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Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Is there anything off-putting in there? Or any red flags that come up when reading it?
I'm open to other critiques as well.
In return, I'll answer any question about your port that you would like!
Thank you!
Feb 01 13 10:18 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Anyone?
Feb 01 13 10:49 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Orca Bay Images
Posts: 32,233
Lodi, California, US


IMO, it's got a very gentle, rational, professional tone and isn't offputting in any way.

I think that model would be fun and pleasant to work with.
Feb 01 13 11:21 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Orca Bay Images wrote:
IMO, it's got a very gentle, rational, professional tone and isn't offputting in any way.

I think that model would be fun and pleasant to work with.

Thank you very much! That's good to know.

Feb 01 13 11:23 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Lee_Photography
Posts: 8,519
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


[[[As Written]]]
My name is Lela Jesse. I mainly am here to have fun and love the creative process of photoshoots. I have been llamaing for almost 4 years, and have no intention of stopping any time soon!

       I recently cut my hair! It is in a chin length, choppy bob. I'd love to get some new work up with it!
        I have no tattoos, nor piercings.
        I wear glasses, every day, all day, as I am pretty much blind without them. For this reason, I like to bring someone to assist me in moving around on set without them.
        I want to expand my portfolio and try some new things. I am open to doing TF and would love to hear the ideas of photographers.
        I like to talk, and love to get to know the people I'm working with, I feel like it will help me to get a better photograph the photographer can use.

If you have a no "llama herder" policy, I would like to meet with you before the shoot, as I normally bring an assistant to help me. It will help me feel more comfortable with you, which always makes for a better picture on my part!

I would really like to do some more beauty work, as well as more full body shots. I am pretty open to different shoot concepts, and would love to hear any ideas!


[[[Suggestions]]]
{Less I this, I that’s’}
Mainly here because I enjoy and love the creative process that is part of every photo shoot. llamaing for almost four years, and have no intention of stopping any time soon!

Recently cut my hair! It is chin length, choppy bob, would love to get some new work up with it!
No tattoos or piercings.
Glasses are an every day part of my wardrobe, as I am pretty much blind without them. For this reason, I like to bring someone to assist me in moving around on set without them.
Looking to expand my portfolio and try some new things, open to doing TF and would love to hear your photographic ideas.
You will find I am a great at conservation and love to get to know the people I'm working with, I feel like it will help me to get a better photograph the photographer can use.

If you have a no "llama herder" policy, then let’s meet before the shoot, as I normally bring an assistant to help me. It will help me feel more comfortable with you, which always makes for a better picture on my part!

Would really like to do some more beauty work, as well as more full body shots, pretty open to different shoot concepts, and would love to hear any ideas!
Feb 02 13 05:48 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Carmilla Jo
Posts: 276
Berkeley, California, US


First of all, I think you are very beautiful. You're youthful without being overly cutesy. I just have a thing for fair-skinned brunettes.

Just one suggestion:

"I want to expand my portfolio and try some new things."

"New things" is a very ambiguous way of wording. Why don't you write a list of concepts you want to try?



Overall, you come across as straightforward and professional. smile

Let me know if there's anything that can be critiqued about my profile and/or photos.
Feb 02 13 11:20 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Lee_Photography wrote:
[[[As Written]]]
My name is Lela Jesse. I mainly am here to have fun and love the creative process of photoshoots. I have been modeling for almost 4 years, and have no intention of stopping any time soon!

       I recently cut my hair! It is in a chin length, choppy bob. I'd love to get some new work up with it!
        I have no tattoos, nor piercings.
        I wear glasses, every day, all day, as I am pretty much blind without them. For this reason, I like to bring someone to assist me in moving around on set without them.
        I want to expand my portfolio and try some new things. I am open to doing TF and would love to hear the ideas of photographers.
        I like to talk, and love to get to know the people I'm working with, I feel like it will help me to get a better photograph the photographer can use.

If you have a no "escort" policy, I would like to meet with you before the shoot, as I normally bring an assistant to help me. It will help me feel more comfortable with you, which always makes for a better picture on my part!

I would really like to do some more beauty work, as well as more full body shots. I am pretty open to different shoot concepts, and would love to hear any ideas!


[[[Suggestions]]]
{Less I this, I that’s’}
Mainly here because I enjoy and love the creative process that is part of every photo shoot. Modeling for almost four years, and have no intention of stopping any time soon!

Recently cut my hair! It is chin length, choppy bob, would love to get some new work up with it!
No tattoos or piercings.
Glasses are an every day part of my wardrobe, as I am pretty much blind without them. For this reason, I like to bring someone to assist me in moving around on set without them.
Looking to expand my portfolio and try some new things, open to doing TF and would love to hear your photographic ideas.
You will find I am a great at conservation and love to get to know the people I'm working with, I feel like it will help me to get a better photograph the photographer can use.

If you have a no "escort" policy, then let’s meet before the shoot, as I normally bring an assistant to help me. It will help me feel more comfortable with you, which always makes for a better picture on my part!

Would really like to do some more beauty work, as well as more full body shots, pretty open to different shoot concepts, and would love to hear any ideas!

Thank you very much.

Feb 02 13 11:53 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Carmilla Jo wrote:
First of all, I think you are very beautiful. You're youthful without being overly cutesy. I just have a thing for fair-skinned brunettes.

Just one suggestion:

"I want to expand my portfolio and try some new things."

"New things" is a very ambiguous way of wording. Why don't you write a list of concepts you want to try?



Overall, you come across as straightforward and professional. smile

Let me know if there's anything that can be critiqued about my profile and/or photos.

Thank you! I'll add some concepts that I want to try to my port!

I like your port quite a bit! All of your pictures show something different about you, and how versatile you are. AS far as the wording on your port, it is okay. I would put your official portfolio as the link on the top of your page, and direct people  to your facebook in the body of your port instead. But other than that, I think it all works well. smile

Feb 02 13 11:59 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Supermodel Photographer
Posts: 3,309
Oyster Bay, New York, US


Lela Jesse wrote:
Is there anything off-putting in there? Or any red flags that come up when reading it?

I stopped reading after the first sentence, "My name is Lela Jesse.", as it is tediously redundant after your name already appears above it.

Feb 02 13 12:11 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Supermodel Photographer wrote:

I stopped reading after the first sentence, "My name is Lela Jesse.", as it is tediously redundant after your name already appears above it.

Ha, thanks I'll remove that.

Feb 02 13 12:12 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Raven-Lily
Posts: 77
Eastbourne, England, United Kingdom


you have written 'meet meet' near the top

you state your cup size as 'DDD' i didnt know there was a size triple D

always proofread, even have a friend do it if you miss anything
Feb 02 13 12:41 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Raven-Lily wrote:
you have written 'meet meet' near the top

you state your cup size as 'DDD' i didnt know there was a size triple D

always proofread, even have a friend do it if you miss anything

I'll fix the typo, but the cup size is in fact, correct. Try finding bras that size! It's a total pain!

Feb 02 13 03:12 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Raven-Lily
Posts: 77
Eastbourne, England, United Kingdom


Lela Jesse wrote:

I'll fix the typo, but the cup size is in fact, correct. Try finding bras that size! It's a total pain!

we dont even hold that cup size in England it simply goes DD then E nothing inbetween

Feb 02 13 03:46 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Raven-Lily wrote:

we dont even hold that cup size in England it simply goes DD then E nothing inbetween

Oh that makes sense. I was honestly surprised to see that it was real. I went in and got measured at a reputable bra store, and was shocked to find out my actual sizee. But US sizing, in my opinion is quite weird.

Feb 02 13 03:51 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Raven-Lily
Posts: 77
Eastbourne, England, United Kingdom


i dont think i will ever understand US sizing, why is it im a size 12 here but an 8 there... if it were universal across the globe would make life so much easier
Feb 02 13 03:54 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Raven-Lily wrote:
i dont think i will ever understand US sizing, why is it im a size 12 here but an 8 there... if it were universal across the globe would make life so much easier

I agree! maybe someday that will happen!

Feb 02 13 03:55 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Raven-Lily
Posts: 77
Eastbourne, England, United Kingdom


Lela Jesse wrote:

I agree! maybe someday that will happen!

oh please say it will smile

Feb 02 13 03:58 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
David Kirk
Posts: 4,423
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada


It is straight forward and not too wordy.

You confuse me with the issue of having an assistant/escort by stating in one paragraph that it is because you are very visually impaired without your glasses but then suggest that meeting the photographer in advance of the shoot would somehow solve this in another paragraph.
Feb 02 13 06:20 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
DavidCoward Photography
Posts: 629
Sandy Springs, Georgia, US


I think your profile comes across as sincere and genuine. It's a refreshing change from all the ones I see that come across as demanding and bitchy.

Also, I'm the type of guy who appreciates clear writing. Most 18-year-olds seem to think TXT SPK and rambling, broken sentences are professionally acceptable. But you write like you actually paid attention in school. So you've got THAT going for you. tongue

However, the OCD in me is puzzled by some of your random paragraph indentations. That's my only criticism. tongue

Your profile and portfolio lead me to believe you'd be a pleasure to work it.

Best of luck!
Feb 02 13 06:42 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
The Effective Image
Posts: 3,937
Lansing, Michigan, US


What I look for in a model's profile is what she can/will do for me and at what cost.

You profile doesn't address those issues directly. For instance, are you doing trade shoots or a combination of trade and paid? If paid, an indication of your compensation expectations (a range or specific rate) is helpful. Will you travel? How far? At what cost for expenses... gas money or 'cab fare' or?

Answer those two questions: What you can/will do and at what cost and you have made me happy. The info on your recent hair cut is useful as I'd probably assume your hair is what is shown in the images you posted.

Just my opinion.
Feb 02 13 07:42 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
DavidCoward Photography
Posts: 629
Sandy Springs, Georgia, US


The Effective Image wrote:
What I look for in a model's profile is what she can/will do for me and at what cost.

You profile doesn't address those issues directly. For instance, are you doing trade shoots or a combination of trade and paid? If paid, an indication of your compensation expectations (a range or specific rate) is helpful. Will you travel? How far? At what cost for expenses... gas money, or 'cab fare'?

Answer those two questions: What you can/will do and at what cost and you have made me happy. The info on your recent hair cut is useful as I'd probably assume your hair is what is shown in the images you posted.

Just my opinion.

Oh yeah, forgot to mention that. What I find helpful is when a model puts a current polaroid on her profile page so I know what her current look is.

Feb 02 13 07:45 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


David Kirk wrote:
It is straight forward and not too wordy.

You confuse me with the issue of having an assistant/escort by stating in one paragraph that it is because you are very visually impaired without your glasses but then suggest that meeting the photographer in advance of the shoot would somehow solve this in another paragraph.

I can see how that might be confusing. I just don't best know how to deal with those with no escort policies, and if someone really objects to me having my assistant with me, I would meet with them beforehand, and discuss how best to deal with it.

Feb 02 13 09:26 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


DavidCoward Photography wrote:
I think your profile comes across as sincere and genuine. It's a refreshing change from all the ones I see that come across as demanding and bitchy.

Also, I'm the type of guy who appreciates clear writing. Most 18-year-olds seem to think TXT SPK and rambling, broken sentences are professionally acceptable. But you write like you actually paid attention in school. So you've got THAT going for you. tongue

However, the OCD in me is puzzled by some of your random paragraph indentations. That's my only criticism. tongue

Your profile and portfolio lead me to believe you'd be a pleasure to work it.

Best of luck!

Thank you! i'll streamline my indentations to make them look a little better. smile
As well as link a current picture. smile

Feb 02 13 09:28 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


The Effective Image wrote:
What I look for in a model's profile is what she can/will do for me and at what cost.

You profile doesn't address those issues directly. For instance, are you doing trade shoots or a combination of trade and paid? If paid, an indication of your compensation expectations (a range or specific rate) is helpful. Will you travel? How far? At what cost for expenses... gas money or 'cab fare' or?

Answer those two questions: What you can/will do and at what cost and you have made me happy. The info on your recent hair cut is useful as I'd probably assume your hair is what is shown in the images you posted.

Just my opinion.

Thank you! I added in my rates, a well as some other info. I expect that a photographer would look to see the boxes I have clicked to see I don't shoot nudes or implied. I have not yet needed a travel fair, which is why I guess I didn't add it it. I'll need to think about how far I could go.
Thank you very much! This was very helpful!

Feb 02 13 09:34 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Cole Morrison
Posts: 3,958
Portland, Oregon, US


its pretty much to the point
Feb 02 13 09:41 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Lela Jesse
Posts: 1,148
Arcata, California, US


Cole Morrison wrote:
its pretty much to the point

Thank you. smile

Feb 02 13 10:04 pm  Link  Quote 
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