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AshleyJames Photography
Posts: 38
Southampton, England, United Kingdom


Pleas let me know what you like / don't like like about my profile , photo's etc.

New to MM.

Thanks,

Ashley James Photography
Feb 11 13 06:30 am  Link  Quote 
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Lee_Photography
Posts: 8,740
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130208/05/511504023b1b9_m.jpg
The gem stones are not uniform side to side, models right eye they touch the eyebrow near bridge of nose, and do not on models left
Some kind of obvious Photoshoping on both sides of models lips, you can see the color difference
Mouth pose makes me think her nose is plugged up so she has to breathe through her mouth
Models left hand has a nice pose, but right appears to be clenched fist
Feb 11 13 04:19 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Acanthus Tattoos
Posts: 429
Union, New Jersey, US


Profile comments:

The main issue is specifics, and consider why you, why them.


The site link doesn't work yet, consider taking it off until it does, especially because you refer to it in the text too, even though you say check for updates, you expect to see something already when you click.

This profile content is very general.
"At Ashley James Photography we are focused on providing freelance photography services with the highest levels of customer satisfaction – we will do everything we can to meet your expectations."

Like what? It reads like "customer satisfaction is our highest priority"-not a quote from your profile.

With a variety of offerings to choose from, we’re sure you’ll be happy working with us.

This is a positive

"I have some experience shooting both outdoors and indoors and I am very willing to travel to locations with my studio equipment."

While maybe encouraging to newbies, this doesn't make anyone feel too special
"My main aim at this moment in time is to build up a portfolio by working with as many people as possible."
Feb 11 13 07:02 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
AshleyJames Photography
Posts: 38
Southampton, England, United Kingdom


Thanks guys will take all onboard
Feb 12 13 03:28 am  Link  Quote 
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