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alberta86
Posts: 64
Orlando, Florida, US


Hello!  Thank you so much for looking.

I would appreciate it if you could critique my work.  I'm hoping you can shed some light on what I did right and the things I need to improve on; that way I can choose the proper material to study and get better. If possible, please share a book, article or video that can help me in the areas I lack.  I know that's asking a lot- I will be your best friend though ;-).

SOME BACKGROUND:
I've been practicing retouching for about 1 year now.  So far I have read "Photoshop Restoration & Retouching-3rd Edition" by Katrin Eismann and studied "Beauty & Hair Retouching High End Techniques" by Natalia Taffarel.
Areas of weakness that I'm already aware of are compositing, color tones and sharpening.  I don't use High Frequency Separation because each time I do, it slows down my computer and sometimes it corrupts my files. I also wonder what retouching would be like with a tablet :-). 

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Original http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/13 … 4392c2.jpg
Color http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/13 … d23b34.jpg
BW http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/13 … 5d9e46.jpg

Original Photo
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130320/21/514a86aaa8fb6.jpg

My Retouch
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130320/20/514a8502446ad.jpg

BW version
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130320/21/514a8753089cb.jpg
Mar 20 13 09:26 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Motordrive Photography
Posts: 2,347
Lodi, California, US


I think well done for the most part, it is very much illustration style now.
The eyes seem too dark to me now, the back and white also looks dark.
Mar 21 13 11:52 am  Link  Quote 
Retoucher
alberta86
Posts: 64
Orlando, Florida, US


Motordrive Photography wrote:
I think well done for the most part, it is very much illustration style now.
The eyes seem too dark to me now, the back and white also looks dark.

Thank you so much for your feedback!!

Not sure what you mean by "illustration style now".  Is that a good thing or bad thing???

Mar 21 13 03:31 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Ruben Vasquez
Posts: 3,089
Puyallup, Washington, US


alberta86 wrote:
Thank you so much for your feedback!!

Not sure what you mean by "illustration style now".  Is that a good thing or bad thing???

To say it looks like an illustration is to say that it no longer looks like a photograph but instead, looks more like an artists illustration. If that is the effect that you're going for then yes, that's a good thing; but if that's not the effect you're going for then no, it's not a good thing. That means it looks fake as the retouching is obvious.

For me it still like a photograph but thanks mostly to the make-up, it's leaning a little toward the illustrative look which I think looks interesting to be honest. As far as the retouching is concerned I think you did good. I like what you did with the eye make-up, the additional eye lashes was a good choice and you reshaped the eyebrows nicely. And the skin tone looks good.

There are some things I would change though. I recommend putting in some more eyelashes on her left eye (viewers right), so that the two match better. You lost a lot of the color in the eyes and the whites look a little too white for me. Her hair is a strange greenish blue (especially in the top right corner), as are her eyebrows. Looks like you lost some of the texture when you extended the eye make-up. 

There are some areas that could use some more dodge and burn. For instance, I would try to blend the shadow under her cheekbone some. It looks like a strange stripe (poor make-up perhaps?), that becomes abruptly dark and kinda makes her look a little gaunt so I would dodge that some. The jawline looks a bit odd as it's just as dark as the shadow it's casting on her neck so I would dodge the jawline some as well. I would also burn the highlight along the top right edge of her lip (viewers left), as it doesn't quite match the lighting (take a look at the original to see what I mean). There are some dark stripes on her forehead leading to her hair that I would dodge as well as some dark speckles throughout her left (viewers right), eyebrow region. It doesn't look quite as smooth as the eye make-up on her right eye.

Mar 21 13 05:36 pm  Link  Quote 
Retoucher
alberta86
Posts: 64
Orlando, Florida, US


Ruben Vasquez wrote:
To say it looks like an illustration is to say that it no longer looks like a photograph but instead, looks more like an artists illustration. If that is the effect that you're going for then yes, that's a good thing; but if that's not the effect you're going for then no, it's not a good thing. That means it looks fake as the retouching is obvious.

Thank you so much for the awesome critique!  I wasn't going for an illustration effect so I guess it's a bad thing.  A perfect example that I don't know when to stop retouching http://www.modelmayhem.com/po.php?thread_id=884728

So in short, I guess you're saying that I really need to work on my dodging and burning. wink  Got it!

Mar 21 13 06:14 pm  Link  Quote 
Retoucher
alberta86
Posts: 64
Orlando, Florida, US


Guess I better study "adding texture" as well.  For the blue eye shadow, I just created a layer, then painted blue and then reduced the opacity.  Then on another layer, I healed the two (dark blue and blue) colors together.  I have the slightest clue how to add texture on top of that.
Mar 21 13 07:35 pm  Link  Quote 
Retoucher
alberta86
Posts: 64
Orlando, Florida, US


2nd Attempt - thanks for the input
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130322/10/514c8fa713a7d.jpg

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Color revision http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/13 … 186277.jpg
BW revision http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/13 … a671a3.jpg
Mar 22 13 10:12 am  Link  Quote 
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