TOO many images between your profile and your credits. You actually have a good bit of relevant experience and a sizable reference list that's getting buried under contest badges and the like.
What genres are you looking to shoot when active? That should be closer to the top.
What do you consider viable TF?
If your hair color/style changes often, why not post a quick snap of your current look?
Had to scroll through big images and scan through that first very nonspecific paragraph before I got to any of the meaty details......who you want to shoot with your shoot policies etc. Your rates are nowhere to be found. Not even an "ask me about my rates"
I shouldn't have to dig for how to book you, especially if you are seeking paid jobs.
Other than a few odd capitalization/punctuation typos(which annoyed my inner proofreader), you keep it clean and fairly simple, which is positive for a newer photographer finding their feet.
BCADULTART wrote: While what I have on MM is not the photography I am known for. I Love to see your thougths on what I have posted on MM
Best,
Chuck
Hello Chuck!
Given that the BCADULTART project has little to do with your photojournalism work, why not list the credits for this specific project in the credits box? Gallery exhibitions, notable commissions, whatever.
It isn't really relevant what your "main" credits are when you are shooting non mainstream stuff for personal artistic purposes, particularly since the face that you are a long time working mainstream shooter is already covered in your bio.
Demeter Photography wrote: Would love any feedback. I think mine is in need of more.....
Personality wise, you come off as fun and pleasant to be around. However, don't get so distracted by being funny that you leave out the important bits.
JohnsPhotos wrote: I'll play, been wanting to do a re-write...
Way too many nonspecifics. If you are going to be that wordy, make that shit count (Diva Eroticus and R. Michael Walker both did a good job of this, and I said so when they posted earlier in the thread....check out their bios to see what I mean)
After reading all of it, I'm also not really sure who/what you shoot....other than NOT nudes.
Anneliese Yang wrote: I'd love to know it would good to edit things a bit.
Here's my edit:
I am a freelance model looking to shoot fashion, commercial and lifestyle. My style can varies from artistic to fashion, commercial and lifestyle. I love to shoot both in studio or outdoors.
I do travel throughout the Bay Area, but for trips to San Francisco or further I may require a small compensation for gas.
Message me if you would like to collaborate I am always thrilled to work with new talents.
When you message me, please be specific on details and shoot expectations. As a model I wish to give you my best in delivering a successful shoot.I'm a nice gal who loves to smile and laugh, and you will enjoy shooting with me.
I do travel around the bay area but trips to SF depending on the project I may require compensation for my gas. Lastly Thank you for stopping by and not all of my work is posted on MM, so feel free to send me a friend request on FB!l
-I am open for PAID & TRADE work.
TF is only available for publication/tear sheets or concepts that can benefit my port.
-NO NUDES, IMPLIED, OR LINGERIE
Although I do admire these concepts it's just not for me as of right now thank you for understanding.
I have no idea what you consider art (everyone's opinions and taste vary)so be more specific about the stuff you want to shoot/the direction you want your art to head.
I am a freelance model looking to shoot fashion, commercial and lifestyle. My style can varies from artistic to fashion, commercial and lifestyle. I love to shoot both in studio or outdoors.
I do travel throughout the Bay Area, but for trips to San Francisco or further I may require a small compensation for gas.
Message me if you would like to collaborate I am always thrilled to work with new talents.
When you message me, please be specific on details and shoot expectations. As a model I wish to give you my best in delivering a successful shoot.I'm a nice gal who loves to smile and laugh, and you will enjoy shooting with me.
I do travel around the bay area but trips to SF depending on the project I may require compensation for my gas. Lastly Thank you for stopping by and not all of my work is posted on MM, so feel free to send me a friend request on FB!l
-I am open for PAID & TRADE work.
TF is only available for publication/tear sheets or concepts that can benefit my port.
-NO NUDES, IMPLIED, OR LINGERIE
Although I do admire these concepts it's just not for me as of right now thank you for understanding.
THXS a bunch love love ur new photos btw sorry for spamming to much love hahaha
Jojo West
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Washington, District of Columbia, US
Paige Morgan wrote:
Big ass images should be at the bottom, IMHO. The smaller social media buttons are unobtrusive, so that's no worry.
The moving "welcome to my page" banner slows load time and adds no value.
It seems you shoot more than nudes, implieds and fetish, so listing the other genres you shoot/display in your port might help....never hurts to give folks more options to book you for.
IIRC, you have a driver/escort so you might want to clarify that point for the folks who have a stance on either side of the issue.
Also I'd reword this section a bit for clarity, as the way it's written is somewhat confusing:
If you're interested in shooting nudes, implied nudes or fetish, my rates are very reasonable, I don't do TF nude work unless it is agreed upon at some point or I respond to your casting call. You can also make me an offer and we can go from there. Willing to do TF work if it will benefit my portfolio. TF work with full team will take priority.
Perhaps this instead?
"Reasonable rates for nudes, implieds and fetish. Make me an offer and we can go from there. Open to select beneficial TF, with full teams taking priority.
In the specific case of nudes, I'll do TF nude work if we've previously agreed upon it, or if I answer your casting call for a TF nude project"
Thanks hun. I got rid of my "driver" section. Too many people don't bother reading it and assume he's an escort.
Paige Morgan wrote: You have good work, but based solely on your profile text, I'd skip you. It's hard to read, full of fragments, run ons, and a complete lack of paragraphs. Just all the way around a pain in the ass to find the relevant details in.
Try this:
I am a passionate well educated hair stylist/make-up artist. ~Sentence mentioning any specific schools/training/certifications you many have~. I am a licensed cosmetologist in both Missouri and Illinois, and currently manage ~name of salon~ in Collinsville.
I can create everything from vintage styles to current trends, and am on MM to find projects to enhance my creativity, and further my career as a freelancer.
I'm skilled in airbrush application, which often reduces the retouching needed, and don't mind pitching in to help with whatever the production requires. From coffee runs to holding reflectors, I'm a big believer in using teamwork to make each shoot run as smoothly as possible.
If requesting TFP, please be advised I prefer to do both make up and hair, so the resulting image will be of maximum benefit to my portfolio.
Thank you for the help writing is not my strongest ability
Hello! My name is Heaven and I'm a young model hoping to use this site to gain some experience and expand my portfolio.~insert list of genres you are looking to shoot, as that isn't clear~ I am generally very friendly and fun to work with. I'm not shy and I'm a little crazy...I'm not afraid of doing something absolutely stupid to get a great picture out of it.
I do not shoot nudes swimwear or lingerie.I also tend to change my hair often and drastically. So if you'd like a current picture, message me and I'll get one to you.
If you like my look and would like to work with me, or even if you just want to throw around some ideas, feel free to message me! (: Thanks!
I'm totally cool with modeling swimwear, just modest swimwear. But thanks for your time and advice (:
Here you go:
I've spend years shooting landscapes and nature,as I am an avid outdoors men (hiking, fishing, camping, etc. )
My goal is to learn to work with people better as there isn't much to direct with landscapes, and one is at the mercy of Mother Nature. Advice/criticism is welcome, as are any shoot ideas you may have.
Noted, and changed. Thank you very much. I guess I came from the school of more is better... but I like you version better.
I read through all of it having no clue what genres you shoot, what projects you'll TF for, nor what your rates are.
Additionally, lots of NO I won't shoot, but no YES I will shoot....limits aren't a problem, but leaving a reader with little clue what you do shoot is.
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