To start off about your comment some of the effects might have been requested by clients:
Since this is YOUR book however only show images that are the way you would have wanted it.
The white gown shot could be cool, but I'd bring the water all the way to the edge and get rid of those horrible rocks then it might be a portfolio shot..
This works great:
This works except for the strange eye thing
you tend to overdo the skin softening stuff, it may be fine for MM and the facebook crowd but not for serious advertising. IF you want to push the digital 'look', there was an interesting thread here:http://www.modelmayhem.com/po.php?thread_id=887619
bottom line, make sure no one knows you were there.