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M V Photography
Posts: 8
Parma, Ohio, US


Recently added some images to my portfolio I shot (young blonde girl) this past weekend. I am after some constructive criticism on what to improve or just general thoughts on composition, lighting, focus, etc.
Thanks
Mike
Feb 25 13 07:57 pm  Link  Quote 
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Lee_Photography
Posts: 8,410
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130224/18/512ac762d66f6_m.jpg
Did you notice the wrinkled backdrop?
Models legs [You are missing her feet due to pose]
Lack luster expression
Feb 25 13 08:29 pm  Link  Quote 
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Mark
Posts: 2,889
New York, New York, US


I would suggest lots of time looking at art books and the masters of painting to improve your esthetic level and to shoot less appealing subjects so you don't get swayed by their attractiveness.  Also I think sun light is the best way to start out

ATB
Feb 25 13 10:06 pm  Link  Quote 
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M V Photography
Posts: 8
Parma, Ohio, US


Lee_Photography wrote:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130224/18/512ac762d66f6_m.jpg
Did you notice the wrinkled backdrop?
Models legs [You are missing her feet due to pose]
Lack luster expression

Yes the backdrop wrinkles I did notice and have that in mind.
I did not think about her feet being hidden but that is a point I need to focus on is all the extremities being in view if it is a full shot.
Her expression is bland but I did not mind the relaxed expression.
Thanks for your input

Feb 26 13 05:31 am  Link  Quote 
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A-M-P
Posts: 17,919
Orlando, Florida, US


flat light
Awful background
cliche concept
model expression looks miserable
and why is she wearing a tutu and holding a guitar?
Feb 26 13 05:37 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
M V Photography
Posts: 8
Parma, Ohio, US


Mark wrote:
I would suggest lots of time looking at art books and the masters of painting to improve your esthetic level and to shoot less appealing subjects so you don't get swayed by their attractiveness.  Also I think sun light is the best way to start out

ATB

I imagine the root meaning of your reply is I am too focus on her face and hair.

I have been reading posing type books but they only cover basics . I plan to work outside once the weather warms up here in Ohio. Art is a very subjective topic and no two eyes view the same image as pleasant. I believe artistic talent comes with experience which I am working on obtaining. If you can recommend a particular book or reference I would love to check it out
Thanks for the reply

Feb 26 13 05:40 am  Link  Quote 
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RachelReilly
Posts: 1,699
Washington, District of Columbia, US


Agree with what was said above.
Looks extremely amateur!
Feb 26 13 05:42 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
M V Photography
Posts: 8
Parma, Ohio, US


A-M-P wrote:
flat light
Awful background
cliche concept
model expression looks miserable
and why is she wearing a tutu and holding a guitar?

Basically because she is 16 and thought it be fun and light hearted. What is your opinion of the dark headshot in my profile of this girl ?

Feb 26 13 05:44 am  Link  Quote 
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M V Photography
Posts: 8
Parma, Ohio, US


RachelReilly wrote:
Agree with what was said above.
Looks extremely amateur!

Like I mentioned I am an amateur. I want to improve. Helpful criticism would be explaining what you view as needing corrected. Obviously the background is a big problem.

Feb 26 13 05:48 am  Link  Quote 
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RachelReilly
Posts: 1,699
Washington, District of Columbia, US


In that photo the lighting is flat, her knees pointing at the camera looks bad(amputee), the sheet -NO, her expression is not good - she looks miserable, why is she holding a guitar and what's up w her outfit, why is the horizon line so off!?! And the watermark is distracting.. pick one that is not distracting and barely seen
Feb 26 13 05:50 am  Link  Quote 
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M V Photography
Posts: 8
Parma, Ohio, US


RachelReilly wrote:
In that photo the lighting is flat, her knees pointing at the camera looks bad(amputee), the sheet -NO, her expression is not good - she looks miserable, why is she holding a guitar and what's up w her outfit, why is the horizon line so off!?! And the watermark is distracting.. pick one that is not distracting and barely seen

I see your point about the knees . The concept wasn't meant to be serious. She is 16 and wanted to do this theme in her tutu. Does it make sense? No. Regardless I should have posed her legs better . Lighting being flat ? Meaning lack of definition? And slight shadows ? What are you thoughts on her head shot and standing 3/4 pose on black dance outfit? Besides the backdrop

Feb 26 13 06:08 am  Link  Quote 
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RachelReilly
Posts: 1,699
Washington, District of Columbia, US


I don't like ANY of them!

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130224/18/512ac6e7a1230_m.jpg

She looks miserable!
Why are her hands tangled in her hair?
Skin looks a little blurry(retouching is a whole different story, I still
Don't know how to retouch skin haha).
Careful where her eyes are looking.. Seeing majority of whites is not attractive. And the stray hairs in the black bkground could be edited out
So yes you have a light pointed at her in the background but light on her face would be good too.
And about lighting, there's are no shadows and highlights in the guitar picture.. It's boring.
Feb 26 13 06:11 am  Link  Quote 
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M V Photography
Posts: 8
Parma, Ohio, US


RachelReilly wrote:
I don't like ANY of them!

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130224/18/512ac6e7a1230_m.jpg

She looks miserable!
Why are her hands tangled in her hair?
Skin looks a little blurry(retouching is a whole different story, I still
Don't know how to retouch skin haha).
Careful where her eyes are looking.. Seeing majority of whites is not attractive. And the stray hairs in the black bkground could be edited out
So yes you have a light pointed at her in the background but light on her face would be good too.
And about lighting, there's are no shadows and highlights in the guitar picture.. It's boring.

I understand your points above ( eyes, hand, stray hair) but what I dont get is the lighting comment. There is light on her face from the side. I wanted the shadow on her right side so the light was to her left plus one behind her. I thought the lighting was good in this one.

Feb 26 13 06:53 am  Link  Quote 
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RachelReilly
Posts: 1,699
Washington, District of Columbia, US


Im not a fan of the lighting at all. It's too dark maybe the way you executed it isn't appealing.
Feb 26 13 07:35 am  Link  Quote 
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