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Photographer
The Signature Image
Posts: 12,055
Gorham, Maine, US


Star wrote:

no. I would elaborate- but just no.

Uh-huh. I thought not. Oh, Star you can elaborate if you like? What? Need my okay? You have my okay to critique me and my work if you like? Rip me up. Tell me a critique would not be worth your time -- just let me comment in return.

Sep 14 13 05:36 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Star
Posts: 17,953
Los Angeles, California, US


RBM Photo wrote:

your first three images are a bit trite. However your second two look like maybe you are starting to find where you want to go. I especially do not like your avatar, it does not showcase the quality your photos could have.

I would weed down your portfolio to just the best images, if you do that you will get a better quality of model and that is the goal, isn't it? To work with people who bring your game up.

These are the ones you should keep

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130519/14/51993dfdb4f82_m.jpg

for now, hopefully you will replace will something better in the next year or so

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130519/13/51993a98cf883_m.jpg

go back to the raw file and bring out the shadows, you can then use the tools in lightroom to control exactly where your shadow fall off is. Right now it just doesn't read the way it could with a bit more finessing

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/120102/20/4f02870022886_m.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/110821/18/4e51b6873ba48_m.jpg

lose the spot on her face and let it all be black. A white vigniette might be good

also add these ones in

https://www.facebook.com/photo.php?fbid … =3&theater

https://www.facebook.com/photo.php?fbid … =3&theater

https://www.facebook.com/photo.php?fbid … =3&theater

Right now your models are controlling the images more than you are. And there is no reason to not go dark, but if you are going dark go dark. Don't play act at darkness, find it in them. Make them sit still, or have them breath quick but shallow breaths, just find a way to make it about your direction and your focus and not them wanting to play at being a vampire.

Also styling is an issue for you, the images of death you have a velvet cloak. That, IMO cheapens the feel of the images. The cloak feels velure, it doesn't feel like death incarnate.

I would start shopping for vintage dresses. Damaged vintage is your friend, you can destroy it and nobody cares.

These images may not be the best in my portfolio, but I think you can see where the darker side meets fashion (which is kinda what I do) but still shows an emotion. Model is Kickham, she is wearing a vintage slip in some and a vintage aerialist costume in others. They are lightroom processed with no photoshop retouching.

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130914/17/523502230c071.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130914/17/523501f6a1104.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130914/17/523501b36db7d.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130914/17/5235023ec4d56.jpg

this one is a stilt walker on break from a video shoot, I added in the necklace from the wardrobe stylist and did some stills behind the studio

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130914/17/52350328817bf.jpg

I know I don't do your exact same type of work, but I wanted to give you examples of ways to style etc... that might give you a bit more gold than brass. Finding a way to work with models is different for each person, but once you find that way you will be in a position to consistently create work you are proud of.

Sep 14 13 05:43 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Dean Johnson Photo
Posts: 57,725
Minneapolis, Minnesota, US


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The Signature Image wrote:

Uh-huh. I thought not. Oh, Star you can elaborate if you like? What? Need my okay? You have my okay to critique me and my work if you like? Rip me up. Tell me a critique would not be worth your time -- just let me comment in return.

She already said no. Please stop trolling.

Thanks

Sep 14 13 05:54 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
The Signature Image
Posts: 12,055
Gorham, Maine, US


Dean Johnson Photo wrote:

She already said no. Please stop trolling.

Thanks

I just asked a question? Asking for a clarification is not "...trolling." I just asked a follow-up question.

Sep 14 13 06:59 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Paul Albert
Posts: 444
Los Angeles, California, US


Star wrote:

Paul you haven't found a voice yet. You seem to be either looking at other people's work and attempting to emulate it or just plain not reaching far enough yet. The most important thing you will learn is how to pair a model with a concept. Until then you aren't ready for a critique.

Thank you, I appreciate the comments, and I have to admit I agree, I have mostly been working on technical aspects, and have been searching for a transition to bring in vision.

Sep 14 13 08:48 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Dallas J. Logan
Posts: 2,182
Brooklyn, New York, US


Shooting for a short period of time, trying to break into commercial photography and hopefully one day have professional agency representation. 

http://i245.photobucket.com/albums/gg63/DALLASJLOGAN/man7.jpg


http://i245.photobucket.com/albums/gg63/DALLASJLOGAN/photobucket1.jpg


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http://i245.photobucket.com/albums/gg63/DALLASJLOGAN/COURTNEY.jpg

http://i245.photobucket.com/albums/gg63/DALLASJLOGAN/CLAIRE1-2.jpg
Sep 15 13 12:30 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Sam WuFH
Posts: 2
Singapore, Singapore, Singapore


Hi, I'm Sam! A portrait/fashion photographer from Singapore. I'm a serious amateur just shooting for my portfolio currently, but I'm hoping to go pro one day! Hope to get a critique on my portfolio and I'd appreciate every comment you have for me. Thanks! big_smile

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130908/22/522d59627bbb3_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130821/06/5214c2a955cae_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130821/05/5214b5138034e_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130803/22/51fde6c904d6a_m.jpg
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130803/22/51fde5af92a7d_m.jpg
Sep 15 13 12:52 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
RBM Photo
Posts: 557
Bellbrook, Ohio, US


Thank you for your time and advice, I appreciate it.

Star wrote:
Also styling is an issue for you, the images of death you have a velvet cloak. That, IMO cheapens the feel of the images. The cloak feels velure, it doesn't feel like death incarnate.

I would start shopping for vintage dresses. Damaged vintage is your friend, you can destroy it and nobody cares.

Absolutely, my original intent for that concept was to use a decorative black Edwardian dress I purchased, but it arrived much smaller than I thought it was, probably was a child's dress. It did not fit and the cloak was the only other thing I had that would work. I am working on creating a better costume for that concept.

Sep 15 13 07:11 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Azia Rose
Posts: 228
Portland, Oregon, US


I'm not high fashion, I'm 5'7" and I'm doing this because I love it. Go ahead!
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130915/23/5236a8c992d1f.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130823/13/5217cb0ac8a91.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130820/12/5213c7090570e.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130708/12/51db0c355514b.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/130621/10/51c4925d3dfac.jpg
Sep 16 13 11:33 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
MVK Photography
Posts: 461
Augusta, Georgia, US


Hello!  I'm Molly, I am 23, and I started my journey into fashion photography about 3 years ago.  I really appreciate a good critique and a new set of eyes on my work, so thank you in advance if you decide to take the time.  All of my images here on MM are in sets so I've grabbed some individuals from flickr (I don't have a ton of recent work on there, but hopefully this will suffice).  Thanks for looking!

http://farm6.staticflickr.com/5345/9278152931_1c91aa13b0.jpg

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7450/9280971840_e0ccd6c514.jpg

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7420/9278136891_a9799d7c12.jpg

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Sep 17 13 03:37 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
StanovaA
Posts: 22
Cardiff, Wales, United Kingdom


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140124/15/52e2f85090328_m.jpg

Go hard
Jan 24 14 04:46 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Serifus
Posts: 14
Waterloo, Ontario, Canada


Wouldn't mind some more feedback on this one.
http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140110/22/52d0ea6f8bd29_m.jpg
Jan 25 14 02:19 am  Link  Quote 
Photographer
BAR Solomon
Posts: 21
Santa Fe, New Mexico, US


Here's a few from my last project. Inspired by Plato's allegory of the cave and the Idea of humans experiencing their first moment of human consciousness.


http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7455/11635929006_29db3ce77f_o.png
First Human: The Ritual by barsolomon, on Flickr

http://farm4.staticflickr.com/3732/11635931506_7b9109f661_o.png
First human: The Discovery by barsolomon, on Flickr

http://farm4.staticflickr.com/3784/11635158795_30c5f9879e_o.png
First Human: The Resonance by barsolomon, on Flickr


http://farm3.staticflickr.com/2871/11635933316_80a31c6900_o.png
First Human: The Square by barsolomon, on Flickr

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7429/11635397593_5335a09756_o.png
First Human: The Circle by barsolomon, on Flickr
Jan 25 14 12:08 pm  Link  Quote 
Model
Alexx White
Posts: 9
Red Deer, Alberta, Canada


Me please! smile
Feb 06 14 08:56 pm  Link  Quote 
Photographer
Tia Renai_State of Mind
Posts: 16
Los Angeles, California, US


http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140126/13/52e577b3ab444.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140126/13/52e577d1a97d1.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140126/13/52e577978dcc5.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140126/13/52e5781551ff0.jpg

http://photos.modelmayhem.com/photos/140126/12/52e576e3cd2f7.jpg
Feb 06 14 10:48 pm  Link  Quote 
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