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Film/TV Producer
AM Music Videos
Posts: 17
Easton, Pennsylvania, US


If anyone wants to comment on my portfolio or offer me advice, I would be so grateful! I'm not pursuing a commercial photography career. My photography is mainly shown in a gallery setting. Feel free to be honest. I'm not overly sensitive. smile
Jan 20 13 08:59 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Veit Photo
Posts: 667
London, England, United Kingdom


It's an interesting series but very uneven and while this technique could be used to say interesting things, it can also be used to mash together meaningless images to make a meaningless composite.
I think it depends on the component photographs. If these are uninspired and just feature models looking around the room without direction then the finished product doesn't do anything for me. If they play out different roles then the image becomes about something.

This is image getting there - I think because the styling works (the dress pattern does interesting things when blended) and the model is doing something interesting - her pose and expression of anxiety work together:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121030/16/50906479ca06c_m.jpg

This one is quite boring - this guy does nothing for me. Except it's clear he has a bit of an attitude on about being asked to pose:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130110/17/50ef71ca8cd24_m.jpg

This one is interesting as a texture. The eyes want to unravel what it is:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121025/16/5089c978a0920_m.jpg

I like the way the composition is starting to go into a cubist area here, although would be so much better if the model was a bit more intense:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130110/17/50ef7144419a0_m.jpg

Another bored guy:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130110/17/50ef719eceb44_m.jpg

Well executed but throwaway - it doesn't really say anything. But you could explore this idea more, different scenarios, different people:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130110/17/50ef70b92adde_m.jpg


If the model didn't run off the screen on the right it would help to frame her. But she isn't doing anything really worth exploring:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130110/17/50ef718641af1_m.jpg

This one is simple and clean and grabs the eye as a strong composition so at least it succeeds on a graphic front but it still needs to have something to say:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130110/17/50ef71153cf10_m.jpg

More of the same. The first thing I think of is: Photoshop blending modes. After that I want to think 'but look how cleverly they are being used to make a subtle message'. But I don't think this - although you could certainly develop it.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130110/17/50ef70298b341_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130110/17/50ef6ff21908d_m.jpg

So in summary: collage is worth pursuing, but it needs to really say something. Without that you are showing some fairly bland images composited using a fairly obvious technique.
Jan 21 13 03:19 am  Link  Quote 
Film/TV Producer
AM Music Videos
Posts: 17
Easton, Pennsylvania, US


Hi, Greg!

Thank you for taking the time to write such an in-depth critique! I'm going to consider your advice as I move forward with new photos. I think you make a good point about the expressions of the models. Maybe they need to be more engaging.

Thanks again!

I would love some more feedback from others. smile

Adam
Jan 21 13 08:00 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
GER Photography
Posts: 7,496
Imperial, California, US


Just because you can do a thing, does not mean that you should. Do you have any shots that haven't been run through a blender?
Jan 21 13 08:09 am  Link  Quote 
Film/TV Producer
AM Music Videos
Posts: 17
Easton, Pennsylvania, US


I went to fish them out, but accidentally hit frappe.
Jan 21 13 08:45 am  Link  Quote 
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