posts: 22
EAST ELMHURST, New York, US


Samantha Emme wrote:
Well that's silly. If you didn't like the photo then why have it in there? Sell them what you think is best.

As for the outfit its understandable. You will learn which things go with the camera with time.

I put that one up because I wanted to have a full body one. should I delete it and put this one up?
http://i45.tinypic.com/1znscgx.jpg

Jan 18 13 06:39 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
E e v a
Posts: 1,724
Nashville, Tennessee, US


Louie Kline wrote:
I put that one up because I wanted to have a full body one. should I delete it and put this one up?
http://i45.tinypic.com/1znscgx.jpg]

Yes for now. That one is better.

Jan 18 13 06:41 pm  Link  Quote 
Artist/Painter
Bob Elliott Artist
Posts: 29
Rockville Centre, New York, US


Louie Kline wrote:

I put that one up because I wanted to have a full body one. should I delete it and put this one up?
http://i45.tinypic.com/1znscgx.jpg

This one is better, but I find the manhole cover very distracting.  I really like the background, but the manhole cover becomes a dominant element in the image, which does not help.

Jan 18 13 06:56 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Louis Kline
Posts: 22
EAST ELMHURST, New York, US


Bob Elliott Artist wrote:

This one is better, but I find the manhole cover very distracting.  I really like the background, but the manhole cover becomes a dominant element in the image, which does not help.

hahaaa you do have a point.

Jan 18 13 07:23 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Peach Jones
Posts: 6,225
Champaign, Illinois, US


robert b mitchell wrote:
They are lifeless. They lack any emotion/expression. Some even look like mug shots for s police file. Study some of the better male models and how they present themselves. You learn by studying and Good Luck!

+1

Jan 21 13 08:40 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
M Pandolfo Photography
Posts: 12,116
Tampa, Florida, US


Often very little comes from a first shoot for a model (unless you're a female wearing a thong, in which case it will be a beloved image for years to come) but, for you, the images are invaluable for you to critique.

There's something about looking at the images and saying, "what the hell was I doing?" or "why did I pose like that?" that you'll store away to form how you should do it the next time.

I don't want to comment on the photographs themselves, but I will say the lighting isn't helping and all the factors combined (location, poses, wardrobe, lighting) make these look like simple snapshots.

Be thoughtful of how the final image will look BEFORE you pose. Imagine yourself looking at the final image...and adjust accordingly. Scratching your head...not a good pose.

I'm guessing all the things you didn't think about prior and during that first shoot will be things you'll improve vastly for that next shoot.
Jan 21 13 08:55 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
M Pandolfo Photography
Posts: 12,116
Tampa, Florida, US


The other thing I'll mention is that your pose on the manhole cover looks like you're posing for a Polaroid. Which is fine but that would be done against a blank wall, usually indoors.

The fact that you're at a location really emphasizes the awkwardness of the pose.
Jan 21 13 08:57 am  Link  Quote 
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