hmm, no not smoked enough cigarettes to be speechless
..ok stumbled across this a few times...n thought shall i ? ..So today been quiet ..
Ok first off, from what I see of the model she is attractive..but for me that is as far as it goes..the end of the line..the lighting for me is too flat..would prefer something more contrasty...even just a simple thing like the subway tickets...make them more bold or dramatic..that would lift the image..the background for me does not work.
You probably would not get away with it..but I would re-shoot it on the subway ..im guessing you would have to be quick. .or on a deserted railway line ( check that no power going through obviously) .though for that you would need to change the title.
Or just focus in on the tickets, zoom in on them
... Or since you appear to have brought an element of religion into the image ..an image of Salvador Dali springs to mind which maybe you to could adapt.