I think the first two replies nailed it; I agree with everything they said... the only thing I have to add is perhaps that the combination of the above issues led the first 8 images to run together for me. Very similar color palette and composition, and the prominent watermark made for almost a tile effect to my eyes. The images have their strengths technically as they said, I just feel that the presentation takes away from that and weakens them.
And the last four almost feel as though they belong to a different portfolio and are tacked on the end as an afterthought. It's made me realize that I need to focus more on my layout as well.
Hope that's helpful even if it is a little less technical of a reply.
Thank you. I just upgraded my account to premium a few days ago and haven't gotten around to adding more albums but I will be doing that shortly to separate the different styles. Also, the first two rows have similar tones and backgrounds because both models were at the shoot at the same time and it was shot simultaneously. Thanks for your opinion it is very appreciated!