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Model

Kami Mahoney

Posts: 8

Denver, Colorado, US

Please tell me why you would or would not work with me. And what photos are not helping me and why. Plus any other critique you have based on my portfolio. Don't be afraid to be honest!

Mar 22 13 01:15 pm Link

Photographer

Wendy Hurst Portrait

Posts: 249

Riverton, Utah, US

You need some more natural looking images that feature your ability to model with your whole body. The images you have are okay to start. In my opinion, I'd use this one as your avatar instead of the one you have now, it has a better match between your expression, pose, and mood and I think it's your best so far:

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130207/07/5113cee0e4152_m.jpg

Conversely, this one looks like it made it into your portfolio by accident. It doesn't show your ability to model and features more the gentleman than yourself. I'd take it out:

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130321/09/514b32fd514d1_m.jpg

As you keep modeling, tap the photographer market for a unique blend of styles to add to your portfolio so it doesn't all start to look the same.

Good luck!

Mar 23 13 08:06 am Link

Photographer

David Kirk

Posts: 4852

Ottawa, Ontario, Canada

This one is lovely.  Great job with the hair and makeup.  This one would make me want to shoot with you.
https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130207/07/5113cee0e4152_m.jpg


You look good in the bottom of this, but the top photo makes you seem very short.  I realize you're bending over, but it is difficult to tell how much.
https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110722/17/4e2a0f94a89e2_m.jpg

These are your worst I think...
https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110723/01/4e2a83899f353_m.jpg

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130213/14/511c15ead33af_m.jpg

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130321/09/514b32fd514d1_m.jpg

Photos with so much retouching that the skin no longer looks real are not attractive.  This is no exception and there is something lacking in the overall execution of this.
https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110713/13/4e1e030ab0de6_m.jpg

I hope that's helpful.

Mar 23 13 08:38 am Link

Photographer

Fist Full of Ish

Posts: 2301

Aiken, South Carolina, US

I think you'd be a great subject.  Between art, bodypaint, and bizarre concepts, we should find common ground.

Mar 23 13 11:57 pm Link

Photographer

helmich

Posts: 40

Leiden, Zuid-Holland, Netherlands

Two things:

- the make up could be more subtle/natural for portfolio images
- your expressions don't vary a lot

other than that, great port!

Mar 24 13 03:01 am Link

Photographer

Lee_Photography

Posts: 9863

Minneapolis, Minnesota, US

As a model you have a great look, with super long legs

But as your photos go none really showcase you as a professional model

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130321/10/514b405100d36_m.jpg
Do you notice the big fan behind your head? That is a big distraction
For me the eyebrows are clashing with your hair color

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130130/21/5109fe0b42ac7_m.jpg
This is what I would call a frumpy pose in front of a busy background

https://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130207/07/5113cee0e4152_m.jpg
Beautiful model
Know your body, in this your hips are being shown to the camera at their widest point, simply stand on an angle to camera [slimming effect]

As to working with you, yes I think you could produce some remarkable images

Wish you well

Mar 24 13 09:16 am Link