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Model
Donna DeFrance
Posts: 24
Hope, Alaska, US


I feel it may be too cluttered. Any input would be appreciated. Ideas on what you would like to see more of, less of...etc. Thank you!
Apr 05 13 02:54 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Wendy Hurst Portrait
Posts: 245
North Salt Lake, Utah, US


I'll start with this: some experience is better than no experience as long as you learn something doing it. Anything I'm about to say is to help you achieve your goal to be part of a modeling campaign for diabetics who feel restricted by their illness.

Put simply, agencies and photographers look for a basic concept in a model's portfolio: your looks (obviously). They want to see your face in a headshot, your body, and what you can do with both of them (a variety of expressions and poses).

I looked carefully at each image in your portfolio right now and searched diligently for the best of three elements. Of the available images, I found two worth keeping in that regard:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/100620/12/4c1e6800f1049_m.jpg (I think this should be your avatar, it's lovely!)

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120414/00/4f8923c0d67a7_m.jpg

Here are some tips about how to improve some others in your port:

I really like the composition of this image and the expression on your face in this one:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120518/03/4fb6299dc94d8_m.jpg

The retouch overpowers the real impact of this image: you.

This one isn't bad either, except for the ginormous photographer logo at the bottom:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/100930/07/4ca49b28a66b3_m.jpg

So here's what I would suggest if you really want to get serious about building your portfolio in a way that will help you reach your goal: take out the extras, keep the essentials, and work with photographers nearby who have a good eye specifically for composition and for consistent lighting.

I did a search for photographers in your area and found one that might be a good candidate for that. I don't know them, I've never talked to them, I've only looked at their portfolio and recommend them purely on their final results so far.  http://www.modelmayhem.com/2877600

A final recommendation on posing. Don't tip your face to the camera. Turning right and left and straight are going to be your best friends for your facial shape. Practice this with a competent photographer and your portfolio will grow in quality and hopefully get you where you want to go.

I hope this is helpful. Good luck!
Apr 06 13 12:44 pm  Link  Quote 
Makeup Artist
ImageBeautique
Posts: 169
London, England, United Kingdom


Firstly, as said above, i would use this as your avatar..

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/18212666 - it is by far your nicest photo

Secondly i would remove this immediately...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31562866 - the wig and makeup looks childish and does nothing for your complexion.

I would also remove all the snap shot photos you have put in there. You have plenty of professional photos in there so the snap shots are unneccesary.

Try working with as many photogrpahers as possible and build up your experience. you could do with working on your poses and facial expressions...

Good luck smile
Apr 10 13 07:01 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Fist Full of Ish
Posts: 1,917
Oak Ridge, Tennessee, US


You have an interesting mouth.
Apr 11 13 01:25 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Donna DeFrance
Posts: 24
Hope, Alaska, US


Perceptive Portraits wrote:
I'll start with this: some experience is better than no experience as long as you learn something doing it. Anything I'm about to say is to help you achieve your goal to be part of a modeling campaign for diabetics who feel restricted by their illness.

Put simply, agencies and photographers look for a basic concept in a model's portfolio: your looks (obviously). They want to see your face in a headshot, your body, and what you can do with both of them (a variety of expressions and poses).

I looked carefully at each image in your portfolio right now and searched diligently for the best of three elements. Of the available images, I found two worth keeping in that regard:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/100620/12/4c1e6800f1049_m.jpg (I think this should be your avatar, it's lovely!)

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120414/00/4f8923c0d67a7_m.jpg

Here are some tips about how to improve some others in your port:

I really like the composition of this image and the expression on your face in this one:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120518/03/4fb6299dc94d8_m.jpg

The retouch overpowers the real impact of this image: you.

This one isn't bad either, except for the ginormous photographer logo at the bottom:

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/100930/07/4ca49b28a66b3_m.jpg

So here's what I would suggest if you really want to get serious about building your portfolio in a way that will help you reach your goal: take out the extras, keep the essentials, and work with photographers nearby who have a good eye specifically for composition and for consistent lighting.

I did a search for photographers in your area and found one that might be a good candidate for that. I don't know them, I've never talked to them, I've only looked at their portfolio and recommend them purely on their final results so far.  http://www.modelmayhem.com/2877600

A final recommendation on posing. Don't tip your face to the camera. Turning right and left and straight are going to be your best friends for your facial shape. Practice this with a competent photographer and your portfolio will grow in quality and hopefully get you where you want to go.

I hope this is helpful. Good luck!

Thank you so much for your feedback and suggestions!

Apr 22 13 12:50 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Donna DeFrance
Posts: 24
Hope, Alaska, US


ImageBeautique wrote:
Firstly, as said above, i would use this as your avatar..

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/18212666 - it is by far your nicest photo

Secondly i would remove this immediately...

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31562866 - the wig and makeup looks childish and does nothing for your complexion.

I would also remove all the snap shot photos you have put in there. You have plenty of professional photos in there so the snap shots are unneccesary.

Try working with as many photogrpahers as possible and build up your experience. you could do with working on your poses and facial expressions...

Good luck smile

Thank you for the honesty and suggestions!

Apr 22 13 12:51 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Lee_Photography
Posts: 8,761
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130422/00/5174e90d61da2_m.jpg
In some of your photos you seem to lack energy, like this one

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120518/14/4fb6bfac2bf7e_m.jpg
Where as in this you look like you are full of life

Wish you well
Apr 24 13 03:54 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Donna DeFrance
Posts: 24
Hope, Alaska, US


Lee_Photography wrote:
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130422/00/5174e90d61da2_m.jpg
In some of your photos you seem to lack energy, like this one

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120518/14/4fb6bfac2bf7e_m.jpg
Where as in this you look like you are full of life

Wish you well

Thank you for your input!

Apr 24 13 08:27 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Coyote Creations NW
Posts: 131
Vancouver, Washington, US


General comments for your portfolio.  Some images need to be about you, not the make up or costume. Find a photographer who can focus on showing your features.  One or two true head shots would help.  Eyes are critical and yours are nice. Minimize dark makeup below your eyes and get the photographer to put enough light onto your face to show distinct catch lights.  I like some of the outfits.  They can really show your abilities, but you didn't take advantage. The tiger body paint is fun, but tigers move.  They slink and are sinuous.  Try flowing from pose to pose so there is more sense of motion in your poses.  Overall, you have some good images, just keep adding better and dropping weaker ones.
Apr 26 13 06:44 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Donna DeFrance
Posts: 24
Hope, Alaska, US


Coyote Creations NW wrote:
General comments for your portfolio.  Some images need to be about you, not the make up or costume. Find a photographer who can focus on showing your features.  One or two true head shots would help.  Eyes are critical and yours are nice. Minimize dark makeup below your eyes and get the photographer to put enough light onto your face to show distinct catch lights.  I like some of the outfits.  They can really show your abilities, but you didn't take advantage. The tiger body paint is fun, but tigers move.  Tthey slink and are sinuous.  Try flowing from pose to pose so there is more sense of motion in your poses.  Overall, you have some good images, just keep adding better and dropping weaker ones.

Thank you!

Apr 27 13 12:50 am  Link  Quote 
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