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Photographer
Sinovah Kane Photog
Posts: 41
Chicago, Illinois, US


What advice do you have for me?
May 01 13 10:24 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Jupiter Red
Posts: 521
New York, New York, US


Me please!
"Take the time to assess your body of work and give you the best advice on improvement"
May 01 13 10:42 am  Link  Quote 
Model
winking_wonder
Posts: 5,583
New York, New York, US


shahzaade wrote:
Me please!
"Take the time to assess your body of work and give you the best advice on improvement"

Sure but be gentle please..

May 01 13 10:58 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
S K E L E T O N K E Y
Posts: 2,110
Louth, England, United Kingdom


I Ference Photography wrote:
Please take the time to assess my port and give me as many pointers as you can for improvement!

Your portfolio is really lovely and takes on such a beautiful and creative form.
I'm so jelous of your locations.

there isn't a whole lot I feel I can critique on, as I see your work more as a raw art than something that should be polished and perfect.
Saying that there are a few things I noticed.

I think in some of your shots you could have tried harder to get the right light direction and intensity/contrast.
For instance:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/19984691

I'm not too keen on this shot, I see what you're trying to achieve but I dont think it was excecuted as well as it could have been, light wise. and it also looks like you put a filter over it, as it looks a bit smudgey. It's not bad, but it could have been much better.

All in all I really like your work, and you should keep striving to get better and better smile

May 01 13 12:16 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Beth Chambers
Posts: 465
London, England, United Kingdom


Tell me what you really think, plus my strongest/weakest image(s) please smile
May 01 13 02:58 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
KristianaRose
Posts: 585
Denver, Colorado, US


Option B, please. : )
May 01 13 07:07 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
_eMMe_
Posts: 842
Florence, Toscana, Italy


Take your time, please.
May 02 13 08:02 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Dora Ray
Posts: 43
Toronto, Ontario, Canada


Curious
May 02 13 01:17 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Chelsea Booth
Posts: 10
WILKES BARRE, Pennsylvania, US


Take your time, and let me know everything that crosses your mind!! I want to improve my portfolio!! smile
May 02 13 08:24 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Ashley Alexiss
Posts: 291
Boston, Massachusetts, US


Be brutally honest smile
May 03 13 11:12 am  Link  Quote 
Model
HEATHER 19
Posts: 1,134
Boston, Massachusetts, US


Take the time to assess your body of work and give you the best advice on improvement (if you need it). Please-always need to improve smile Thanks
May 03 13 11:30 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Casey Wrightsman Photo
Posts: 25
San Diego, California, US


I would like to know the truth
May 03 13 02:08 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Joseph William
Posts: 2,007
Chicago, Illinois, US


S K E L E T O N  K E Y wrote:
Take the time to assess your body of work and give you the best advice on improvement (if you need it).

please

May 03 13 02:17 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Cecilia Ruth
Posts: 16
London, England, United Kingdom


Would like honest critique please
May 03 13 02:24 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Azia Rose
Posts: 228
Portland, Oregon, US


Please be as severe as possible!
May 03 13 02:40 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
S K E L E T O N K E Y
Posts: 2,110
Louth, England, United Kingdom


Paul Tirado Photography wrote:
Take a look and let me know. As severe as you wish.

I like your work, But I think for someone who is able to create such polished and well composited images, I also noticed that unfortunetely you don't always seem pick what could have been the strongest or best framed photo from a shoot.
For instance:
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/8682378
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30426687
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/24728855
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/15491602
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/12469496
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/11166017
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29262305
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/29262395

All of these shots to me, just don't seem like they were honestly the strongest or most interesting images out of their shoots. I'm not saying they are bad, but they just don't shine out to me. I feel like their could have been a better shot, or if there wasn't then you weren't trying your best.

I do like your current avi, and I think you do have some quite strong work in there, but I honestly don't see a stand out style or process that would make me look at an uncredited image and think "yeah that's a Paul Tirado".
Not sure if that's because you are still experimenting with different styles and working on diversity, or just experimenting, but that's just my opinion.

May 04 13 01:49 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
S K E L E T O N K E Y
Posts: 2,110
Louth, England, United Kingdom


L Raye wrote:
Take your time!

I see some good photos and vision, but I don't see unique unfortunetely, after reading your bio.
Your work seems to be a mix of nice and meh, I really quite like this one:
18+

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/31708035

It's well composited, well lit and has a nice story to it too.
But I think you could do better in angling and framing your models, especially in locations, such as:
18+

http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30115647}
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/18174479
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/12104513
http://www.modelmayhem.com/portfolio/pic/30115632

It's either the model could have been moved slightly or altered her pose, you could have framed or angled the shot better. Just the little things that end up making what could have been a fairly strong image into an ok, or meh seen it before image.

May 04 13 08:25 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
S K E L E T O N K E Y
Posts: 2,110
Louth, England, United Kingdom


Jordan LW wrote:
I'm in! Love criticism!

Ok, first off: The bio!!!
Oh my word of words, I made myself read it all even though my eyes started to cross over. Paragraphs people!

I don't need to know about your grandfather or how you attend car shows, I just need to know roughly what type of modelling work you are after, and what your limitations/genres are.

Now onto your portfolio. Not much to say right now. You have a nice look, and if you stick with it then I guess you could do fairly well as a hobbiest model, maybe branch out into the older commercial side smile
None of your photos right now are overwhelming or stand out, but they aren't turds either.
I think you would do well to shoot with a commercial/beauty photographer and get some clean portraits and beauty shots in your portfolio. Nothing fancy or over styled/processed. This would definetely help your portfolio and workflow grow in quality.

May 04 13 09:05 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
S K E L E T O N K E Y
Posts: 2,110
Louth, England, United Kingdom


Maria Panina wrote:
I'm all for improvement. Please, have a look

Your work is nice, but to me it doesn't seem 'alive'
It doesn't have focus in the sense that you could have made more of an effort.
Most of your portfolio, especially the first two beauty closeups bother me.
I don't feel they were the best from that shoot, they could have been much better, better framed, even better cropped.
It's not unflattering or bad, but there is nothing that stands out or pops to me.
Not sure if it's also your toning, allot of your photos seem to have the vibrance pulled down? and or desaturated in some way and highlights have been pulled down, which doesn't always work.
I think just testing more and working on post prod techniques will even out a style that will work the best for you soon. smile

Jul 15 13 09:18 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
S K E L E T O N K E Y
Posts: 2,110
Louth, England, United Kingdom


Dakota Maverick Photo wrote:
Would definitely love the latter, please!

Firstly, Not sure why you have experienced in your profile, you elude that you are quite new to photography, haven't worked with too many people. Maybe it was a mistake.

Secondly, the portfolio:

I don't really know what sort of direction you hope to take, or that you are still experimenting with different genres and trying to find a strong point, I get that.
Right now your work just screams "safe", you want to shoot darker, edgier and more intense work, you're not going to get very far without learning a few things about direction and models.
There's nothing intense about any of the photos you have up right now.
Ok so the models expressions vary slightly from "sexy eyes" to blank stare or slight awkward smile. I'm guessing you don't really plan out a shoot idea too well, or talk to the model(s) about how you want them to model before you go ahead.
I guess all I can really say is, keep shooting, try to pick maybe 1 or 2 genres to strengthen yourself on and test solely on that sort of thing for a while, and work on perhaps hiring a professional model and getting some good "intense" shots, as I'm sure you will be happier with the results.

Regards
Allanah

Jul 15 13 09:29 am  Link  Quote 
Model
C A T H Y
Posts: 5,464
Anaheim, California, US


Option B please. smile
Jul 15 13 09:31 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
S K E L E T O N K E Y
Posts: 2,110
Louth, England, United Kingdom


Harold Rose wrote:

You need a couple more years of experience before giving others  crit.

Oooo, I hope that was an open invitation posting in here Harold. wink

Jul 15 13 09:38 am  Link  Quote 
Model
NicoleNudes
Posts: 3,844
Toronto, Ontario, Canada


Best advice big_smile
Jul 15 13 10:19 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
DRaskin Photography
Posts: 164
Sacramento, California, US


I'll take a nice healthy dose of "take your time" critique with a side of constructive criticism and how I can do better. Thanks.
Jul 15 13 12:12 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
RTE Photography
Posts: 1,007
NORTH HOLLYWOOD, California, US


Hit me, don't hold back.
Tommy
Jul 15 13 12:20 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
P I X I E
Posts: 35,309
Toronto, Ontario, Canada


Go ahead and tell me your best advice. smile
Jul 15 13 03:00 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Jhomel
Posts: 180
Singapore, Singapore, Singapore


Take the time and hear from you soon smile
Jul 15 13 05:55 pm  Link  Quote 
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Koryn
Posts: 36,372
Boston, Massachusetts, US


I'm just returning to shooting, after taking almost two years off, so  yeah, I could probably benefit from a critique.

What I have in terms of new work (what you see in the "unassigned" album) is probably sort of limited and crappy, since I just resumed modeling again. I am doing a trip out of region next month and will be shooting some trade work with several people who are actually above the skill levels of those I shot ALL the trade work with (both new and old stuff) you see currently in this portfolio. I'm hoping after that, I will be all set in terms useful updating.

Regardless, it's been awhile and modeling again still feels strange. Feedback is probably good to have.
Jul 15 13 06:00 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Izzie G
Posts: 9
Shreveport, Louisiana, US


Give it to me. wink
Jul 15 13 06:07 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Jorge Kreimer
Posts: 2,274
Los Angeles, California, US


Option 2, thanks!
Jul 15 13 08:16 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Sarah_
Posts: 1,487
Denver, Colorado, US


I choose "Take the time to assess your body of work and give you the best advice on improvement" please! smile
Jul 15 13 08:18 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Mea Culpa
Posts: 353
Brisbane, Queensland, Australia


I wanna crawl out of this black and blue! Rip me a new one! tongue
Jul 16 13 03:03 am  Link  Quote 
Model
TaylorHaze
Posts: 185
Dallas, Texas, US


Take a whack
Jul 16 13 03:13 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
S K E L E T O N K E Y
Posts: 2,110
Louth, England, United Kingdom


Thomas Prusso wrote:
i'm in! please let me know what i can do better.

Your bio gives me a head ache, I'm no grammar Nazi and I myself have terrible grammar but paragraph man!
I got through maybe 2 sentences and my eyes were rolling.

As for your portfolio:

Not much to say really, very amateurish. I guess everyone starts somewhere, even it's trying to copy every cliché done.
E.g. Girl with gun, Girl on train tracks, girl getting out of car & girl with shopping bags trying to look commercial yet has a weird almost concerning facial expression???
So far you have proven you can take a photo, now you have to prove you can take a GOOD photo.
There's not much I can critique separately other than just saying;

You need to keep testing, maybe assist some GOOD photographers in your local area and generally keep practising.

Jul 16 13 09:07 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
kane
Posts: 1,552
Biarritz, Aquitaine, France


I only want the abuse.
Jul 16 13 09:18 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
S K E L E T O N K E Y
Posts: 2,110
Louth, England, United Kingdom


New Image Creations wrote:
Hit me!

Hmmm

Your work bothers me.

I don't think you have a natural good eye, as your whole portfolio is just so hit and miss.
I don't think you're challenging yourself artistically or technically enough.
I'm looking at some photos (especially the beauties) and thinking "is this truly the best from the shoot?"
I didn't think so.
You have worked with some lovely models and makeup concepts, yet the results seem so half assed.
They look like the extras from the shoot you'd end up deleting or archiving in a harddrive for ever more.
I think you can do much better, but I'm concerned since you view yourself as experienced in your field that you may not want to.
Which is fair enough if you just do it as a hobby and don't see yourself as a competing photogtapher.
There are a few really nice 'finished' photos I will call them, that are in there, but most of it just looks unfinished and like outtakes I guess.
Need to push and motivate yourself harder as an artist!

Jul 16 13 09:18 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Evie Wolfe
Posts: 1,201
Nottingham, England, United Kingdom


Option 2 please, if you have the time smile
Jul 16 13 09:21 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Tirage
Posts: 38
Bristol, England, United Kingdom


Hey Allanah,

not sure where you're at with this... but if you have a chance I'm gonna try and be a big boy and take the pain. Your work is proper good btw!

Chur smile
Jul 16 13 09:46 am  Link  Quote 
Model
Raven Blake
Posts: 58
Calgary, Alberta, Canada


Option number 2 please...
Jul 16 13 05:26 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
ElectronicDarkroom
Posts: 1
Portland, Oregon, US


I always appreciate honest critiques and advice. Thanks in advance.
Jul 16 13 05:46 pm  Link  Quote 
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