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Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


If you're interested in ways i think you could improve, or what you are consistent with, just post in here.

Anyone is welcome, photographers, models, mua's, hairstylists, retouchers... and so on.

just remember that this is my opinion only. and i will probably nitpick your portfolio and profile.
Jan 27 13 08:53 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Me please! I want to try to get more of a fresh start this year! Thank you!
Jan 27 13 09:13 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
I Ference Photography
Posts: 1,152
Rochester, New York, US


Please, nitpick away!
Jan 27 13 09:20 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


Lela Jesse wrote:
Me please! I want to try to get more of a fresh start this year! Thank you!

Profile:
"I recently moved to Arcata, CA and I'm looking to start modeling as soon as possible. "
It's clear where you live.. you have your current city marked.. so this sentence is redudnant.

Portfolio:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121216/19/50ce8ae6a49ac_m.jpg
lighting on this shot is crappy. i get the whole combining images thing.. but only when it's done right.. this is not done right. the center image gives you terrible shadows on your face. and the right image is blown out, and the left gives you a shiny chin.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120508/20/4fa9e57c611f7_m.jpg
The pose in this photo is too distorted. it comes off as an attempt at fashion. try working with a fashion photographer who wont shoot at such a crap angle. and a photographer who edits out the red knees. fashion is also about the facial expressions and eyes. in this your eyes are closed.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130103/12/50e5e42684313_m.jpg
i've never been a fan of the whole keeping one or two colors out while muting the rest..


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/101227/14/4d19155c880ca_m.jpg
I would make this your avatar. your current one doesnt draw me in to want to check your portfolio.


Overall:

I think you are beautiful! you have a very european look. i would work with photographers who dont crop out your arms, top of your head.. and so on.

i would also like to see a well done headshot of you with minimual makeup (beauty shot) and a full length shot that doesnt make your body and legs look weird. you could definitely be working with better photographers. i know lots of photographers who would love to have you behind the camera!

Jan 27 13 09:52 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


I Ference Photography wrote:
Please, nitpick away!

i will get to you tomorrow.. because i know your work and i'm going to have to spend a decent amount of time looking for things to be wrong.

Jan 27 13 09:55 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Lorayne York wrote:

Profile:
"I recently moved to Arcata, CA and I'm looking to start modeling as soon as possible. "
It's clear where you live.. you have your current city marked.. so this sentence is redudnant.

Portfolio:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/121216/19/50ce8ae6a49ac_m.jpg
lighting on this shot is crappy. i get the whole combining images thing.. but only when it's done right.. this is not done right. the center image gives you terrible shadows on your face. and the right image is blown out, and the left gives you a shiny chin.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120508/20/4fa9e57c611f7_m.jpg
The pose in this photo is too distorted. it comes off as an attempt at fashion. try working with a fashion photographer who wont shoot at such a crap angle. and a photographer who edits out the red knees. fashion is also about the facial expressions and eyes. in this your eyes are closed.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130103/12/50e5e42684313_m.jpg
i've never been a fan of the whole keeping one or two colors out while muting the rest..


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/101227/14/4d19155c880ca_m.jpg
I would make this your avatar. your current one doesnt draw me in to want to check your portfolio.


Overall:

I think you are beautiful! you have a very european look. i would work with photographers who dont crop out your arms, top of your head.. and so on.

i would also like to see a well done headshot of you with minimual makeup (beauty shot) and a full length shot that doesnt make your body and legs look weird. you could definitely be working with better photographers. i know lots of photographers who would love to have you behind the camera!

Thank you very much for your critique!
Actually though, that first one was shot with film, as one image, so there wasn't any picking of images, to go through. It was an all for one effect. But I do understand what you are saying about it. 
Once again, Thank you very much!

Jan 27 13 09:58 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
NicoleNudes
Posts: 3,784
Toronto, Ontario, Canada


Please do big_smile
Jan 27 13 10:50 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
_Nay
Posts: 1
Hurst, Texas, US


Me please!
Jan 27 13 11:05 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Stefy Ray
Posts: 6
Saint Louis, Missouri, US


I could use a good once over....give it to me:) Please. and Thank you in advance for your time and consideration.
Stefy
Jan 27 13 11:17 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
SEALLEN
Posts: 14
Billings, Montana, US


I'd love to hear your opinion if possible!
Jan 28 13 12:27 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Dakota Burden
Posts: 126
Nanaimo, British Columbia, Canada


Me please!
Jan 28 13 01:00 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
The Dark Side
Posts: 308
Salt Lake City, Utah, US


Please tell me...
Jan 28 13 07:26 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Trey Fleming
Posts: 1,470
Las Vegas, Nevada, US


is this for guys to?
Jan 28 13 07:46 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Joseph William
Posts: 1,927
Chicago, Illinois, US


Have we been through this before?  If not I would love to hear what you have to say.
Jan 28 13 05:45 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
zssphotography
Posts: 56
UPPER DARBY, Pennsylvania, US


me please itd be greatly appreciated
Jan 28 13 07:41 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Ceci L
Posts: 235
Villena, Valencia, Spain


Me smile
Jan 29 13 08:07 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Ania Volovique
Posts: 19
Paris, Île-de-France, France


Just added pics from a recent shoot, would love to get feedback
Jan 29 13 08:21 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Curtis M LeBlanc
Posts: 64
San Antonio, Texas, US


I'm game.
Jan 29 13 08:24 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
I Ference Photography
Posts: 1,152
Rochester, New York, US


Lorayne York wrote:

i will get to you tomorrow.. because i know your work and i'm going to have to spend a decent amount of time looking for things to be wrong.

Well then, I'm excited to see what you come up with!  wink

Jan 30 13 10:29 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fotografica Gregor
Posts: 4,065
Alexandria, Virginia, US


Tell me what you think about my shizz...  and thank you
Jan 30 13 10:32 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
M i t c h T a r r
Posts: 179
Lake Havasu City, Arizona, US


I'm interested in feedback on studio black and whites.  Thx
Jan 30 13 10:36 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Jordan Nicola
Posts: 1
Peterhead, Scotland, United Kingdom


I would love to know what others think! I am just starting out as a model and I know I need a lot more practice and with what I don't know! Help!!
Jan 31 13 05:42 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
C J Wright
Posts: 34
Los Angeles, California, US


go for it
Jan 31 13 05:46 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Henry Westheim
Posts: 564
Taichung City, Taichung City, Taiwan


Yes, please.
Jan 31 13 05:48 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
MCP Photography
Posts: 343
Frederick, Maryland, US


Please......
Jan 31 13 03:42 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Decay of Memory
Posts: 571
Asheville, North Carolina, US


Surely, thank you.
Jan 31 13 04:50 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Kelly Ann Carter
Posts: 93
Hollywood, Florida, US


Me
Jan 31 13 06:33 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


I Ference Photography wrote:
Please, nitpick away!

Soooo i have spent almost an entire day looking at your photos.. then taking a break and going back to see if i could find something.. needless to say i only found one image i didnt like.

this: http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 6695_m.jpg
18+
i think it's only because i've never been a fan of the shadows thing.. it's similiar to the light coming through blinds to me.. if that makes sense.

i also noticed you have a lot of images with the use of old chairs. whether it wheelchairs/rocking chairs/school chairs.. 10 out of 29 photos have a chair.. not including a sofa.

however your locations are amazing. i would love to shoot in any of them. i enjoyed reading the locations.. cause i dont think we have any abandoned schools around here sad

love the colors you have in your portfolio and the uniqueness about your images as well... wish i could be more critical.. but that's all i got damnit. smile

Jan 31 13 10:32 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lorayne York
Posts: 2,117
Manhattan, Kansas, US


NicoleNudes wrote:
Please do big_smile

like your profile.. its short and to the point.

your portfolio...

here are my least favorite images:

All images 18+

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 91b4_m.jpg
I dont like the blurriness of this photo and the fact that your stomach is blown out. you also have the same shoes in another photo, which in my opinion is better.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … c1b8_m.jpg
this photo is too blown out for me.. and with the shadow of the shape of your boob on your other boob.. it's too distracting.  but i understand that it is a nice figure photo.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/11 … 0404_m.jpg
I think to make this photo better.. a thicker rope shouldve been used.. it wouldve made your facial expression that much better.. cause as it is right now.. it looks like youre chewing on a necklace.

my two favorite:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 0d34_m.jpg
LOVE your face in this.. soo beautiful. and i like that you can see your tattoo on your neck. your hair looks amazing too... i just love it. i wish i had this in my portfolio.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 5cf1_m.jpg
i love this for the arch in your back.. and yet you still look comfortable.. though im sure it mustve hurt. you just look so relaxed and your wet hair is perfect.. love it.

i enjoy looking through your portfolio. you lucky curvy lady, i am so jealous that i dont have the curves you do. sad i would love to see you do more nature nudes. i think you have the perfect body to do that.

Jan 31 13 10:47 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
I Ference Photography
Posts: 1,152
Rochester, New York, US


Lorayne York wrote:

Soooo i have spent almost an entire day looking at your photos.. then taking a break and going back to see if i could find something.. needless to say i only found one image i didnt like.

this: http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/12 … 6695_m.jpg
18+
i think it's only because i've never been a fan of the shadows thing.. it's similiar to the light coming through blinds to me.. if that makes sense.

i also noticed you have a lot of images with the use of old chairs. whether it wheelchairs/rocking chairs/school chairs.. 10 out of 29 photos have a chair.. not including a sofa.

however your locations are amazing. i would love to shoot in any of them. i enjoyed reading the locations.. cause i dont think we have any abandoned schools around here sad

love the colors you have in your portfolio and the uniqueness about your images as well... wish i could be more critical.. but that's all i got damnit. smile

Well thank you kindly for your time; the critique is appreciated!  I'll take another look at that image in the context of the overall body of work I'm showing.

If you are ever in the area and would like to shoot, I'd love to work with you - your enthusiasm for my decrepit old buildings would show in every shot!  But be forewarned - I'll probably ask you to sit in a chair or two, as they are often among the only artifacts left behind in abandoned insane asylums.  wink

Feb 01 13 10:02 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Kerri Jean Photography
Posts: 588
Indianapolis, Indiana, US


I would enjoy a good critique.  Nitpicking usually leads to some great feedback.
Feb 01 13 10:52 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
C J Wright
Posts: 34
Los Angeles, California, US


I'd love to hear what you think
Feb 02 13 01:42 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Images by MR
Posts: 7,461
Vancouver, British Columbia, Canada


Yes plz..
Feb 02 13 01:49 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
BCADULTART
Posts: 1,986
Acton, Massachusetts, US


Love to hear your thoughts.  All 18+ images.
Feb 02 13 01:54 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Maria Panina
Posts: 139
New York, New York, US


I'm always in for improvements. Let me know what you think.
Feb 02 13 01:58 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Zman-Photog
Posts: 19
Missouri City, Texas, US


I could use improvement - welcome your feedback
Feb 02 13 06:15 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
David Kirk
Posts: 4,398
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


I'd like some feedback!
Feb 02 13 06:22 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Project4145
Posts: 338
Phoenix, Arizona, US


Love to hear your opinion.
Feb 02 13 06:22 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fox and Owl Studio
Posts: 7
Asheville, North Carolina, US


I would love your critique! Thanks.
Feb 03 13 01:02 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Leone P
Posts: 515
Batley, England, United Kingdom


Lorayne York wrote:
If you're interested in ways i think you could improve, or what you are consistent with, just post in here.

Anyone is welcome, photographers, models, mua's, hairstylists, retouchers... and so on.

just remember that this is my opinion only. and i will probably nitpick your portfolio and profile.

I would love your opinion. Sock it to me. smile

Feb 03 13 01:10 pm  Link  Quote 
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